As the essay asserts that any piece of infromation would be miscontrued even if it seemed to be valid initially given that much of them finally turns out to be inaccurate, it makes me feel pessimistic about this view as if it will be an obstacle of the human beings when we want to make progress in any fields. While just because of we are human beings, the most clever primates to date on our planet, the evolvutions of the human society is a path simmered with erros and faluts which we considered them as right. As my concern, it is just the chances of making faults and being correted over and over will guide us to the bright futurs of ourselves and our society. I will elaborate my view in three points.
To begin with, there were lots of information we reffered as fact while proved to be wrong in the end. However, as the process of correcting, it was just the time we got evolved. Let's look at the stars,once the geocentrism was the common sense of people which populated the human society both in easten and western ancient civilizations. While after the meticulous observation by Copernicus, he assumed the heliocentrism was right as most of the stars aound us did not on the orbit of the Earth. Years after his death on fire as an sentence made by Pope given that Copernicus violate the constitution of the religion, more and more scientists found Copernicus was right, hence the new epoc of Astronomy began, it recorrected the misunderstanding of the astronomy theory by people for thousands of years. Here we found not only the erroness corrected by human by also the science evovled by this correcting. We should not be so pessimistic of receiving information, the more valuable for us is maintaining the skeptisim with it in that the doubts from the facts would make more progress, just like the apple that hit Newton, it enlighten Newton discovered the Gravity theory, while not every one would find such signicicant truth after being hit by apples.
As human beings ,we can not make no mistakes, while it is not the pretext of us to chase for new fingdings which could be wrong in some days. As we look at the stars, they are just like those Copernicus' efforts are shining to show us how many tough endeavors they were making. Once the Pluto was the ninth biggest planet in Solar system. While there was a debate on this planet with its significance among the nine stars. After decades of the efforts by scientist , they found it was the calculating fault made the Pluto the ninth biggest planets, now with the new standard of the biggest planets in Solar System, our scietific calculating and threory would be more accurate.
Finally, as we are afraid of making mistakes, we should know what causes it. Now adays, due to the development of the Internet, people may just consider matter from one or single aspects while not comprehensive evaluating, this requires us to consider things exhaustively and leave the potential erros to the people after us.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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...them finally turns out to be inaccurate, it makes me feel pessimistic about this ...
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Suggestion: because we
...make progress in any fields. While just because of we are human beings, the most clever prima...
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...g, it was just the time we got evolved. Lets look at the stars,once the geocentrism ...
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...e we got evolved. Lets look at the stars,once the geocentrism was the common sense of...
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...Earth. Years after his death on fire as an sentence made by Pope given that Copern...
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...just like the apple that hit Newton, it enlighten Newton discovered the Gravity theory, w...
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... being hit by apples. As human beings ,we can not make no mistakes, while it is...
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... many tough endeavors they were making. Once the Pluto was the ninth biggest planet ...
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...fter decades of the efforts by scientist , they found it was the calculating fault...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, finally, hence, however, if, look, may, so, while, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 27.0 19.5258426966 138% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 12.4196629213 97% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 14.8657303371 61% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.3162921348 80% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 55.0 33.0505617978 166% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 75.0 58.6224719101 128% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 12.9106741573 70% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2458.0 2235.4752809 110% => OK
No of words: 523.0 442.535393258 118% => OK
Chars per words: 4.69980879541 5.05705443957 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.78217453174 4.55969084622 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.63812530889 2.79657885939 94% => OK
Unique words: 267.0 215.323595506 124% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.51051625239 0.4932671777 103% => OK
syllable_count: 769.5 704.065955056 109% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 6.24550561798 224% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 3.0 4.99550561798 60% => OK
Subordination: 12.0 3.10617977528 386% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.38483146067 46% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.2370786517 89% => OK
Sentence length: 29.0 23.0359550562 126% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 91.2654688394 60.3974514979 151% => OK
Chars per sentence: 136.555555556 118.986275619 115% => OK
Words per sentence: 29.0555555556 23.4991977007 124% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.88888888889 5.21951772744 75% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 7.80617977528 128% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 10.2758426966 49% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 5.13820224719 136% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.83258426966 124% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.180140623957 0.243740707755 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0519994375411 0.0831039109588 63% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0732121293413 0.0758088955206 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.109199937649 0.150359130593 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0583743414698 0.0667264976115 87% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.2 14.1392134831 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.5 48.8420337079 103% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 12.1743820225 110% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.57 12.1639044944 87% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.52 8.38706741573 102% => OK
difficult_words: 114.0 100.480337079 113% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 19.0 11.8971910112 160% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.6 11.2143820225 121% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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