As most of us are living in a peaceful sociey, we should not forget there are still lots of people who are starving or having no jobs, so the governments have the resposiblity to ensure the people under their regulation have jobs and essential support of making a living. In this condition, the fuding the arts will be the later consideration of the Government. Meanwhile, it does not means the arts will sacrifice for the people who are in needy situation. Do not worry about all of the troubles in front of us, especially in front of the Govermrnts. In my concern, funding arts and helping people who are out of work or straving are not controversial at most occasions, we are the most powerful living species in the world presently.
To begin with, the arts vary in many fields, the acient ones and the pieces of work in present, they are all vauable to human being. While it is the fact that there are so many contries at war or still in severe poverty could not develop or reserve the arts by their Governments as there are more emergent troubles the have to resolve immediately. It seems that there is no solution for these arts. However, there are also some answers to this problem. For instance, there was a famous huge budaha figure in the mountain in Iran, which was carved in the moutain where set in a huge cave in it thousands years ago, once destroyed by the rebelion of the Iran. The budaha figure in this scale of over one hundreds meters was the relic of the budhist religion, also the heritage of human beings, now gone. Recently there was a young couple form China, who leading a team both from China and Iran to reconstruct this big figure. At the this time , they invented a new method of representing this huge figure, the lights. Thousands of laser lights from the projectors were reflected on the cave where the figure once located, then the image of the budaha appeared again. This protection, or behavior shocked the world as it both showing some kind of protections and drawing all the attetions by the anti-war people. So Love and peace are the target of humans' forever, at this time, it funded, or rescued the arts.
In addtion, truly there are other places which could not fund the arts by the Governments, so they may search fo help from other countries. Decades ago, the Eygipt had no sufficient fudning for preserving the mummies from the pyramids, they turned to the US, as we saw the mumuies in the museums in US, they are well-presevered by the most advanced technolgy in the world. I have to say the Eygipy Government did a great job for the whole human beings in the protection of mummies.Besides the other objective reseasons, they made a wise choice by asking for helps instead of disfeasance by the Government.
Finally, I do not assume that funding the arts should be the Government behavior, instead, the individuals also could help to fund the arts well. As there are so many galleries as well as collectors in the wolrd, the arts could find their sponsorship except for the Goverments.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, finally, however, if, may, so, still, then, well, while, except for, for instance, kind of, as well as, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 25.0 19.5258426966 128% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 12.4196629213 72% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 14.8657303371 81% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.3162921348 97% => OK
Pronoun: 37.0 33.0505617978 112% => OK
Preposition: 71.0 58.6224719101 121% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 12.9106741573 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2501.0 2235.4752809 112% => OK
No of words: 540.0 442.535393258 122% => OK
Chars per words: 4.63148148148 5.05705443957 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.82057051367 4.55969084622 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.58252168245 2.79657885939 92% => OK
Unique words: 263.0 215.323595506 122% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.487037037037 0.4932671777 99% => OK
syllable_count: 780.3 704.065955056 111% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.59117977528 88% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 6.24550561798 208% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 8.0 4.99550561798 160% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.10617977528 129% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.38483146067 160% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.2370786517 104% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 23.0359550562 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 58.8309388424 60.3974514979 97% => OK
Chars per sentence: 119.095238095 118.986275619 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.7142857143 23.4991977007 109% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.28571428571 5.21951772744 120% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 7.80617977528 115% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 10.2758426966 107% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 5.13820224719 97% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.83258426966 103% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.116919045492 0.243740707755 48% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0347927563486 0.0831039109588 42% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0355567865942 0.0758088955206 47% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0838473673253 0.150359130593 56% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0345391683824 0.0667264976115 52% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.2 14.1392134831 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 63.02 48.8420337079 129% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 12.1743820225 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.87 12.1639044944 81% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.82 8.38706741573 105% => OK
difficult_words: 135.0 100.480337079 134% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 11.8971910112 113% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 11.2143820225 107% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.7820224719 119% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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