People’s behavior is largely determined by forces not of their own making.
The statement contends that a person’s actions are heavily influenced by forces not of their own making. I concede with the statement as I believe that a person’s actions are an amalgamation of what society accepts and what one wants and many times the fear of being banished from the society keeps a person’s actions in check. However, there are many exceptional people who didn’t listen to other people and in turn created a better future for generations to come.
Childhood is the most vulnerable state of a human. Children don’t think for themselves: they learn from people around them. “Like father like son”, a well known saying that sheds light on how parents heavily affect a child’s behaviour. It is several times seen that a child who wasn’t taught manners and respect in childhood, grows up to be a surly, unrefined man. At the time of monarchy, there were various countries whose rulers didn’t have a penchant for eachother and it would continue for decades with rulers of each country changing but the dislike was passed down for generations. The new rulers woudn’t even know what the hatred was about but would continue the tradition.
In today’s world for most people, the constant thought of other’s perception about us guides our actions. The trepid of society not accepting one if they are unmarried till forty, don’t have a financially stable job, are not straight etc. guides ones important life’s decision. Media sometimes even showing hyberbolic, biased news influences our political views. “One rotten apple spoils the whole barrel”, a famous saying that indicates how a single bad influence can affect the whole group. However, the external forces that determines one’s behaviour serves significantly useful purposes too. Law and punishment keeps people away from turning to a life of crime and deceiting others and thus ensuring safety of the society.
Throughout history, there are several people who were castigated and not believed by the society at their time who ended up making noteworthy contributions for improving humans life. Copernicus suggested that the Earth revolves around the Sun and relinquished the theory that Sun revolved around Earth that was widely believed during his time. In a society when noone believed that humans could fly in the sky, Wright brothers invented aeroplane. When a women’s role was considered to be a cook and to give children to their husband, some women became iconoclast and demanded equal rights improving the conditions of women.
In general, I agree that in our day-to-day lives other people’s perceptions play a noteworthy role in influencing our behavior but there are numerous people throughout history who rejected a theory or thought process and made the world a better place for future generations.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, so, thus, well, in general
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 19.5258426966 92% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 12.4196629213 32% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 14.8657303371 114% => OK
Relative clauses : 19.0 11.3162921348 168% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 33.0505617978 88% => OK
Preposition: 52.0 58.6224719101 89% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 12.9106741573 54% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2376.0 2235.4752809 106% => OK
No of words: 454.0 442.535393258 103% => OK
Chars per words: 5.23348017621 5.05705443957 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.61598047577 4.55969084622 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.6838391326 2.79657885939 96% => OK
Unique words: 261.0 215.323595506 121% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.574889867841 0.4932671777 117% => OK
syllable_count: 715.5 704.065955056 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 6.24550561798 48% => OK
Article: 7.0 4.99550561798 140% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.10617977528 32% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.38483146067 114% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.2370786517 104% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 23.0359550562 91% => OK
Sentence length SD: 57.352709904 60.3974514979 95% => OK
Chars per sentence: 113.142857143 118.986275619 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.619047619 23.4991977007 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.09523809524 5.21951772744 40% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 7.80617977528 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 10.2758426966 78% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 5.13820224719 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.83258426966 103% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.143683890154 0.243740707755 59% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0372053404493 0.0831039109588 45% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0567867331539 0.0758088955206 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0743383091337 0.150359130593 49% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.036339684866 0.0667264976115 54% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.0 14.1392134831 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 48.8420337079 103% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 12.1743820225 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.05 12.1639044944 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.85 8.38706741573 106% => OK
difficult_words: 120.0 100.480337079 119% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.8971910112 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.2143820225 93% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 83.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.