The following appeared as a letter to the editor from a Central Plaza store owner.
"Over the past two years, the number of shoppers in Central Plaza has been steadily decreasing while the popularity of skateboarding has increased dramatically. Many Central Plaza store owners believe that the decrease in their business is due to the number of skateboard users in the plaza. There has also been a dramatic increase in the amount of litter and vandalism throughout the plaza. Thus, we recommend that the city prohibit skateboarding in Central Plaza. If skateboarding is prohibited here, we predict that business in Central Plaza will return to its previously high levels."
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the recommendation is likely to have the predicted result. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the recommendation.
while it may be true that prohibiting skateboarding in the central plaza will restore the shopping business to it's previously high levels, the author does not explicitly state necessary evidences that are needed to warrant this resolution. Infact, quite a number of questions are needed to be answered to elucidate the highlighted arguments in this passage. I first wondered what relationship does skateboarding have with shopping such that would play an important role in customer's decisions to forfeit their choices for shopping in favor of skateboarding.
The first question that need to be answered here is that: are the people who used to patronize central plaza in shopping thesame with the skateboarders? this author vaguely stated the decline in the numbers of shoppers in comparing with the skateboarders. shopping and skateboarding are two incomparable endeavors that satisfy patently different needs. it can be inferred from the arguments that shoppers patronizes central plaza to satisfy their appetite while skateboarders, their physical fitness. so, to impute the rise in the number of skateboards to the decline in the number of shoppers is to contrast between two incomparable endeavors.
We may, however, assume the same people who shop also skate in the central plaza. Yet, we need to know what actually brought about their refusal to patronize central plaza in shopping. is it an increase in prices of goods or poor managerial experience? skaters, due to their need for fitness would prefer shopping light foods and energy drinks and snacks, if the prices of these commodities have actually skyrocketed in central plaza, they may want to buy their snacks and can drinks outside, where there are discounts.
The prompt also stated that there has also been a dramatic increase in the amount of litter and vandalism throughout the plaza. Another question that need to be answered here is: what are actually the litters? are they empty cans of drinks that could have come from skaters or food debris and snacks' nylon that could have been dropped by shoppers? The vandalism could have come from the skaters. however, more information is needed about the exact areas of central plaza that is been vandalized, such that could have affected their number of shopping patronage.
More so, are the skaters allowed to move just anywhere within the plaza? are their not restrictions to the areas they can cover as they move about? Only if these questions can be absolutely answered could the recommendation that the city prohibit skateboarding in central plaza hold reasonable evidence to predict that business in central plaza will return to its previously high levels.
Comments
e-rater score report
One more argument wanted
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 10 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 5 2
No. of Sentences: 12 15
No. of Words: 432 350
No. of Characters: 2207 1500
No. of Different Words: 188 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.559 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.109 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.708 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 158 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 124 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 86 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 50 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 36 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 18.412 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.917 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.39 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.675 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.14 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 1, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: While
while it may be true that prohibiting skatebo...
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Line 4, column 154, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: This
...hopping thesame with the skateboarders? this author vaguely stated the decline in th...
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Line 4, column 257, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Shopping
...rs in comparing with the skateboarders. shopping and skateboarding are two incomparable ...
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Line 4, column 354, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: It
... that satisfy patently different needs. it can be inferred from the arguments that...
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Line 4, column 502, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: So
... skateboarders, their physical fitness. so, to impute the rise in the number of sk...
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Line 7, column 186, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Is
...to patronize central plaza in shopping. is it an increase in prices of goods or po...
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Line 7, column 254, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Skaters
...of goods or poor managerial experience? skaters, due to their need for fitness would pr...
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Line 7, column 478, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[2]
Message: The verb 'can' requires the base form of the verb: 'drink'
Suggestion: drink
...ey may want to buy their snacks and can drinks outside, where there are discounts. ...
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Line 10, column 211, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Are
...here is: what are actually the litters? are they empty cans of drinks that could ha...
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Line 10, column 397, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: However
...alism could have come from the skaters. however, more information is needed about the e...
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Line 13, column 74, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Are
...to move just anywhere within the plaza? are their not restrictions to the areas the...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, first, however, if, may, so, while
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 19.6327345309 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 20.0 12.9520958084 154% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 11.1786427146 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 18.0 13.6137724551 132% => OK
Pronoun: 40.0 28.8173652695 139% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 61.0 55.5748502994 110% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 16.3942115768 43% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2265.0 2260.96107784 100% => OK
No of words: 432.0 441.139720559 98% => OK
Chars per words: 5.24305555556 5.12650576532 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.55901411391 4.56307096286 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.7763103763 2.78398813304 100% => OK
Unique words: 202.0 204.123752495 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.467592592593 0.468620217663 100% => OK
syllable_count: 690.3 705.55239521 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 4.96107784431 141% => OK
Article: 4.0 8.76447105788 46% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.22255489022 24% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 19.7664670659 101% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 22.8473053892 92% => OK
Sentence length SD: 60.8919329632 57.8364921388 105% => OK
Chars per sentence: 113.25 119.503703932 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.6 23.324526521 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.5 5.70786347227 44% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 11.0 5.25449101796 209% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.20758483034 85% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 6.88822355289 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.67664670659 192% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.268427108211 0.218282227539 123% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0887473614275 0.0743258471296 119% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0610296676543 0.0701772020484 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.16557726671 0.128457276422 129% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0449224265031 0.0628817314937 71% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.1 14.3799401198 98% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 48.3550499002 104% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 12.197005988 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.11 12.5979740519 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.37 8.32208582834 101% => OK
difficult_words: 101.0 98.500998004 103% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 12.3882235529 121% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.1389221557 93% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 11.9071856287 126% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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