Not every person is created equal, some created with artless talents than the others. However, the current education system that is globally uses treats everybody as equals. In order to unlock the true potential of the people, society should offer special training for talented people starting at an early age.
Not every school’s curriculum and education system are identical, but the difference between them is minimal. Numerous factors are considered in the creation of a curriculum, and the learning speed of the kids are a rather crucial one, especially in deciding how comprehensive a class should be. If a student’s learning rate is higher than anticipated, the system will not be able to convey enough information for the student to apprehend the subject, and if a student’s learning rate is lower than expected, they will get bored during the class and their time would be wasted. The educational systems tend to use the mean learning rate of the students in order to tune the curriculum, and hence outlier students are suffering from problems mentioned. However, increasing the expected learning rate will result in problems for regular students since they will not be able to catch up. In order to solve this seemingly conundrum, students with special talents can be educated specifically, a special curriculum tuned with a higher learning rate will ameliorate their problems.
Moreover, some talents require starting from very early ages in order to master it, such as playing piano. In our current system, a child talented in such a field have rather minimal chances to be discovered unless there are someone erudite about the subject in their family, and hence a kid’s potential can be wasted and could never learn anything about the field he was talented, although they would be a genius once per century if trained accordingly.
Certainly, one can state that training them separately from other students may result in students becoming social outcasts due to the more cloistered nature of their training compared to regular people. However, people with higher talents already have been suffering from social isolation due to their different skills and difference in their general attitudes, there is a lot of documented research and interviews regarding this social isolation phenomenon. Implementation of the special training system may lead to bringing talented people together that would socialize with one another easier since they are more congenial. Therefore, taking the idea to practice may help talented people to ameliorate social issues that they are experiencing.
To sum it up, the implementation of special training from an early age for talented people would benefit both talented people and society in general. Even though there could be some negative effects if the idea is actualized, these negative effects would pale compared to the positive effects that ideal would bring.
Not every person is created equal, some created with artless talents than the others. However, the current education system that is global uses treats everybody as equals. In order to unlock the true potential of the people, society should offer special training for talented people starting at an early age.
Not every school’s curriculum and education system are identical, but the difference between them is minimal. Numerous factors are considered in the creation of a curriculum, and the learning speed of the kids is a rather crucial one, especially in deciding how comprehensive a class should be. If a student’s learning rate is higher than anticipated, the system will not be able to convey enough information for students to apprehend the subject, and if a student’s learning rate is lower than expected, they will get bored during the class and their time would be wasted. The educational systems tend to use the mean learning rate of the students in order to tune the curriculum, and hence outlier students are suffering from problems mentioned. However, increasing the expected learning rate will result in problems for regular students since they will not be able to catch up. In order to solve this seeming conundrum, students with special talents can be educated specifically, a special curriculum tuned with a higher learning rate will ameliorate their problems.
Moreover, some talents require starting from very early ages in order to master it, such as playing the piano. In our current system, a child talented in such a field have rather minimal chances to be discovered unless there is someone erudite about the subject in their family, and hence a kid’s potential can be wasted and could never learn anything about the field he was talented, although they would be a genius once per century if trained accordingly.
Certainly, one can state that training them separately from other students may result in students becoming social outcasts due to the more cloistered nature of their training compared to regular people. However, people with higher talents already have been suffering from social isolation due to their different skills and difference in their general attitudes, there is a lot of documented research and interviews regarding this social isolation phenomenon. Implementation of the special training system may lead to bringing talented people together that would socialize with one another easier since they are more congenial. Therefore, taking the idea to practice may help talented people to ameliorate social issues that they are experiencing.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 4, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...g rate will ameliorate their problems. Moreover, some talents require starting ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, but, hence, however, if, may, moreover, regarding, so, therefore, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 19.5258426966 118% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 12.4196629213 137% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 14.8657303371 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 11.3162921348 35% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 22.0 33.0505617978 67% => OK
Preposition: 53.0 58.6224719101 90% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 12.9106741573 70% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2193.0 2235.4752809 98% => OK
No of words: 413.0 442.535393258 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.30992736077 5.05705443957 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.50803742585 4.55969084622 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.71241995347 2.79657885939 97% => OK
Unique words: 209.0 215.323595506 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.506053268765 0.4932671777 103% => OK
syllable_count: 683.1 704.065955056 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 6.24550561798 16% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.99550561798 100% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.77640449438 281% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.38483146067 68% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.2370786517 74% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 23.0359550562 117% => OK
Sentence length SD: 72.8918834073 60.3974514979 121% => OK
Chars per sentence: 146.2 118.986275619 123% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.5333333333 23.4991977007 117% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.73333333333 5.21951772744 110% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 7.80617977528 13% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 10.2758426966 88% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 5.13820224719 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.83258426966 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.16480754213 0.243740707755 68% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0659994789246 0.0831039109588 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0644398015746 0.0758088955206 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.120806912214 0.150359130593 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0551466911775 0.0667264976115 83% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.3 14.1392134831 122% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 35.61 48.8420337079 73% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.0 12.1743820225 123% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.81 12.1639044944 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.91 8.38706741573 106% => OK
difficult_words: 103.0 100.480337079 103% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 11.8971910112 76% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 11.2143820225 114% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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