In any circumstance, it would not be recommended to to take risky actions without considering the consequences. Taking consideration of the consequences in decision making can be time consuming, but it gives the most control in a situation. Likewise, taking into account the outcome of a decision can help discover other potential actions to take in a situation. Without considering the consequences before taking action can lead to poorer decision making.
Firstly, proper decision making gives us more control in a situation. Take the example of skydiving as an extreme sport. It is advertized that skydiving is safe if all of the proper procedures are followed. Someone who makes quick decisions will sign up for the sport with no questions asked while there are many questions that may need to be answered. What are the different safety hazards involved in this sport? Does the business that offer the service seem legitimate? Are the instructors experienced? Is there another activity I can participate in that will give me the same thrill as skydiving, but safer? After answering all of these questions, the person may still go skydiving, or may have other ideas for an extreme sport, such as bungee jumping or going indoor skydiving. Thinking about the decision and potential outcomes gives the decision maker more control in a situation, and more potential options.
On the opposition, considering the consequences before making a risky decision can be time consuming. While that may be true, taking immediate action without thinking about the outcome can lead to a poor outcome and can lead to impulsive habits. One example of this could be ordering fast food. Given the fact that it's called “fast”, most people order out of fast food restaurants because of its convenience and do not consider alternatives. After a long day of work, people drive straight to a drive through and order a burger. They don’t stop to ask themselves if their is a healthy restaurant nearby or if they should just cook at home. Making this kind of decision is fast, but will lead to poorer health and weight gain.
In conclusion, undertaking risky actions only after considering its consequences results in the best outcome. Impulsive decision making will often lead to poorer outcomes in a situation and create an impulsive habit. Only a carefully thought out situation can lead to more control and other potential outcomes.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: to
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Line 3, column 165, Rule ID: ALL_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'all the'.
Suggestion: all the
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Message: Did you mean 'there'?
Suggestion: there
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, if, likewise, may, so, still, while, as for, in conclusion, kind of, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 19.5258426966 77% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 20.0 12.4196629213 161% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 14.8657303371 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.3162921348 62% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 23.0 33.0505617978 70% => OK
Preposition: 54.0 58.6224719101 92% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 12.9106741573 77% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2042.0 2235.4752809 91% => OK
No of words: 397.0 442.535393258 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.1435768262 5.05705443957 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.46372701284 4.55969084622 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.90241911143 2.79657885939 104% => OK
Unique words: 199.0 215.323595506 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.501259445844 0.4932671777 102% => OK
syllable_count: 642.6 704.065955056 91% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 6.24550561798 48% => OK
Article: 1.0 4.99550561798 20% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.77640449438 281% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.38483146067 160% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.2370786517 119% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 23.0359550562 69% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 35.0897411013 60.3974514979 58% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 85.0833333333 118.986275619 72% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.5416666667 23.4991977007 70% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.04166666667 5.21951772744 77% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 7.80617977528 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 10.2758426966 88% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 5.13820224719 117% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.83258426966 186% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.131070070777 0.243740707755 54% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0403789048742 0.0831039109588 49% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0518225763502 0.0758088955206 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0928888825305 0.150359130593 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0346559901559 0.0667264976115 52% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.0 14.1392134831 78% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 55.24 48.8420337079 113% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 12.1743820225 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.24 12.1639044944 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.81 8.38706741573 93% => OK
difficult_words: 85.0 100.480337079 85% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 11.8971910112 59% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.4 11.2143820225 75% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.7820224719 85% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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