The primary goal of technological advancement should be to increase people's efficiency so that they have more leisure time.Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for t

Technological Enhancement surely helping us everyday and making our life smooth. But this does not connote that technological advancement aided in getting leisure time. First of all what is the author is referring by leisure time? Leisure time is the free time when the person can relax and spend the time the way he craving. It is the time when the individual cherishes his life in his own way.

Evolution of technology in different fields worked arduously to assist mankind in experiencing a smoother and better life. let us take a glance in the field of transportation, where the evolution took place from "Locomotive Steam Engine" to "Bullet Trains". Each build up to provide the fastest means of transportation of that era. The motive is to save the time in transportation which can be utilize in other vital activities. Technology has become the integral part of every individual's life. They cannot even conceive their life without it. People are so dependent on technology that it has affected their cogitative. for example, even for doing the petty calculations, individual depends on calculator that could be easily done manually years ago. In this way, people are become addictive to technology.

In this competitive world, people are utilizing the every second they get for themselves.They are so busy that sometimes they even find that 24 hours a day is not sufficient for them. Instead of using their free time on their hobbies, they focus on becoming more productive in order to grab an individual identity in this extremely talented world.

In summary, technology do assisted mankind in saving their time for different activities so that they can reach the pinnacles in their life. But people found new ways to utilize that time ending up with having no time in life.

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Average: 5 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 45, Rule ID: EVERYDAY_EVERY_DAY[3]
Message: 'Everyday' is an adjective. Did you mean 'every day'?
Suggestion: every day
...nological Enhancement surely helping us everyday and making our life smooth. But this do...
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Line 1, column 318, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'he' must be used with a third-person verb: 'craves'.
Suggestion: craves
...can relax and spend the time the way he craving. It is the time when the individual che...
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Line 3, column 124, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Let
...xperiencing a smoother and better life. let us take a glance in the field of transp...
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Line 3, column 499, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'individuals'' or 'individual's'?
Suggestion: individuals'; individual's
...y has become the integral part of every individuals life. They cannot even conceive their l...
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Line 3, column 643, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: For
... that it has affected their cogitative. for example, even for doing the petty calcu...
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Line 5, column 90, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: They
...he every second they get for themselves.They are so busy that sometimes they even fi...
^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, second, so, for example, in summary, first of all

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 19.5258426966 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 12.4196629213 40% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 14.8657303371 34% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.3162921348 106% => OK
Pronoun: 35.0 33.0505617978 106% => OK
Preposition: 39.0 58.6224719101 67% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 12.9106741573 54% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1515.0 2235.4752809 68% => OK
No of words: 297.0 442.535393258 67% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.10101010101 5.05705443957 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.15134772569 4.55969084622 91% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.97741729929 2.79657885939 106% => OK
Unique words: 171.0 215.323595506 79% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.575757575758 0.4932671777 117% => OK
syllable_count: 490.5 704.065955056 70% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 6.24550561798 64% => OK
Article: 1.0 4.99550561798 20% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.10617977528 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.38483146067 114% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.2370786517 89% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 23.0359550562 69% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 38.9144360531 60.3974514979 64% => OK
Chars per sentence: 84.1666666667 118.986275619 71% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.5 23.4991977007 70% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.61111111111 5.21951772744 69% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 7.80617977528 77% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 10.2758426966 88% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.13820224719 39% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.83258426966 145% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.220527771347 0.243740707755 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0687933644367 0.0831039109588 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0407372138277 0.0758088955206 54% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.137980085489 0.150359130593 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0152004723782 0.0667264976115 23% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.8 14.1392134831 76% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 46.78 48.8420337079 96% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 12.1743820225 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.0 12.1639044944 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.2 8.38706741573 98% => OK
difficult_words: 71.0 100.480337079 71% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 11.8971910112 63% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 11.2143820225 75% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.7820224719 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.


Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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