The demeanor that someone has is related with many aspects that involve the person itself but also the environment elements that surround this person. In this sense, it’s important to notice that many aspects of someone’s behavior is influenced by forces that don’t come from inside this person but from the external elements that exist in a certain group or society.
One might argue that the way someone behaves itself is related only with personal aspects of this person. In this context, people is able to construct a certain profile of behavior without many influence from external forces that are related with the family, group or society that this person is associated with. The absence of strong external forces in building someone’s way of life gives the idea that humankind is not vulnerable to a certain zeitgeist that might exists in a historical moment. People would act based much more in their profile than by external orientation which has a small role in building someone’s character.
However, this perspective should be carefully reviewed. It’s reckless to construct an idea that man isn’t able to be influenced by the environment that surrounds him. These perspectives consider man almost as a machine, unable to have major inputs from the system where he lives. In this context, some evidences demonstrate that persons are very influenced by forces not created by them. Take the example of the researches made by the psychanalyst Freud. Freud states that people are extremely influenced by the group that they are inside and this means that people might act on a completely different way they used to behave themselves just to fit in the group.
In this context, Freud states that external forces have largely influence over people. These forces can even reduce de IQ from these persons in the moment when they are together in a group. By following Freud’s argument, a group of young people might have a deviated demeanor where they might act together in a way that would be unexpected if the elements from this group were alone. Take the example of violent riots in football matches, where two sides fight against each for something that in general could be considered a fatuous reason, i.e, the final score of a football match.
In conclusion, one can see that external forces could largely act in someone’s behavior. The perspective that society isn’t able to influence in a profound way the demeanor of someone can only be considered if this person is isolated from this society, which rarely occurs. Since man is a political animal, he will always be largely influenced by external forces.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 190, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun influence seems to be countable; consider using: 'many influences'.
Suggestion: many influences
...t a certain profile of behavior without many influence from external forces that are related w...
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Line 7, column 65, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Possible agreement error -- use past participle here: 'influenced'.
Suggestion: influenced
...tates that external forces have largely influence over people. These forces can even redu...
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Line 7, column 142, Rule ID: IN_THE_MOMENT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'at the moment' (=currently)?
Suggestion: at the moment
...an even reduce de IQ from these persons in the moment when they are together in a group. By f...
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Line 9, column 153, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in a profound way" with adverb for "profound"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...at society isn't able to influence in a profound way the demeanor of someone can only be con...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, so, in conclusion, in general
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 19.5258426966 102% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 12.4196629213 113% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 14.8657303371 34% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 28.0 11.3162921348 247% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 50.0 33.0505617978 151% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 66.0 58.6224719101 113% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 12.9106741573 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2241.0 2235.4752809 100% => OK
No of words: 437.0 442.535393258 99% => OK
Chars per words: 5.12814645309 5.05705443957 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.57214883401 4.55969084622 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.71209625021 2.79657885939 97% => OK
Unique words: 195.0 215.323595506 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.446224256293 0.4932671777 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 701.1 704.065955056 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 6.24550561798 64% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.99550561798 100% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.10617977528 32% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.38483146067 160% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.2370786517 94% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 23.0359550562 100% => OK
Sentence length SD: 53.4237230341 60.3974514979 88% => OK
Chars per sentence: 117.947368421 118.986275619 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.0 23.4991977007 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.78947368421 5.21951772744 53% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 7.80617977528 51% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 10.2758426966 49% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 5.13820224719 117% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.83258426966 166% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.113283377641 0.243740707755 46% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0434209547008 0.0831039109588 52% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0304800565252 0.0758088955206 40% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0767278786917 0.150359130593 51% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0208255101266 0.0667264976115 31% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.2 14.1392134831 100% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 48.8420337079 99% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 12.1743820225 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.77 12.1639044944 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.03 8.38706741573 96% => OK
difficult_words: 90.0 100.480337079 90% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 11.8971910112 109% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 11.2143820225 100% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.7820224719 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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