A person who knowingly commits a crime has broken the social contract and should not retain any civil rights or the right to benefit from his or her own labor.
Some people apostle that a person who had advertently transgressed should be viable to forfeits all his rights. Others might disagree with the above statement. In my opinion saying that person should retain his civil rights is the only appropriate approach to deal with such people. Given below are two assertions for my position.
Firstly, when a person is isolated from every thing with just one unseemly act then the chances, if any, of moral improvement become scanty. This is because a person, when not given his civil rights, becomes morose over time, and the only way to keep it from occurring is if little acts of benevolence are displayed by the society, even after a blandishment. Take an example of a recent prison camp in Pakistan, where a terrorist when released from the jail, a place where he was being forcefully secluded even from basic necessity, concocts his own terrorist organisation and caused amass of nuisance. If such people are kept intact with little civility even after the abounding act of crimes, an element of humanity that remains intact because of this can prevent the society from further damage from his actions.
Secondly, we are living in a society where a trifling amount of intolerance can have a severe consequences. The only thing that makes us feel eminent in this malevolent planet is our generosity, and in order to ensure that this indulgence doesn't fade away, its important to be little little lenient every now and then towards others. There is a saying, "If you intend to do it once, you will be intended to do it once again", in order to ensure that a person who has wittingly broken a rule doesn't breaks again, the generosity from our becomes imperative. For instance - It has been seen that , If a jailer shows little munificence towards the guilty party, he or she starts to make himself reciprocate the same feelings towards the jailer and thereby maintaining a healthy atmosphere in the jail. Imagine that once, a criminal from such jail is absolved and again starts his life in the society, wont he be kind towards other than the time when he entered such facility?
Now, some might say that showing such lenient acts can make them impervious and they are likely to commit crime again, but i would say he is not important to be humane first above everything else? Therefore nurturing via moral improvement has to always exist beside the punishment being conferred upon the person so that society can continually be intact with propriety.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, if, second, secondly, so, then, therefore, as to, for instance, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 19.5258426966 118% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.4196629213 81% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 14.8657303371 61% => OK
Relative clauses : 19.0 11.3162921348 168% => OK
Pronoun: 43.0 33.0505617978 130% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 50.0 58.6224719101 85% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 12.9106741573 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2084.0 2235.4752809 93% => OK
No of words: 426.0 442.535393258 96% => OK
Chars per words: 4.89201877934 5.05705443957 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.54310108192 4.55969084622 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.59996237467 2.79657885939 93% => OK
Unique words: 239.0 215.323595506 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.56103286385 0.4932671777 114% => OK
syllable_count: 673.2 704.065955056 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 6.24550561798 80% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.99550561798 100% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.10617977528 193% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.77640449438 169% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.38483146067 68% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.2370786517 74% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 28.0 23.0359550562 122% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 64.4602892399 60.3974514979 107% => OK
Chars per sentence: 138.933333333 118.986275619 117% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.4 23.4991977007 121% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.53333333333 5.21951772744 125% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 7.80617977528 128% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 10.2758426966 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 5.13820224719 117% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.83258426966 62% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.170115963344 0.243740707755 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0562871017654 0.0831039109588 68% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0614535857155 0.0758088955206 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.105486306495 0.150359130593 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0631909352044 0.0667264976115 95% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.8 14.1392134831 112% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.06 48.8420337079 88% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 12.1743820225 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.38 12.1639044944 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.92 8.38706741573 106% => OK
difficult_words: 105.0 100.480337079 104% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 11.8971910112 67% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 11.2143820225 118% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.