As people rely more and more on technology to solve problems, the ability of humans to think for themselves will surely deteriorate.
As technology is advancing day by day, it affects human beings in every facet of life inevitably. The omnipresent technology not only affects human beings perfunctorily but also has collateral effects. Considering this omnipotent effect, it is high time to justify the actual benefits. The prompt recommends that the effect of technology on human cognitive processes is detrimental as they become increasingly dependent on it. In my point of view, I strongly agree with this suggestion and opine that people should be cautious about the overuse of technology for two reasons.
To begin with, relying too heavily on technology can hinder the normal cognitive process. This is particularly significant in areas such as memory, problem-solving, decision-making, and even language learning. For instance, now a day the delayed speech development in toddlers is a very common phenomenon, and there is a substantial body of research supporting this claim, along with the underlying reasons. Psychologists argue that the language learning process is one of the most complex functions of the rational parts of the brain. This process can be impeded by excessive exposure to one-way information if toddlers have access to gadgets like mobile phones and watch too many videos on YouTube or similar apps. The overwhelming amount of information does not allow sufficient time for cognitive development and the formation of necessary responses. As a result, the complex process of language learning for toddlers can become hindered.
Furthermore, easy access to information leads to passive consumption without critical analysis. We can become overwhelmed by the abundance of information available through search engines like Google or more advanced AI systems like Chat GPT. Genetically, we are not predisposed to exerting effort in thinking critically when we are provided with readily available information. This ultimately hampers our ability to think independently and make informed judgments.
Of course, many may argue and point out the numerous advantages of technology that have shaped human civilization, especially considering that it is unimaginable to envision life on Earth without it. However, the alluring effects of technology can have negative consequences on human civilization in the long run. After all, we wouldn't want a totalitarian civilization controlled by artificial intelligence where humans become slaves and lose their ability to critically evaluate how to liberate themselves from such contrivances at any cost.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 12, Rule ID: MANY_NN_U[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun may seems to be uncountable; consider using: 'much may', 'a good deal of may'.
Suggestion: much may; a good deal of may
... make informed judgments. Of course, many may argue and point out the numerous advant...
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Line 7, column 329, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: wouldn't
...lization in the long run. After all, we wouldnt want a totalitarian civilization contro...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, however, if, may, so, after all, for instance, of course, such as, as a result, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 19.5258426966 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 12.4196629213 56% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 14.8657303371 74% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.3162921348 62% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 26.0 33.0505617978 79% => OK
Preposition: 59.0 58.6224719101 101% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 12.9106741573 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2156.0 2235.4752809 96% => OK
No of words: 383.0 442.535393258 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.62924281984 5.05705443957 111% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.42384287591 4.55969084622 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.20088039822 2.79657885939 114% => OK
Unique words: 229.0 215.323595506 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.597911227154 0.4932671777 121% => OK
syllable_count: 699.3 704.065955056 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.59117977528 113% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 6.24550561798 144% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.99550561798 100% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.38483146067 137% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.2370786517 94% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 23.0359550562 87% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.7019499733 60.3974514979 69% => OK
Chars per sentence: 113.473684211 118.986275619 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.1578947368 23.4991977007 86% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.15789473684 5.21951772744 118% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 7.80617977528 26% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 10.2758426966 107% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.13820224719 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.83258426966 103% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.18087385159 0.243740707755 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0485284492958 0.0831039109588 58% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0314711815281 0.0758088955206 42% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0968008994818 0.150359130593 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0266406144653 0.0667264976115 40% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.2 14.1392134831 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 34.26 48.8420337079 70% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.5 12.1743820225 111% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.37 12.1639044944 126% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.91 8.38706741573 118% => OK
difficult_words: 128.0 100.480337079 127% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 11.8971910112 88% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.2143820225 89% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.7820224719 85% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.