As people rely more and more on technology to solve problems, the ability of humans to think for themselves will surely deteriorate.
Discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.
The statement is correlating the growing dependence of people on technology with the ability of humans in a negative way. Living in the 21st century, adopting to the phenomenal advancements in technology is inevitable. Right from our smartphones which give us a wake up call early in the morning, microwave ovens and toasters helping us prepare delicious breakfasts, app-based taxi services or our own cars with intelligent electronic control systems help us drive to our workplace, laptops which have replaced files or record books of the 20th century and finally entertainment systems like home theater systems and smart televisions before we go to bed. We just cannot survive without being surrounded by some form of technology. Looking at the other side of the coin, many people have raised concerns that by automating human tasks, our intellectual abilities might shrink. This is totally dependent on the way we perceive the world around us.
With the advent of 21st century many revolutionary technologies such as Internet Of Things, Artificial Intelligence, Blockchain have come up. The aim is to connect people with each other. These developments are still in their nascent stage and in order to come up with innovative solutions we need engineers, scientists and developers who can think creatively. It is necessary to have trained professionals and experts in order to disseminate the rapidly evolving technology to common people specially senior citizens who are not very tech-savvy.
Now, the reason why it is worry-some is some people tend to substitute electronic gadgets for every human task and remain completely idle. We no longer need to even press the switch to turn on our electrical appliances. Virtual home assistants such as Alexa have taken the responsibility upon themselves to accept voice commands from their owners and control devices. If this is going to be our attitude, it will definitely have adverse effects and will lose the ability to act in challenging circumstances. On the other hand, our smart devices have embedded sensors which help gather relevant data in order to monitor our health-both physical and mental. If utilized properly, it will definitely boost our productivity. The internet has provided us with a platform helping us to learn anything related to our interest.
Let us consider the current Corona pandemic crisis. Had it not been for technology, most of our businesses would be on the verge of shutdown. Technology made it possible to conduct meetings, classes online which was earlier considered to be possible only in a closed-room environment. Previously, office was the only work place and now companies are promoting the Work-from-home culture. Even to find a permanent solution, there is a dire need for rapid development of a vaccine wherein technological advancements and contribution of biochemical engineers and scientists over the years will play a pivotal role.
Therefore, technology has always played an important role in the progress of mankind from discovering fire to a digital world. Every time, the world has witnessed an industrial revolution it has benefited the people. We just need to change our outlook and our role to play in this ever-evolving world. If we remain curious to gain knowledge and make contributions to society, technology is going to bolster our dreams and not at all diminish our intellectual power.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Consider replacing "in a negative way" with adverb for "negative"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...n technology with the ability of humans in a negative way. Living in the 21st century, adopting t...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, if, look, so, still, therefore, such as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 19.5258426966 102% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 12.4196629213 97% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 14.8657303371 121% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.3162921348 62% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 44.0 33.0505617978 133% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 78.0 58.6224719101 133% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 12.9106741573 70% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2871.0 2235.4752809 128% => OK
No of words: 543.0 442.535393258 123% => OK
Chars per words: 5.28729281768 5.05705443957 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.82725184711 4.55969084622 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.04022506316 2.79657885939 109% => OK
Unique words: 312.0 215.323595506 145% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.574585635359 0.4932671777 116% => OK
syllable_count: 912.6 704.065955056 130% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 6.24550561798 160% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.99550561798 100% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.38483146067 46% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 20.2370786517 128% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 23.0359550562 87% => OK
Sentence length SD: 74.6650112524 60.3974514979 124% => OK
Chars per sentence: 110.423076923 118.986275619 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.8846153846 23.4991977007 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.76923076923 5.21951772744 53% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 7.80617977528 13% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 10.2758426966 136% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.13820224719 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.83258426966 186% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.129502086537 0.243740707755 53% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0378359797399 0.0831039109588 46% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0405826319208 0.0758088955206 54% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0722768510704 0.150359130593 48% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0273111450219 0.0667264976115 41% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.9 14.1392134831 98% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.72 48.8420337079 87% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 12.1743820225 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.4 12.1639044944 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.57 8.38706741573 114% => OK
difficult_words: 170.0 100.480337079 169% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 20.5 11.8971910112 172% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.2143820225 89% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.7820224719 85% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 79.17 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.75 Out of 6
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