As student to teacher, son to my father, I have a lot of roles in daily life in the same way as others.There are a lot of definations and we should not let the defination in social groups that confine our minds and endeavor to make a better life.Here I would adress the uneccessity of this kind of criterion in our society, because the social group indentification is the roles shows to others who you were and who you are as a kind of label ,while It can not represent yourself as a whole.
First of all, you are who you are as a member in our society. We borned as a baby and bred by our parents, so we were the little kid in our parents’ eye. When we grow up, we go to education insttitutions to cultivate ourselves. Thun in teacher’s eyes, we are students.After we having a job, our boss call us clerk or other positions we supposed to be. All of these are a labels which means what we should do or not.As a son of our parents, I must take care of them as they are getting old. In the Universities I must study well to be a useful person to our sociey. At work I should try my best to prove my value to my company. On the other hand, I’m the customer when I go shopping.So the social group identificantion, in my opinion, is the label like car licensces.
Second, the label on you should not confine who you will be. There was a young man worked in a fashion clothes store in France, 2007, named Payet. He did not start his football career then.Playing football is a dream for him.While once found by the football player in an amateur league, Payet became a football player from lower level League in France, then with his hard working in the matches, he was matriculated by the France National Team. In the World Cup 2016, almost every one remembered his name as the No.10, one of the most important palyers in the football team, especially in the team who won the World Cup. Then the media found his working picture in the clothing store 2007, he said ,” If I still wokred there ,maybe now I was watching the matches in front of TV, now I standing on the stage of the world cup, It is so exciting.” So if he was confined as a clotheseller, then we could not watch a superstar on the pitch playing for the country. This is what I point out the social postion should not represent the most of you.
Thirdly, we should make clear between our social identification and what we should be or will be. Social indetification is given by others, while what the one living in your heart in also essential to ourselves. Because it will indicate your behavior and decision. I have been working for several years while I also have the dream of studying abroad, that’s why I am sitting here to tell you what I will do in the future.
In conclusion, we should make clear of ourselves beside our social indentification.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, if, may, second, so, still, then, third, thirdly, well, while, in conclusion, kind of, first of all, in my opinion, in the same way, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 25.0 19.5258426966 128% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 12.4196629213 137% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 14.8657303371 61% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.3162921348 80% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 75.0 33.0505617978 227% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 67.0 58.6224719101 114% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 12.9106741573 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2325.0 2235.4752809 104% => OK
No of words: 529.0 442.535393258 120% => OK
Chars per words: 4.39508506616 5.05705443957 87% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.79583152331 4.55969084622 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.73465397056 2.79657885939 98% => OK
Unique words: 261.0 215.323595506 121% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.493383742911 0.4932671777 100% => OK
syllable_count: 722.7 704.065955056 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.59117977528 88% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 15.0 6.24550561798 240% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 1.0 4.99550561798 20% => OK
Subordination: 10.0 3.10617977528 322% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.38483146067 160% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.2370786517 99% => OK
Sentence length: 26.0 23.0359550562 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 109.994363492 60.3974514979 182% => OK
Chars per sentence: 116.25 118.986275619 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.45 23.4991977007 113% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.15 5.21951772744 156% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 12.0 7.80617977528 154% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 10.2758426966 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 5.13820224719 19% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.83258426966 186% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.234963844257 0.243740707755 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0747000674039 0.0831039109588 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.057713151465 0.0758088955206 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.129071359101 0.150359130593 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0410172904994 0.0667264976115 61% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.5 14.1392134831 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.01 48.8420337079 127% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 12.1743820225 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.54 12.1639044944 70% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.52 8.38706741573 90% => OK
difficult_words: 87.0 100.480337079 87% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 27.5 11.8971910112 231% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 12.4 11.2143820225 111% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.7820224719 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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