Over the past two years, the number of shoppers in Central Plaza has been steadily decreasing while the popularity of skateboarding has increased dramatically. Many Central Plaza store owners believe that the decrease in their business is due to the number of skateboard users in the plaza. There has also been a dramatic increase in the amount of litter and vandalism throughout the plaza. Thus, we recommend that the city prohibit skateboarding in Central Plaza. If skateboarding is prohibited here, we predict that business in Central Plaza will return to its previously high levels.
In the above scenario the author recommends that the city prohibit skateboarding in Central Plaza. it is further predicted that this will increase the business to previously high levels. Stated this way, the argument fails to mention several key factors on the basis of which it could be evaluated. Also, the recommendation has been hastily put forth and lacks through research. To justify the recommendation, the author concludes that increase in the presence of skateboarders has led to increased vandalism as well as public shunning the shopping plaza. However careful scrutiny will prove that there are several questions that need to be answered before any conclusions can be drawn.
First of all the argument readily assumes that the appearance of skateboarders has resulted in dwindling shoppers. this is a mere assumption made without a solid explanation. The argument would have been much more convincing if it was restated that decreasing crowds were making the plaza deserted enough for skateboarders to move freely. The capacity of shoppers to spend money because of slow economy may be one of the main reasons there is a downtrend in shopping. Other reasons such as the deteriorating quality of products in the shop or the opening of better stores in neighbourhood can also be one of the reasons shoppers don't prefer to go there. The next argument of increased vandalism has also been attributed to the presence of the skateboarders. This is a weak charge which completely ignores some of the key factors like the non presence of police or security in and around the plaza.Also the general maintainance is neglected in the plaza because of ignorance of the authorities and the shop owners.The author does not mention any strong reason to link skateboarders to vandalism or littering. The littering and vandalism could also have been caused by homeless people who come to the plaza to sleep at night because of no security personnel in the compound.
Also, the author notes that banning of skateboarding will curb all these issues and will increase the shoppers in the plaza. However this is a misguided conclusion. The author needs to answer the following questions. How will the shopping plaza be maintained ? Are the shops well stocked/ reasonably priced to attract potential buyers? Is the proper security for the shops and shopkeepers? Are the public amenities like washrooms and corridors clean and ready for use? if the author would have answered these questions convincingly and linked the skateboarders to all the problems , it would have been more convincing and believable.
In conclusion the authors recommendation has been based on weak evidence and reasoning. I would encourage the author to provide more exhaustive information about the present state of the shopping mall. The author should consider a wider set of scenarios to support his belief that increase in business will be achieved if skateboarding is banned.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
argument 1 -- OK
argument 2 -- OK
argument 3 -- OK
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.5 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 22 15
No. of Words: 480 350
No. of Characters: 2429 1500
No. of Different Words: 232 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.681 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.06 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.871 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 178 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 141 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 106 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 64 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 21.818 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 12.1 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.727 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.285 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.391 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.057 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 3 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: It
...rohibit skateboarding in Central Plaza. it is further predicted that this will inc...
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Line 3, column 116, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
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...ers has resulted in dwindling shoppers. this is a mere assumption made without a sol...
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Line 3, column 630, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...can also be one of the reasons shoppers dont prefer to go there. The next argument o...
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Suggestion: some
... a weak charge which completely ignores some of the key factors like the non presence of po...
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Suggestion: Also
...ice or security in and around the plaza.Also the general maintainance is neglected i...
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...ice or security in and around the plaza.Also the general maintainance is neglected i...
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Suggestion: The
... of the authorities and the shop owners.The author does not mention any strong reas...
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... no security personnel in the compound. Also, the author notes that banning of s...
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Suggestion: However,
...ill increase the shoppers in the plaza. However this is a misguided conclusion. The aut...
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Suggestion: If
... and corridors clean and ready for use? if the author would have answered these qu...
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... clean and ready for use? if the author would have answered these questions convincingly and linked...
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...ed the skateboarders to all the problems , it would have been more convincing and ...
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Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
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...ng and believable. In conclusion the authors recommendation has been based on weak e...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, may, so, well, in conclusion, such as, as well as, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 26.0 19.6327345309 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 12.9520958084 131% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 11.1786427146 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 13.6137724551 88% => OK
Pronoun: 22.0 28.8173652695 76% => OK
Preposition: 63.0 55.5748502994 113% => OK
Nominalization: 19.0 16.3942115768 116% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2474.0 2260.96107784 109% => OK
No of words: 477.0 441.139720559 108% => OK
Chars per words: 5.18658280922 5.12650576532 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.67336384929 4.56307096286 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.94898460728 2.78398813304 106% => OK
Unique words: 236.0 204.123752495 116% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.494758909853 0.468620217663 106% => OK
syllable_count: 766.8 705.55239521 109% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 4.96107784431 101% => OK
Article: 11.0 8.76447105788 126% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.22255489022 71% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 19.7664670659 126% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 22.8473053892 83% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 63.288469724 57.8364921388 109% => OK
Chars per sentence: 98.96 119.503703932 83% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.08 23.324526521 82% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.76 5.70786347227 66% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.15768463074 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 13.0 5.25449101796 247% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 8.20758483034 171% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 6.88822355289 87% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.67664670659 107% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.166697741583 0.218282227539 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0462962153274 0.0743258471296 62% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0488430697297 0.0701772020484 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.103729744783 0.128457276422 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0338846432064 0.0628817314937 54% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.6 14.3799401198 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 48.3550499002 108% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 12.197005988 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.82 12.5979740519 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.42 8.32208582834 101% => OK
difficult_words: 116.0 98.500998004 118% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 12.3882235529 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.1389221557 86% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.9071856287 109% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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