No field of study can advance significantly unless it incorporates knowledge and experience from outside that field.
The author asserts that without outsider’s knowledge, any field of study cannot advance significantly. I, personally, agree with the speakers assertion. In this interconnected world, there are plethora of examples to support and cogently explain the speaker’s claim.
First, consider the advancement in the field of agriculture in last four or five decades. The advancements, such as farming without soil (also known as desert farming), cross breeding, green house farming for off-season production, and so on, would never posssible if chemist, genetic engineer, botanist did not bring their knowledge into the field of agriculture. Just knowledge of how to grow the better crops, how to protect the crops from insects and other harmful diseases, or how to nurture the crops was never enough for such a advancement in agriculture which we see today.
For more striking example, consider the field of engineering, especially a civil engineering. Before the invention of computer-aided simulation techniques to analyse the behavior of structures under intricate loading system, it was very hard for engineers to estimate the structural parameters so that the structure withstand the predicted load safely. The knowledge of software engineers, however, changed the entire faith of civil engineering. After the invention of computer-aided softwares, civil engineers can analys the most intricate structural design in a click on a computer keyboard. such a significant advancement in civil engineering has became only possible because outsiders, such as computer or software engineers, bring their knowledge in.
In sum, in this interconnected world each field of study is indirectly dependable to knowledge of outsider for significant advancement.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 134, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'speakers'' or 'speaker's'?
Suggestion: speakers'; speaker's
...ficantly. I, personally, agree with the speakers assertion. In this interconnected world...
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Line 2, column 532, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...ure the crops was never enough for such a advancement in agriculture which we see...
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Line 3, column 595, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Such
...sign in a click on a computer keyboard. such a significant advancement in civil engi...
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Message: Use past participle here: 'become'.
Suggestion: become
...nt advancement in civil engineering has became only possible because outsiders, such a...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, however, if, so, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 4.0 19.5258426966 20% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 12.4196629213 24% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 14.8657303371 40% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 3.0 11.3162921348 27% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 8.0 33.0505617978 24% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 58.6224719101 68% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 12.9106741573 77% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1490.0 2235.4752809 67% => OK
No of words: 261.0 442.535393258 59% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.70881226054 5.05705443957 113% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.0193898071 4.55969084622 88% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.20139188912 2.79657885939 114% => OK
Unique words: 161.0 215.323595506 75% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.616858237548 0.4932671777 125% => OK
syllable_count: 459.0 704.065955056 65% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.59117977528 113% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 6.24550561798 16% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.99550561798 60% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.38483146067 114% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 20.2370786517 59% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 23.0359550562 91% => OK
Sentence length SD: 67.5390319248 60.3974514979 112% => OK
Chars per sentence: 124.166666667 118.986275619 104% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.75 23.4991977007 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.08333333333 5.21951772744 59% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 7.80617977528 51% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 10.2758426966 78% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 5.13820224719 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.83258426966 83% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.24124125475 0.243740707755 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0889572114355 0.0831039109588 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0872057381295 0.0758088955206 115% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.161762741397 0.150359130593 108% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0658928378794 0.0667264976115 99% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.3 14.1392134831 115% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 33.24 48.8420337079 68% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 12.1743820225 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.84 12.1639044944 130% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.4 8.38706741573 112% => OK
difficult_words: 78.0 100.480337079 78% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 11.8971910112 71% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.2143820225 93% => OK
text_standard: 16.0 11.7820224719 136% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.