A person who knowingly commits a crime has broken the social contract and should not retain any civil rights or the right to benefit from his or her own labor.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim and the reason on which that claim is based.
Mistakes are made by every person in this world. It is human nature, to make mistakes and eventually learn from them. It is stated in the prompt " A person who knowingly commits a crime has broken the social contract and should not retain any civil rights or the right to benefit from his or her own labor". the author says that, since the person is aware that he or she is commiting a crime, they have done it anyways, and they have broken the social contract. Here i shall interpret the social contract as the unspoken code between people, that everybody should support peace and live in harmony. He adds to this statement that, this person should be stripped from his fundamental civil rights and any benefits that might be gained from his or her labor. I strongly diagree with the above statement as it has exempted the fact that this person is also a human, and that every human deserves a second chance.
Building upon this, i would like to say that, it is important to remember all the people around the world are our brothers and sisters, let them be sinned or pure as a saint, that does not matter, everybody deserves a second chance. For instance, in one of the tribes in africa, if a person has done something bad, instead of punishing the person brutally for his bad deeds, the people of the tribe, gather together and show love towards the person. They try to make the understand thta, whatever he may be going through, that they all are with him and ready to forgive him for his sins. Such an act shall cleanse his soul. Stripping the person from his rights does not make him a good person. That is a troubled person we are dealing eith, and every such person needs our help. If are to make a change in his life, and indirectly in our own society, then we must not punish the person, instead help him get back to his life.
In addition to that, it is true that such a person deserves punishment for what he has done, but the punishment does not have to be equivalent to refraining the person from his benefits. Instead, the punishment must help the person to revive back to his normal self. Most crimes result in putting the guilty in jail. The jail has to be treated as a rehabilitation centre. For example, the jail in pondicherry, india, is different from a regular jail. It makes the accused feel like they are in a good place. Punishment is necessary, but what kind of punishment we give them is more important. The punishment should help them, instead of creating more frustration and eventually leading them to do more crimes after they get back to the society.
Thus, it is necessary that we treat the sinned, as our family and help them revive back to normal life
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: The
...enefit from his or her own labor'. the author says that, since the person is a...
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Suggestion: I
...y have broken the social contract. Here i shall interpret the social contract as ...
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...ight be gained from his or her labor. I strongly diagree with the above statement as it has exem...
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Message: Did you mean 'I'?
Suggestion: I
...second chance. Building upon this, i would like to say that, it is important...
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...ve towards the person. They try to make the understand thta, whatever he may be going through,...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, anyway, but, if, may, second, so, then, thus, as to, for example, for instance, in addition, kind of, it is true
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 19.5258426966 123% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 12.4196629213 89% => OK
Conjunction : 20.0 14.8657303371 135% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.3162921348 133% => OK
Pronoun: 72.0 33.0505617978 218% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 54.0 58.6224719101 92% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 12.9106741573 93% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2221.0 2235.4752809 99% => OK
No of words: 491.0 442.535393258 111% => OK
Chars per words: 4.52342158859 5.05705443957 89% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.70728369723 4.55969084622 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.35048374408 2.79657885939 84% => OK
Unique words: 224.0 215.323595506 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.456211812627 0.4932671777 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 684.9 704.065955056 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.59117977528 88% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 16.0 6.24550561798 256% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 7.0 4.99550561798 140% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.10617977528 129% => OK
Conjunction: 6.0 1.77640449438 338% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.38483146067 137% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.2370786517 114% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 23.0359550562 91% => OK
Sentence length SD: 57.1970692072 60.3974514979 95% => OK
Chars per sentence: 96.5652173913 118.986275619 81% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.347826087 23.4991977007 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.13043478261 5.21951772744 98% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 7.80617977528 64% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 10.2758426966 88% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 11.0 5.13820224719 214% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.83258426966 62% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.24452419905 0.243740707755 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.07354625267 0.0831039109588 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.10971600416 0.0758088955206 145% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.137006718449 0.150359130593 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.138382741097 0.0667264976115 207% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.5 14.1392134831 74% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 67.08 48.8420337079 137% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 12.1743820225 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.94 12.1639044944 73% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.25 8.38706741573 86% => OK
difficult_words: 80.0 100.480337079 80% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 11.8971910112 88% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.2143820225 93% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.7820224719 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.