Scandals have become a very common thing today and with the growing impact of press and media, they have found a way in our daily lives. Scandals are real and that is what increases the impact of the scandal. A scandal can be related to politics, academia, business, entertainment and anything which is generally high profiled with money and power being the core issue in most cases. The whole world virtually sees what is happening to the people, directly and indirectly, involved in these scandals.
A scandal may or may not be linked directly to us. Political scandals often are related to corruption and the malpractices of the people in power and position. They are directly linked to our lives as the money involved is the tax payer’s hard earned money which goes to a group of persons who try to manipulate the rules and use their power for their own vested interests. In March 2007 about 14 people were killed in a small place (Nanadigram) in West Bengal, a state in India. Nandigram and its nearby areas were declared as a special economic zone by the government were industries could be setup by foreign investors with investments to the tune of 90,000 crore rupees. Nandigram incident go a lot of media attention and the whole country came to know about the incident. This prompted an investigation and recently the people who were killed in tghe protests got compensation. There are many such other political scandals which have brought down governments and have paved the way for a correct and better future. The scale of impact would have been impossible to achieve if the media had not supported and projected the incident in a correct manner.
Scandals are not always political and certain general issues and loopholes of a system are also shown by such scandals. On the 31st December two girls were molested by a mob outside a hotel and two journalists gathered up the courage to control the mob and get hold of the situation. Again through proper channel there were wide spread protests in the country where the incident took place and finally action was taken. Similarly a very high profiled murder case of a lady bartender Jessica Lal by son of a high profiled politician was again highlighted by the media and after years of protests justice was finally given. In these two incidents the inability of the law protectors has been highlighted and actions have been taken against the guilty. There have been various attempts by non-government organizations to highlight this fact but actions were not taken and those who tries to speak out often bore the brunt of speaking against the system. It finally took a series of scandals to bring out this reform.
Scandals are things which directly happen in front of us and are mostly related to us. They start a mass movement against a problem existing in society or the system which might affect us some day. A speaker or a reformer can only refer to such issues to increase awareness among people to be aware of certain malpractices and not to bow down to wrong people. A speaker or a reformer cannot highlight a problem that has not been proved as it could be a false allegation, a thing often practiced by politicians during elections. But a scandal needs to be publicized by an unbiased media which can bring all the facts of a scandal right in to your living room and with the recent developments in technology they can quickly convey this information and not to forget the camera which virtually places you at the spot of scandal giving you a first hand account of the scandal . Finally it can be said that the impact of a scandal is far reaching and can bring a lot of change to the existing rules and trends in the society.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: are often
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Suggestion: Similarly,
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, if, may, similarly, so, in general, in most cases
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 36.0 19.5258426966 184% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 12.4196629213 105% => OK
Conjunction : 35.0 14.8657303371 235% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.3162921348 124% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 33.0505617978 88% => OK
Preposition: 92.0 58.6224719101 157% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 12.9106741573 93% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3059.0 2235.4752809 137% => OK
No of words: 648.0 442.535393258 146% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.72067901235 5.05705443957 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 5.04537849152 4.55969084622 111% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.58643886047 2.79657885939 92% => OK
Unique words: 309.0 215.323595506 144% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.476851851852 0.4932671777 97% => OK
syllable_count: 960.3 704.065955056 136% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 6.24550561798 80% => OK
Article: 8.0 4.99550561798 160% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.10617977528 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.38483146067 68% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 20.2370786517 128% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 23.0359550562 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 58.9661044948 60.3974514979 98% => OK
Chars per sentence: 117.653846154 118.986275619 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.9230769231 23.4991977007 106% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.92307692308 5.21951772744 56% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 7.80617977528 77% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 10.2758426966 49% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 20.0 5.13820224719 389% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.83258426966 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.167541548544 0.243740707755 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0425178688952 0.0831039109588 51% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.044542811556 0.0758088955206 59% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.104503151401 0.150359130593 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0592780868329 0.0667264976115 89% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.3 14.1392134831 94% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 55.58 48.8420337079 114% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 12.1743820225 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.39 12.1639044944 85% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.99 8.38706741573 95% => OK
difficult_words: 130.0 100.480337079 129% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 11.8971910112 67% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 11.2143820225 103% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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