Progress should be the aim of any great society. People too often cling unnecessarily to obsolete ways of thinking and acting because they enjoy feeling comfortable and fear the unknown.
The goal of progress in society is to feel more comfortable. Unfortunately this feeling is not guaranteed and the fear of the unknown has often a valid reason. Hence it is not true, that progress should always be the aim of any great society. If the current situation is comfortable enough and future oriented, a society could be great without the constant strive for progress.
To grow as a society, the individual first has to overcome the fear of the unknown. This fear has helped us to survive for the past hundred thousands of years for good reasons. Religious traits, such as wearing a burka, or going to church every week, might seem obsolete at first. Recent studies however, showed, that the current rise in depression might correlate to the rising atheistic believe. Certain ways of thinking might seem obsolete at first glance, but the dramatic effects when discarded will only show afterwards, and might not be worth the risk.
Furthermore, what reason is there to always strive for more? People that follow such an ever striving life, often do accomplish great things. Yet, when asked if they are happy, they respond that they still did not achieve enough. As the author of the argument rightly stated, people enjoy feeling comfortable, but the only reason to progress, and take risks is to increase the possibilities to feel comfortably. Surely many people enjoy the feeling of progress itself, nevertheless this should not be a maxim of society, but instead a personal choice.
Of course there are countless areas in history, where it did pay off to overcome the fear of the unknown. One example is Martin Luther's revolution of the christian believe system, which liberated millions of people from unnecessary restrictions. Another example is industrialisation itself which allowed all of mankind to life a fundamentally more comfortable life, but the further civilization progresses, the more seldom such occasions will occur. At one point, the risk in depriving the precedented way of thinking and the progress gained will find an equilibrium. And at this point there should not be any maxim forcing society to take ever-increasing risks. Ultimately even threats that might eradicate society completely, such as the potential danger of a general artificial intelligence, can rise and make progress potentially cataclysmic.
Hence, while the wish for progress is understandable, it's only goal is to make the current situation more satisfactory. However, when the current situation is acceptable already, and the risk to great, it should be a personal choice to take the risk of progress, not a social maxim.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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...might correlate to the rising atheistic believe. Certain ways of thinking might seem ob...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, furthermore, hence, however, if, nevertheless, so, still, while, as to, of course, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 19.5258426966 97% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 12.4196629213 113% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 14.8657303371 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.3162921348 97% => OK
Pronoun: 19.0 33.0505617978 57% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 58.6224719101 77% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 12.9106741573 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2216.0 2235.4752809 99% => OK
No of words: 428.0 442.535393258 97% => OK
Chars per words: 5.17757009346 5.05705443957 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.548423998 4.55969084622 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.88878036022 2.79657885939 103% => OK
Unique words: 221.0 215.323595506 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.516355140187 0.4932671777 105% => OK
syllable_count: 676.8 704.065955056 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 6.24550561798 96% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.99550561798 100% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.10617977528 161% => OK
Conjunction: 9.0 1.77640449438 507% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.38483146067 68% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.2370786517 109% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 23.0359550562 82% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 39.3399046666 60.3974514979 65% => OK
Chars per sentence: 100.727272727 118.986275619 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.4545454545 23.4991977007 83% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.63636363636 5.21951772744 89% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 7.80617977528 51% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 10.2758426966 107% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 5.13820224719 175% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.83258426966 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.326670244741 0.243740707755 134% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0914403010272 0.0831039109588 110% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0744016962027 0.0758088955206 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.182272491393 0.150359130593 121% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0941529131099 0.0667264976115 141% => OK
automated_readability_index: 12.7 14.1392134831 90% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 48.8420337079 107% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 12.1743820225 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.76 12.1639044944 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.56 8.38706741573 102% => OK
difficult_words: 108.0 100.480337079 107% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 11.8971910112 67% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.2143820225 86% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.7820224719 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?
Rates: 75.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.5 Out of 6
Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.