Requiring university students to take a variety of courses outside their major fields of study is the best way to ensure that students become truly educated. Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.
The speaker asserts that the best way to ensure student become truly educated is requiring students to take a various of courses that are different from major field. Some people reckon that schools couldn’t force such policy; However, schools have resources to force this policy, and research how to fulfill it. In addition, such policy helps university to fulfill their social responsibility. And students will benefit from such policy; Thus, I strongly agree with the speaker.
To begin with, requiring students to take a curriculum that are different from students’ major fields helps university accomplish their social obligation. The university has to help country train expert in order to maintain continuous development of country. In many schools, there are many reforms to ensure every students can learn at least two courses that are different from students’ major field, since schools hope students can find out second expertise but not confine to their major field. For example, in Taiwan, students must study three courses that are different from students’ major field; Through studying variety courses, schools hope students fulfill them to facilitate occupational development in the future, and then make country improving. In sum, schools have responsibility of requiring students to study variety courses in order to make country progressing.
Additionally, Students will also benefit from such policy. Since taking various courses improve students’ ability to deal with the problems, students will increase the probability of success in the future. As the world has changed fast, students who has only study one type of courses is incapable of catching up with others’ pace. Take semiconductor industry as an example; In company, there are many employee that have different backgrounds: Electrical Engineering, Chemical Engineering, Material Sciences. When students know many other knowledges that are different from major field, students have more possibility of outperform in the company. In a word, student will benefit from this policy, since being a generalist has positive effect on occupational development in the future.
Finally, this recommendation is totally practical after considering schools’ resources. Schools has enough resources to research how to help students design a series of the curriculum, and design a new system of choosing courses. At the same time, schools can save more time and money, and all revision is convenient because only the relevant sector assistant such policy, which makes policy more effective. In Taiwan, for instance, because only the academic affair office manages education information, including helping students to choose course and arranging curriculum, students choosing courses can go smoothly every semesters. In a brief, as schools have resources, requiring students to choose a variety of course is practical.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 260, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Possible agreement error -- use past participle here: 'studied'.
Suggestion: studied
...has changed fast, students who has only study one type of courses is incapable of cat...
^^^^^
Line 5, column 398, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun employee seems to be countable; consider using: 'many employees'.
Suggestion: many employees
...ry as an example; In company, there are many employee that have different backgrounds: Electr...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 403, Rule ID: THERE_RE_MANY[3]
Message: Possible agreement error. Did you mean 'employees'?
Suggestion: employees
... an example; In company, there are many employee that have different backgrounds: Electr...
^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, however, if, second, so, then, thus, as to, at least, for example, for instance, in addition, of course, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 19.5258426966 67% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 12.4196629213 72% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 14.8657303371 54% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.3162921348 97% => OK
Pronoun: 17.0 33.0505617978 51% => OK
Preposition: 66.0 58.6224719101 113% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 12.9106741573 70% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2471.0 2235.4752809 111% => OK
No of words: 437.0 442.535393258 99% => OK
Chars per words: 5.65446224256 5.05705443957 112% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.57214883401 4.55969084622 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.8424295168 2.79657885939 102% => OK
Unique words: 217.0 215.323595506 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.496567505721 0.4932671777 101% => OK
syllable_count: 756.0 704.065955056 107% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 6.24550561798 32% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.99550561798 40% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.10617977528 225% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 5.0 1.77640449438 281% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 14.0 4.38483146067 319% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.2370786517 99% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 23.0359550562 91% => OK
Sentence length SD: 52.3164410105 60.3974514979 87% => OK
Chars per sentence: 123.55 118.986275619 104% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.85 23.4991977007 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.9 5.21951772744 132% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 7.80617977528 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 10.2758426966 136% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 5.13820224719 19% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.83258426966 103% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.336178805568 0.243740707755 138% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.118377469035 0.0831039109588 142% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0992920629487 0.0758088955206 131% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.215580273447 0.150359130593 143% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0685922467237 0.0667264976115 103% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.1 14.1392134831 114% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 41.7 48.8420337079 85% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 12.1743820225 104% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.49 12.1639044944 127% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.62 8.38706741573 103% => OK
difficult_words: 109.0 100.480337079 108% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 11.8971910112 97% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.2143820225 93% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
---------------------
Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
---------------------
Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.