Progress should be the aim of any great society. People too often cling unnecessarily to obsolete ways of thinking and acting because they enjoy feeling comfortable and fear the unknown.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you either agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not be true and explain how these considerations shape your position.
This issue raises a thought-provoking issue of whether we as human beings should progress or limit ourselves because of fear.
Indisputably, when we go out of our comfort zone we feel the fear. Nevertheless, it shouldn't be an obstacle when it comes to the development of society. Hence, I strongly agree that we shouldn't restrict ourselves because of these limitations and move forward.
First of all, human beings have always taken the risk to improve their life. To explain let's look at the evolution of the homo sapiens. During the times when we liked as monkeys on trees, we started making the life-changing decisions of whether to walk on land and venture into the unknown for food and other resources. Though it was a great risk to explore unknown territories such as other carnivorous animals, our ancestors took the risk and lead to what we are today.
Secondly, throughout history, humans have always strived for the betterment of their lives. The development of technology is one of the significant examples of that. To illustrate, Madam Curi who worked on radioactive materials sacrificed her life for the world. Her research has helped us to achieve many key inventions in medicine, X-rays being one of the examples. Other developments such as the invention of aircraft which was very dangerous in the early times. Later with the persistent efforts of the Wright Brothers today we can reach any corner of the world within a period of a day.
Admittedly, there are some demerits to this constant focus on improving our lives and making them more comfortable. People are busy with the hustle of day-to-day life and have less time for the family and for themselves. Parents are working leaving their children who pass their time on video games. Health is being compromised because of eating the ready-made food available in the supermarkets packed with chemicals. However, as a species, together we are making a progress in all the fields, where we never thought we could ever reach.
In conclusion, although there are some negative consequences of our constant struggle for the development and improvement of our lives, It will make the lives of people much better in the long run.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: shouldn't
...zone we feel the fear. Nevertheless, it shouldnt be an obstacle when it comes to the dev...
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Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: shouldn't
...ociety. Hence, I strongly agree that we shouldnt restrict ourselves because of these lim...
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Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'progress'.
Suggestion: progress
...r, as a species, together we are making a progress in all the fields, where we never thoug...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, hence, however, if, look, nevertheless, second, secondly, so, in conclusion, such as, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 19.5258426966 67% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 12.4196629213 32% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 14.8657303371 61% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.3162921348 80% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 37.0 33.0505617978 112% => OK
Preposition: 52.0 58.6224719101 89% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 12.9106741573 54% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1830.0 2235.4752809 82% => OK
No of words: 367.0 442.535393258 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.9863760218 5.05705443957 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.37689890912 4.55969084622 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.81606278232 2.79657885939 101% => OK
Unique words: 215.0 215.323595506 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.58583106267 0.4932671777 119% => OK
syllable_count: 564.3 704.065955056 80% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 6.24550561798 112% => OK
Article: 1.0 4.99550561798 20% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.10617977528 129% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.38483146067 137% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.2370786517 99% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 23.0359550562 78% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 35.1941401372 60.3974514979 58% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 91.5 118.986275619 77% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.35 23.4991977007 78% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.25 5.21951772744 101% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.97078651685 121% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 7.80617977528 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 10.2758426966 88% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 5.13820224719 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.83258426966 145% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0901546959306 0.243740707755 37% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0263967384712 0.0831039109588 32% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0278432040834 0.0758088955206 37% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.052624266102 0.150359130593 35% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0301019208889 0.0667264976115 45% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.2 14.1392134831 79% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 48.8420337079 126% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 12.1743820225 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.66 12.1639044944 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.75 8.38706741573 104% => OK
difficult_words: 98.0 100.480337079 98% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 11.8971910112 59% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 9.2 11.2143820225 82% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 16.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 6
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