People who male decisions based on emotion and justify those decisions with logic afterwards are poor decision makers.
People are free to make the decisions as they like. In fact they can make decisions based on their emotions or in any manner as they like. The prompt says people who make decisions based on emotion and later they justify it with some logic are considered as poor decision makers.In my opinion i strongly disagree with the suggestion and argue that people who make decisions based on emotions can be good if we consider these two things.
To begin,decisions made by people on the basis of emotions can sometimes be the best as compared to the decision made regardless of the emotions.For an instance, if someone wants to make a deal regarding the sale of product from his/her business with a relative,he takes this decision based on the emotions whether to make a deal with or to just cancel the deal.The above example illustrates that the decision made by considering emotions can be sometimes very beneficial as if something improper occurs or there is a defect in a product and due to this the whole ordered could be cancelled then this might give adverse effect on the pertaining relations between the two or the bond they share from past can be affected.
Further,it is often found that the decisions made with emotions can bring lot of happiness in one's life.For an instance, if someone has to sit forcefully at a business which is managed by his/her father for helping him at the shop because his/her father is becoming older and he faces lot of difficulties due to his old age.At first he/she thinks that due to this i am ruining my life and my career.But, it could be a benefit if we look for a long time approach. As the job he/she would apply for an be offered a good position would be good but, they perform their as an employee so there would be lack of leadership qualities as compared to he/she helps his/her father for his business as here they can perform as a boss or we can say as a leader.Here, they can learn how to make proper utilization of each and every employee and this can lead them to better future.With the help of this they can establish a new company on their own with this experience and it would be a great decision for them.
Ofcourse some argue that the decisions based on emotion regarding life are poor compared to decisions made without considering emotions. But, how can this be equal for all, everyone can have their own better choice for the decision to be made and we can judge them only after thier success or failure not before that for sure.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, look, regarding, so, then, as to, in fact, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 19.5258426966 97% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 21.0 12.4196629213 169% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 14.8657303371 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.3162921348 80% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 63.0 33.0505617978 191% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 63.0 58.6224719101 107% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 12.9106741573 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2054.0 2235.4752809 92% => OK
No of words: 448.0 442.535393258 101% => OK
Chars per words: 4.58482142857 5.05705443957 91% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.60065326758 4.55969084622 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.54736696294 2.79657885939 91% => OK
Unique words: 201.0 215.323595506 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.448660714286 0.4932671777 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 659.7 704.065955056 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 6.24550561798 80% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.99550561798 40% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.38483146067 114% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 8.0 20.2370786517 40% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 56.0 23.0359550562 243% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 225.123160737 60.3974514979 373% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 256.75 118.986275619 216% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 56.0 23.4991977007 238% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 9.0 5.21951772744 172% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 17.0 7.80617977528 218% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 10.2758426966 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.13820224719 39% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.83258426966 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.292738883886 0.243740707755 120% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.20199741432 0.0831039109588 243% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.146276219753 0.0758088955206 193% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.237700038961 0.150359130593 158% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.145429223494 0.0667264976115 218% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 28.1 14.1392134831 199% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 23.1 48.8420337079 47% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 24.0 12.1743820225 197% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.17 12.1639044944 84% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.99 8.38706741573 107% => OK
difficult_words: 73.0 100.480337079 73% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 11.8971910112 113% => OK
gunning_fog: 24.4 11.2143820225 218% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.