People nowadays are indeed too individualistic. The news reporting the indifferent citizens could be found every day. Thus the speaker, on the one hand, argues that people need to nderstand the satisfaction comes from working for the greater good of the family, community or society as a whole. On the other hand, he claims people should not purse sef-centered goals. However, the idea that people work for others is unrealistic in many reasons, or in other words, this kind of wish is naive.
To begin with, in the crystal river of human history, people fought each other in order to gather more resources and social status. For the individuals, they purse fame and wealth; for the nations, they purse territories and slavery on other races. Those are all solid yet bloody truths, which illustrate the selfish inborn of human nature. Thus requiring peope to work for society as a whole is unrealistic. Mort importantly, according to Adam Smith, the famous economist,in his Wealth Of Nations, people are deemed to be selfish and lazy thus they need rewards for working. Therefore, people who get used to pursing individual wellfare are not likely to change to devote to working for societies as a whole.
Although while facing the same obstacles or disaters people are willing to sarcrifise or devote themselves to public, the stimulation will not last long enough for them to achieve great until they lost their interests. For instances, the Chinese in the last 60s recall to the chariman Mao's summon and everyone are in high spirit working for the public. But after a few years people began to worry about themsevles as they found hard working did not pay off, their efficiency suddenly declined. While suffering the economic crisis in the late 20s, the American held their goods until they were antiquated. They would rather starves to death than give away their personal properties.
The speaker's worry is true, yet not insightful. People are individualistic does not necessarily mean that the society and the community will not develop. As is known to us all that a individual's behaviour can not make a big difference, yet with all the purses to fullfill their own goals, our society in fact is getting better. For instances, Elan Musk invented and produced the electronic Teslar for benefits of his own. However, his invention helps us solve the environmental problems. And those nobel prizers do researches out of their own goods, for instance, reputation and patent. Yet their findings are recogized by the world and regarded as wellfare for the whole human race.
In short, the satisfaction might come from working for good of societies. Yet the individualistic pursues can also benefit and society and are more effecient than voluntary sacrifise.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 119, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Thus,
...rent citizens could be found every day. Thus the speaker, on the one hand, argues th...
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Line 3, column 473, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , in
...ding to Adam Smith, the famous economist,in his Wealth Of Nations, people are deeme...
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Line 5, column 624, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'would' requires the base form of the verb: 'starve'
Suggestion: starve
...they were antiquated. They would rather starves to death than give away their personal ...
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Line 7, column 182, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...not develop. As is known to us all that a individuals behaviour can not make a bi...
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Line 7, column 184, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'individuals'' or 'individual's'?
Suggestion: individuals'; individual's
...t develop. As is known to us all that a individuals behaviour can not make a big difference...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, so, therefore, thus, well, while, for instance, in fact, in short, kind of, in other words, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 19.5258426966 92% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.4196629213 81% => OK
Conjunction : 22.0 14.8657303371 148% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.3162921348 53% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 33.0505617978 91% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 58.6224719101 84% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 12.9106741573 54% => More nominalization wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2312.0 2235.4752809 103% => OK
No of words: 457.0 442.535393258 103% => OK
Chars per words: 5.0590809628 5.05705443957 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.62358717085 4.55969084622 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.692373226 2.79657885939 96% => OK
Unique words: 255.0 215.323595506 118% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.557986870897 0.4932671777 113% => OK
syllable_count: 713.7 704.065955056 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 6.24550561798 144% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.740449438202 0% => OK
Article: 8.0 4.99550561798 160% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 7.0 1.77640449438 394% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.38483146067 160% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.2370786517 124% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 23.0359550562 78% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.0545550446 60.3974514979 70% => OK
Chars per sentence: 92.48 118.986275619 78% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.28 23.4991977007 78% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.92 5.21951772744 113% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 7.80617977528 64% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 10.2758426966 136% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 5.13820224719 136% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.83258426966 83% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.334153635376 0.243740707755 137% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.094220846683 0.0831039109588 113% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.103317294733 0.0758088955206 136% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.197940810318 0.150359130593 132% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.103810543624 0.0667264976115 156% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.5 14.1392134831 81% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 48.8420337079 109% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 12.1743820225 85% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.07 12.1639044944 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.57 8.38706741573 102% => OK
difficult_words: 117.0 100.480337079 116% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 11.8971910112 71% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 11.2143820225 82% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 54.17 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.25 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.