An international development organization, in response to a vitamin A deficiency among people in the impoverished nation of Tagus, has engineered a new breed of millet high in vitamin A. While seeds for this new type of millet cost more, farmers will be paid subsidies for farming the new variety of millet. Since millet is already a staple food in Tagus, people will readily adopt the new variety. To combat vitamin A deficiency, the government of Tagus should do everything it can to promote this new type of millet.
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Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered to decide whether the recommendation is likely to have the predicted result. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the recommendation.
The author claims that to fight back the vitamin A deficiency in the Tagus the government should promote the new millet high breed. Stated this way the author reveals several instances of poor reasoning, raises several questions, and leaves the reader of the argument highly skeptical. Though it may seem tenable at first glance careful examination of the evidence reveals that it doesn't support its claim. Thus the argument is rife with holes and unsubstantiated.
Firstly, what are the other sources of vitamin A available for the citizens of The Tagus? why did they didn't show any significant effects in improving the deficiency? The argument doesn't provide any information on these sources like carrots, tomatoes, and other fruits and vegetables which may be already available for people. If the evidence was provided that none of these sources didn't work then it would be justified the consumption of the new millet high breed. Without this information, it is not convincing to replace the new millet hybrid as the source of vitamins.
Secondly, what is the cost of the new millets available for the people? There is no information about the financial conditions of the citizens. If the millets are very expensive then what about the poor who cannot afford these costly millets. It would have been cogent if the author informed that the government should provide these millets at an affordable price for all its citizens.
Finally, there is no evidence provided to support that the new millet breed has been successful in fulfilling the deficiency. Have any tests been conducted before promoting these new millets? without any studies done on this, it can be suspected that these millets may not work or show any side effects after consumption. It raises several questions about the consumption of millets.
Thus, the argument is unpersuasive as it stands. To bolster further the author should address the questions stated above and should provide the evidence that its consumption is safe, with the help of a control group. Unless these issues are not resolved the people of the Tagus should be skeptical of its claim.
Comments
Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 287, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Though” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...eader of the argument highly skeptical. Though it may seem tenable at first glance car...
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Line 1, column 382, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
...ination of the evidence reveals that it doesnt support its claim. Thus the argument is...
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Line 1, column 408, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Thus,
...veals that it doesnt support its claim. Thus the argument is rife with holes and uns...
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Line 2, column 90, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Why
...vailable for the citizens of The Tagus? why did they didnt show any significant eff...
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Line 2, column 103, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: didn't
...the citizens of The Tagus? why did they didnt show any significant effects in improvi...
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Line 2, column 180, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
... improving the deficiency? The argument doesnt provide any information on these source...
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Line 2, column 327, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...ch may be already available for people. If the evidence was provided that none of ...
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Line 2, column 383, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: didn't
...was provided that none of these sources didnt work then it would be justified the con...
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Line 2, column 514, Rule ID: ALLOW_TO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'replacing'? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'convince' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
Suggestion: replacing
... this information, it is not convincing to replace the new millet hybrid as the source of ...
^^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 144, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...e financial conditions of the citizens. If the millets are very expensive then wha...
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Line 4, column 192, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Without
...ted before promoting these new millets? without any studies done on this, it can be sus...
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Line 5, column 217, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Unless” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...safe, with the help of a control group. Unless these issues are not resolved the peopl...
^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, first, firstly, if, may, second, secondly, so, then, thus
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 19.6327345309 92% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 12.9520958084 93% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 11.1786427146 54% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 9.0 13.6137724551 66% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 30.0 28.8173652695 104% => OK
Preposition: 36.0 55.5748502994 65% => OK
Nominalization: 18.0 16.3942115768 110% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1779.0 2260.96107784 79% => OK
No of words: 350.0 441.139720559 79% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.08285714286 5.12650576532 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.32530772707 4.56307096286 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.63912323103 2.78398813304 95% => OK
Unique words: 169.0 204.123752495 83% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.482857142857 0.468620217663 103% => OK
syllable_count: 544.5 705.55239521 77% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 4.96107784431 81% => OK
Article: 3.0 8.76447105788 34% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.70958083832 148% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.67365269461 119% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 19.7664670659 101% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 22.8473053892 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 36.1489626407 57.8364921388 63% => OK
Chars per sentence: 88.95 119.503703932 74% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.5 23.324526521 75% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.3 5.70786347227 58% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 12.0 5.25449101796 228% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.20758483034 85% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 6.88822355289 131% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.67664670659 86% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.25361048611 0.218282227539 116% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0840850848213 0.0743258471296 113% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0844386222086 0.0701772020484 120% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.141634033728 0.128457276422 110% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0530639580058 0.0628817314937 84% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.2 14.3799401198 78% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 48.3550499002 112% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 12.197005988 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.89 12.5979740519 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.95 8.32208582834 96% => OK
difficult_words: 77.0 98.500998004 78% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 12.3882235529 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 11.1389221557 79% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.9071856287 67% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 287, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Though” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...eader of the argument highly skeptical. Though it may seem tenable at first glance car...
^^^^^^
Line 1, column 382, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
...ination of the evidence reveals that it doesnt support its claim. Thus the argument is...
^^^^^^
Line 1, column 408, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Thus,
...veals that it doesnt support its claim. Thus the argument is rife with holes and uns...
^^^^
Line 2, column 90, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Why
...vailable for the citizens of The Tagus? why did they didnt show any significant eff...
^^^
Line 2, column 103, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: didn't
...the citizens of The Tagus? why did they didnt show any significant effects in improvi...
^^^^^
Line 2, column 180, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
... improving the deficiency? The argument doesnt provide any information on these source...
^^^^^^
Line 2, column 327, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...ch may be already available for people. If the evidence was provided that none of ...
^^
Line 2, column 383, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: didn't
...was provided that none of these sources didnt work then it would be justified the con...
^^^^^
Line 2, column 514, Rule ID: ALLOW_TO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'replacing'? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'convince' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
Suggestion: replacing
... this information, it is not convincing to replace the new millet hybrid as the source of ...
^^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 144, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...e financial conditions of the citizens. If the millets are very expensive then wha...
^^
Line 4, column 192, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Without
...ted before promoting these new millets? without any studies done on this, it can be sus...
^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 217, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Unless” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...safe, with the help of a control group. Unless these issues are not resolved the peopl...
^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, first, firstly, if, may, second, secondly, so, then, thus
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 19.6327345309 92% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 12.9520958084 93% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 11.1786427146 54% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 9.0 13.6137724551 66% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 30.0 28.8173652695 104% => OK
Preposition: 36.0 55.5748502994 65% => OK
Nominalization: 18.0 16.3942115768 110% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1779.0 2260.96107784 79% => OK
No of words: 350.0 441.139720559 79% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.08285714286 5.12650576532 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.32530772707 4.56307096286 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.63912323103 2.78398813304 95% => OK
Unique words: 169.0 204.123752495 83% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.482857142857 0.468620217663 103% => OK
syllable_count: 544.5 705.55239521 77% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 4.96107784431 81% => OK
Article: 3.0 8.76447105788 34% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.70958083832 148% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.67365269461 119% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 19.7664670659 101% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 22.8473053892 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 36.1489626407 57.8364921388 63% => OK
Chars per sentence: 88.95 119.503703932 74% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.5 23.324526521 75% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.3 5.70786347227 58% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 12.0 5.25449101796 228% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.20758483034 85% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 6.88822355289 131% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.67664670659 86% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.25361048611 0.218282227539 116% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0840850848213 0.0743258471296 113% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0844386222086 0.0701772020484 120% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.141634033728 0.128457276422 110% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0530639580058 0.0628817314937 84% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.2 14.3799401198 78% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 48.3550499002 112% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 12.197005988 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.89 12.5979740519 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.95 8.32208582834 96% => OK
difficult_words: 77.0 98.500998004 78% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 12.3882235529 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 11.1389221557 79% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.9071856287 67% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.