People’s behaviour is largely determined by forces not of their own making.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim. In developing and supporting your position, be sure to address the most compelling reasons and/or examples that could be used to challenge your position.
The above given statement is that, People’s behaviour is largely determined by forces not of their own making. I partially agree or disagree with the statement mentioned above. In the modern society we are living, to judge or get to know about the behaviour of people is by the forces and even by understanding their own making. In the following passages, I will elaborate on my reasons with examples to support why I partially agree or disagree with the abovementioned statement.
Firstly, let’s elaborate on the essay why I agree with the statement that forces largely determine people's behaviour, not their own making. In the society we are living in, most people's behaviour is dependent on the way they are being brought up. We must realise that a person's behaviours are affected by many events from their past. If a person has overcome all problems in his life, he will be happy and controlled around everyone. A person's attitude is a critical part of how they modify their behaviour. To a great extent, people rely on their surroundings or external forces before taking action. For example, let’s take my two schooling classmates as examples. One was from a low-income family, whereas the other was from a middle-class family. The one from a low-income family has many problems in his house where his father used to drink every day, and his mother just used to sit and watch it. And now he has become an alcohol-addicted person. And when we come to the perspective of my other classmate from a middle-class family who’s mother and father used to work very hard, seeing his parents, he studied very hard and now he is a topper in a medical university. By the examples I mentioned above, I can say that even some external forces affect people's behaviour.
Secondly, let’s elaborate on the essay why I disagree with the statement that forces largely determine people’s behaviour, not their own making. The crime rate indicates that some people break the law. They have decided to skip allowing external factors to control their behaviour. For example, students are regularly pushed to work hard in school to live a fulfilling life. Some students will respond to pressure while still performing well in their classes. On the other hand, some students won't be bothered by outside influences and will behave as they choose. Regardless of social beliefs, thieves will steal. Many argue that their behaviours were influenced by their poverty, their circumstances, etc., but in the end, the thief chooses to ignore all other alternatives.
Additionally, it might be challenging to define the term "behaviour properly." According to different perspectives, it has various broad definitions. However, "behaviour" often describes how a person reacts to internal or external forces. Being the most intelligent species, people have the liberty to make choices. People's actions are primarily influenced by their attitudes. A person's behaviour is not constant throughout their life; it changes.
In conclusion, from the aforementioned reasons and examples I strongly believe that we can partially agree or disagree with the above given statement that people’s behaviour is largely determined by forces not of their own making.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 437, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'persons'' or 'person's'?
Suggestion: persons'; person's
...happy and controlled around everyone. A persons attitude is a critical part of how they...
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Line 3, column 1039, Rule ID: WHOS[3]
Message: Did you mean 'whose'?
Suggestion: whose
...er classmate from a middle-class family who’s mother and father used to work very har...
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Line 3, column 1039, Rule ID: WHOS_NN[4]
Message: Did you mean 'whose mother'?
Suggestion: whose mother
...er classmate from a middle-class family who’s mother and father used to work very hard, seei...
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Line 7, column 39, Rule ID: ALLOW_TO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'defining'? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'challenge' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
Suggestion: defining
... Additionally, it might be challenging to define the term 'behaviour properly.&apos...
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Line 7, column 400, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'persons'' or 'person's'?
Suggestion: persons'; person's
...marily influenced by their attitudes. A persons behaviour is not constant throughout th...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, however, if, second, secondly, so, still, well, whereas, while, even so, for example, in conclusion, on the other hand, to a great extent
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 19.5258426966 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 12.4196629213 72% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 14.8657303371 114% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.3162921348 106% => OK
Pronoun: 57.0 33.0505617978 172% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 73.0 58.6224719101 125% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 12.9106741573 46% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2736.0 2235.4752809 122% => OK
No of words: 527.0 442.535393258 119% => OK
Chars per words: 5.19165085389 5.05705443957 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.79129216042 4.55969084622 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.99122382428 2.79657885939 107% => OK
Unique words: 247.0 215.323595506 115% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.468690702087 0.4932671777 95% => OK
syllable_count: 856.8 704.065955056 122% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 6.24550561798 176% => OK
Article: 6.0 4.99550561798 120% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.10617977528 32% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.77640449438 225% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 10.0 4.38483146067 228% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 30.0 20.2370786517 148% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 23.0359550562 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 46.4712694994 60.3974514979 77% => OK
Chars per sentence: 91.2 118.986275619 77% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.5666666667 23.4991977007 75% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.26666666667 5.21951772744 101% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 7.80617977528 64% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 10.2758426966 88% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 11.0 5.13820224719 214% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 10.0 4.83258426966 207% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.252959379255 0.243740707755 104% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0769967679282 0.0831039109588 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0740035587714 0.0758088955206 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.173809614707 0.150359130593 116% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0462511658835 0.0667264976115 69% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.8 14.1392134831 83% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 48.8420337079 111% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 12.1743820225 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.53 12.1639044944 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.08 8.38706741573 96% => OK
difficult_words: 120.0 100.480337079 119% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.8971910112 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 11.2143820225 78% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.7820224719 85% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 54.17 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.25 Out of 6
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