Arctic deer live on islands in Canada's arctic regions. They search for food by moving over ice from island to island during the course of the year. Their habitat is limited to areas warm enough to sustain the plants on which they feed and cold enough, at least some of the year, for the ice to cover the sea separating the islands, allowing the deer to travel over it. Unfortunately, according to reports from local hunters, the deer populations are declining. Since these reports coincide with recent global warming trends that have caused the sea ice to melt, we can conclude that the purported decline in deer populations is the result of the deer's being unable to follow their age-old migration patterns across the frozen sea.
Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.
In the prompt, the author avers that, Arctic deer population in Canada is declining due to global warming and bases his argument on decline reports from the local hunters and the reports regarding sea ice and global warming. Even though the argument given seems logical at first glance, there are some logical leaps, and three specific evidence is required to make the argument more persuasive.
First, are there any places that deer can live without seeing by hunters such as pristine hunters? The only indication about the deer number decline is the reports from the local hunters. Even though local hunters are encountering with the deer rarely, it doesn’t mean that the number of deer are decreasing. Perhaps, if there are other islands that hunters don’t visit, the dears try to stay away from the islands that the hunting occurs in order to survive. If that’s the case, there could be no decline of the deer at all, which weakens the argument significantly.
Secondly, are the bridges connecting islands to one another melted? As stated in the prompt, the deer travel through the islands through sea ice. The author cites the global trends about melting of the sea ice, but it is not mentioned whether these bridges are affected or not. It is quite possible that some of the bridges are not affected at all, and hence the argument could be totally irrelevant or slightly weakened depending on the answer.
Finally, are there any other factors that would cause deer population to lessen? The author surmises that the decline in the deer population caused by the global warming, but there could be other factors detrimental to deer, such as hunting. As given in the prompt, there are a lot of hunters that are hunting deer, which could explain the reason behind their decline and enervate the persuasiveness of the argument. The author should study the factors and recent changes that could affect the deer population and support the argument with their findings.
To sum it up, while the argument given could be possibly true, there are several evidences required to evaluate the validity of the argument. The author should buttress their opinion by including additional evidence about the deer decline, the effects of global warming on the bridges and the factors that could have been impactful on the deer population; these evidences may strengthen the argument if they are in favor of the argument.
Comments
Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 305, Rule ID: SOME_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'some'.
Suggestion: some
...ected or not. It is quite possible that some of the bridges are not affected at all, and he...
^^^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, first, hence, if, may, regarding, second, secondly, so, then, while, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 19.6327345309 117% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 12.9520958084 93% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 11.1786427146 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 13.6137724551 103% => OK
Pronoun: 23.0 28.8173652695 80% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 55.5748502994 88% => OK
Nominalization: 19.0 16.3942115768 116% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2023.0 2260.96107784 89% => OK
No of words: 404.0 441.139720559 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.00742574257 5.12650576532 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.48327461151 4.56307096286 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.396595703 2.78398813304 86% => OK
Unique words: 179.0 204.123752495 88% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.443069306931 0.468620217663 95% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 620.1 705.55239521 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 4.96107784431 60% => OK
Article: 9.0 8.76447105788 103% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 2.70958083832 258% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 4.0 1.67365269461 239% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 19.7664670659 86% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 22.8473053892 101% => OK
Sentence length SD: 55.87777071 57.8364921388 97% => OK
Chars per sentence: 119.0 119.503703932 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.7647058824 23.324526521 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.29411764706 5.70786347227 93% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.25449101796 19% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.20758483034 73% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 6.88822355289 102% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.67664670659 86% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.151745638042 0.218282227539 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0562108038685 0.0743258471296 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0387134478229 0.0701772020484 55% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0885106203737 0.128457276422 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0288561839952 0.0628817314937 46% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.0 14.3799401198 97% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 48.3550499002 117% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 12.197005988 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.07 12.5979740519 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.02 8.32208582834 96% => OK
difficult_words: 83.0 98.500998004 84% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 12.3882235529 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 11.1389221557 101% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.9071856287 92% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 305, Rule ID: SOME_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'some'.
Suggestion: some
...ected or not. It is quite possible that some of the bridges are not affected at all, and he...
^^^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, first, hence, if, may, regarding, second, secondly, so, then, while, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 19.6327345309 117% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 12.9520958084 93% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 11.1786427146 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 13.6137724551 103% => OK
Pronoun: 23.0 28.8173652695 80% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 55.5748502994 88% => OK
Nominalization: 19.0 16.3942115768 116% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2023.0 2260.96107784 89% => OK
No of words: 404.0 441.139720559 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.00742574257 5.12650576532 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.48327461151 4.56307096286 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.396595703 2.78398813304 86% => OK
Unique words: 179.0 204.123752495 88% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.443069306931 0.468620217663 95% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 620.1 705.55239521 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 4.96107784431 60% => OK
Article: 9.0 8.76447105788 103% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 2.70958083832 258% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 4.0 1.67365269461 239% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 19.7664670659 86% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 22.8473053892 101% => OK
Sentence length SD: 55.87777071 57.8364921388 97% => OK
Chars per sentence: 119.0 119.503703932 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.7647058824 23.324526521 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.29411764706 5.70786347227 93% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.25449101796 19% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.20758483034 73% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 6.88822355289 102% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.67664670659 86% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.151745638042 0.218282227539 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0562108038685 0.0743258471296 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0387134478229 0.0701772020484 55% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0885106203737 0.128457276422 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0288561839952 0.0628817314937 46% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.0 14.3799401198 97% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 48.3550499002 117% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 12.197005988 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.07 12.5979740519 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.02 8.32208582834 96% => OK
difficult_words: 83.0 98.500998004 84% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 12.3882235529 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 11.1389221557 101% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.9071856287 92% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.