The statement illustrates a common belief hold by the contemporary public that our highly developed technology would cause the degradation of human. From my perspective, however, by no means would the human's thinking ability be damaged by convenient modern technology. On the contrary, human’s creativity can be considerably boosted by modern technology for the convenience and increased efficiency provided by modern technology. With the assistance of modern technology, the potential of human race would be exploited to a new level.
To begin with, the modern technology is not necessarily to be the obstacle in the way of solution. In contrasite, integrated with human intelligence, the modern technolgy could produce positive effect on serval area. For example, in mathematics, the computer, one of milestone of modern technology, proved the 4 color theorem, which is the first proof provided by the collaboration of scientists and the computer. By the insurmountable culculation capability of computer, scientists managed to overcome those previously thorny puzzles. The modern technology likewise increases efficiency and productivity. According to a survey in 2010, 89% chinese campus students tend to use calculator to solve linear algebra problems rather than by hands. It is accaAnother experiment indicated that the student using calculator in their daily life makes less calculation mistakes than those students who calculate by hands. Therefore, the products of modern technology truly boosted highly educated individual's ability to solve problems.
Secondly, technical inventions indirectly contributes to humans problem-solving capability by saving time. From the start of human history, commutes are lasting problems which bothers us for thousands of years. it was not untill the first industrial revolution that the main transportation uses the steam and oil instead of horses. People used to spend a huge amount of time on traveling, which was boring and exhausting. However, to seek for new knowledge or the new resources, people have to travel around. The contemporary technology saved us from that dilemma. Most of knowledge are within reach by internet. The advanced air transportation and online shoppings enable us to get goods from external courtries. we can get what is previously expensive or even unaccessible for the sake of modern technology.
In sum, from all discussed above, the modern technology plays an essential role in humans’ problem solving ability. The modern technology had already offered a considerable number of benefits and convenience to the public's daily life and would continue to promote the general welfare. With the assistance of modern devices, human can make a great number of achievements which can hardly be achieved by ourselves.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'individuals'' or 'individual's'?
Suggestion: individuals'; individual's
...echnology truly boosted highly educated individuals ability to solve problems. Secondly,...
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Suggestion: It
...hich bothers us for thousands of years. it was not untill the first industrial rev...
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Suggestion: We
...s to get goods from external courtries. we can get what is previously expensive or...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ch can hardly be achieved by ourselves.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, likewise, second, secondly, so, therefore, for example, on the contrary, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 19.5258426966 67% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 12.4196629213 72% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 14.8657303371 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.3162921348 80% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 16.0 33.0505617978 48% => OK
Preposition: 67.0 58.6224719101 114% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 12.9106741573 116% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2385.0 2235.4752809 107% => OK
No of words: 423.0 442.535393258 96% => OK
Chars per words: 5.63829787234 5.05705443957 111% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.53508145475 4.55969084622 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.17088877098 2.79657885939 113% => OK
Unique words: 236.0 215.323595506 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.557919621749 0.4932671777 113% => OK
syllable_count: 763.2 704.065955056 108% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.59117977528 113% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 6.24550561798 48% => OK
Article: 11.0 4.99550561798 220% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 0.0 3.10617977528 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 14.0 4.38483146067 319% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.2370786517 119% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 23.0359550562 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 35.1045066749 60.3974514979 58% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 99.375 118.986275619 84% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.625 23.4991977007 75% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.625 5.21951772744 89% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 7.80617977528 51% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 10.2758426966 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 5.13820224719 175% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.83258426966 103% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.159613311341 0.243740707755 65% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0473969746883 0.0831039109588 57% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0332917361936 0.0758088955206 44% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.101737937358 0.150359130593 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.00440818917235 0.0667264976115 7% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.9 14.1392134831 98% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 37.3 48.8420337079 76% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 12.1743820225 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.14 12.1639044944 124% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.97 8.38706741573 119% => OK
difficult_words: 147.0 100.480337079 146% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 11.8971910112 113% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 11.2143820225 78% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.7820224719 119% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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