Scandals are useful because they focus our attention on problems in ways that no speaker or reformer ever could. Do you agree or disagree?
It is said that the existence of some actions which are morally and legally wrong and can cause people's outrage is useful because individuals' attention is focused more on problems. This is something that even a reformer or speaker cannot do. I agree with this statement to some extent.
Scandal is an activity that can make a large group of people angry, activities like embezzlement. The general objection to these activities is good because individuals avoid repeating them and can be aware of their societies and the existing problems. For example, in my country Iran, every day we are exposed to increasing living costs because of the embezzlement done in the companies. The trust of people is misused, and they lose their money easily. We can see the objection of people in front of companies on the news, and I believe that this is good because individuals understand that they should not trust to each company. Sometimes even a speaker cannot conceive people to not invest their money in such companies. Most of the time we can learn from the mistakes of others. When a problem takes the shape of a scandal, more people are involved and affected by it, and more individuals become aware of the problems due to the public outrage such as the general strike. Sometimes a reformer or speaker cannot have a dominant role because when the trust of people is misused, they cannot trust anybody, and they might think that these people also try to cheat them and distort the correct information.
However, we cannot ignore the role of a reformer or a speaker because most of the time a general objection is guided by them. They try to show people the correct and legal way of gaining their rights. These people always attempt to focus people's attention on problems, and I think the general objection towards illegal activities is evoked by a reformer of a speaker as a leader.
To summarize, in my view, for attracting people's attention to problems, scandals can be useful but the role of a reformer or speaker as a leader should not be ignored.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, so, for example, i think, such as, in my view
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 19.5258426966 87% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 12.4196629213 113% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 14.8657303371 114% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.3162921348 80% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 35.0 33.0505617978 106% => OK
Preposition: 41.0 58.6224719101 70% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 12.9106741573 93% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1707.0 2235.4752809 76% => OK
No of words: 355.0 442.535393258 80% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.80845070423 5.05705443957 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.34067318298 4.55969084622 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.59044066918 2.79657885939 93% => OK
Unique words: 158.0 215.323595506 73% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.445070422535 0.4932671777 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 549.9 704.065955056 78% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 6.24550561798 128% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.99550561798 40% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.10617977528 32% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.77640449438 281% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.38483146067 68% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.2370786517 79% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 23.0359550562 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 56.0143675765 60.3974514979 93% => OK
Chars per sentence: 106.6875 118.986275619 90% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.1875 23.4991977007 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.0625 5.21951772744 78% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 7.80617977528 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 10.2758426966 68% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 5.13820224719 136% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.83258426966 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.214338458893 0.243740707755 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0756327908734 0.0831039109588 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0458728895027 0.0758088955206 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.157237012778 0.150359130593 105% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.026430489482 0.0667264976115 40% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.3 14.1392134831 87% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 48.8420337079 118% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 12.1743820225 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.62 12.1639044944 87% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.57 8.38706741573 90% => OK
difficult_words: 64.0 100.480337079 64% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 11.8971910112 71% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.2143820225 96% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.7820224719 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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