The chart below shows the proportion of males and females in Malaysia who commonly do physical activity in 2010

Essay topics:

The chart below shows the proportion of males and females in Malaysia who commonly do physical activity in 2010.

The bar chart illustrates the percentages of Malaysian male and female who performed regular physical activity in 2010 with respect to different age groups.

Overall, the regular physical activity performed by male was decreasing from age 15 to 44 years and after which it kept on increasing till the age bracket 65 and over. routine exercises performed by the females kept on increasing starting from the age group 15 to 44 until age 54 after which it decreased significantly in the last two stages.

Comparatively, the percentage of male performing the day to day physical activities was quite more, 52.8 % then the female which was 47.7%. While for the next three age groups 25to 34, 35to 44 and 45 to 54 years the percentage of women did more physical activities compared to male. it was 42.2,39.5 and 43.1 for the males where as percentages for females was 48.9, 52.5 and 53.3 respectively. For age group 55 to 64 years the percentage of women was approximately 8 % more than that of the male having 45.1%. Lastly, in the age bracket for 65 years and above both males and females performed almost equal routine physical activity in the year 2010 which is about 47%.

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Average: 7.1 (19 votes)

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, lastly, then, while, with respect to

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 7.0 100% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 6.8 118% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 3.15609756098 222% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 4.0 5.60731707317 71% => OK
Preposition: 30.0 33.7804878049 89% => OK
Nominalization: 0.0 3.97073170732 0% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 986.0 965.302439024 102% => OK
No of words: 202.0 196.424390244 103% => OK
Chars per words: 4.88118811881 4.92477711251 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.76996954942 3.73543355544 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.71720333502 2.65546596893 102% => OK
Unique words: 104.0 106.607317073 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.514851485149 0.547539520022 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 291.6 283.868780488 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.45097560976 96% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 1.53170731707 65% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.33902439024 69% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.07073170732 93% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 3.36585365854 30% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 8.0 8.94146341463 89% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 22.4926829268 111% => OK
Sentence length SD: 21.72520138 43.030603864 50% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 123.25 112.824112599 109% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.25 22.9334400587 110% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.0 5.23603664747 95% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 3.83414634146 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 5.0 1.69756097561 295% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 3.70975609756 54% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.09268292683 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.208192573343 0.215688989381 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.118034731906 0.103423049105 114% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0824407730174 0.0843802449381 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.180386125216 0.15604864568 116% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0938362465383 0.0819641961636 114% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.2 13.2329268293 107% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 63.02 61.2550243902 103% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.3012195122 104% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.32 11.4140731707 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.38 8.06136585366 92% => OK
difficult_words: 32.0 40.7170731707 79% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 11.4329268293 127% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.9970731707 109% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 11.0658536585 136% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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