People’s attitudes are determined more by their immediate situation or surroundings that by society as a whole.
Our attitudes are influenced by a myriad of factors. Some people argue that people’s attitudes are determined more by their immediate situation or surroundings that by society as a whole. I agree with this statement in that it is hard to ignore one’s on-the-spot condition and setting.
Admittedly, society as a whole affects people’s attitudes. When the society encounter with the serious problem, people show power of unity. This solidarity influences people’s attitudes toward the arduous tasks such as working in factories and driving large vehicles. For example, World War Ⅱ became much more serious than expected and it irritated the United States. Every possible human resource was needed in various fields of work. Urgent atmosphere made American women to change their attitudes to the work which had been considered as traditional masculine works. They showed active and enthusiastic attitudes and engaged in works such as building weapons, working in farms, and driving trucks. The Attitudes of American women are the epitome of the influence of the society as a whole.
However, people’s current situation can be more influential to their attitudes. 1950’s was the racial discriminative era. Majority of people in society thought racial discrimination or racial segregation was not iniquitous. Moreover, there was the law which justify the racial segregations. Nonetheless, Rosa Parks was influenced not by the society but by her immediate situation. When the bus driver ordered to give up her seat to the white, she disobeyed and violated the law. She displayed defiant attitude toward the unrighteous society. If she had been influenced by the society, she should have showed docile attitude. Thus, Rosa Parks is the compelling example which shows the power of current situation.
Moreover, people’s immediate surrounding can be more powerful to their attitudes. Asch conducted an experiment which revealed the conformity behavior. In this experiment, he asked participants easy perceptual questions which asked them to choose two lines with the same length. When participants were surrounded by other respondents who intentionally answered incorrectly, majority of participants gave at least one wrong answer. They displayed doubtful attitudes in spite of simple and obvious questions. Even though The United States as a whole underscores the importance of individuality and self-assertiveness, participants were largely influenced by their surrounding people.
In summary, one’s immediate situation and surroundings are more telling factors on one’s attitude. If we want to have impact one one’s attitude, we should consider not only the overall society but also immediate situation and surroundings.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, moreover, nonetheless, so, thus, at least, for example, in fact, in summary, such as, in spite of
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 19.5258426966 87% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 12.4196629213 32% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 14.8657303371 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.3162921348 106% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 33.0505617978 82% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 58.6224719101 77% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 12.9106741573 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2375.0 2235.4752809 106% => OK
No of words: 412.0 442.535393258 93% => OK
Chars per words: 5.7645631068 5.05705443957 114% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.50530610838 4.55969084622 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.18790514033 2.79657885939 114% => OK
Unique words: 225.0 215.323595506 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.546116504854 0.4932671777 111% => OK
syllable_count: 742.5 704.065955056 105% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.59117977528 113% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 6.24550561798 160% => OK
Interrogative: 3.0 0.740449438202 405% => OK
Article: 1.0 4.99550561798 20% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.10617977528 193% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.38483146067 46% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 28.0 20.2370786517 138% => OK
Sentence length: 14.0 23.0359550562 61% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 32.0411087989 60.3974514979 53% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 84.8214285714 118.986275619 71% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.7142857143 23.4991977007 63% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.32142857143 5.21951772744 83% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 7.80617977528 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 10.2758426966 88% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 5.13820224719 136% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 12.0 4.83258426966 248% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.493785808668 0.243740707755 203% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.127520413356 0.0831039109588 153% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.174149149469 0.0758088955206 230% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.299539605376 0.150359130593 199% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.147381270627 0.0667264976115 221% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.1 14.1392134831 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 40.34 48.8420337079 83% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 12.1743820225 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.54 12.1639044944 128% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.93 8.38706741573 106% => OK
difficult_words: 120.0 100.480337079 119% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 11.8971910112 59% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 7.6 11.2143820225 68% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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