The following appeared in a letter to the editor of the Balmer Island Gazette.
"On Balmer Island, where mopeds serve as a popular form of transportation, the population increases to 100,000 during the summer months. To reduce the number of accidents involving mopeds and pedestrians, the town council of Balmer Island should limit the number of mopeds rented by the island's moped rental companies from 50 per day to 25 per day during the summer season. By limiting the number of rentals, the town council will attain the 50 percent annual reduction in moped accidents that was achieved last year on the neighboring island of Seaville, when Seaville's town council enforced similar limits on moped rentals."
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the recommendation is likely to have the predicted result. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the recommendation.
In the letter, the editor tries to give a solution to the reduction of accidents involving mopeds and pedestrians. His / her suggestion is to curtail the “number of mopeds rented by the island's moped rental companies from 50 per day to 25 per day during the summer season”. His/ her suggestion is only based on the evidence on the neighboring island of Seaville. I believe that the author also has to have a clear consideration of other factors that can contribute to accidents. Additionally, he/she has to give reasonable reasons that the presented solution could be done with the expected results on the Island.
On the one hand, the author believes that just because the moped is the most popular form of transportation, all accidents are related to it. But there is no evidence that all individuals in the Island only use moped. Do all people have enough ability to use moped? do all people like to use it? Is the only form of transportation in this Island is moped?
In addition to this, how he/ she is sure that other factors do not interfere with accidents? Different factors can contribute to accidents, such as winding roads, lack of safety on the roads, the weather conditions and lack of proficiency in controlling mopeds or other transports. Each factor mentioned can cause accidents individually. The author has to consider that if the roads in the Island have problems, the reduction of moped will not reduce the number of accidents. If people use other forms of transportation, such as cars or motorcycles, and they do not have enough proficiency, the limited use of moped does not help the reduction of the number of accidents. Also, the weather condition is the factor that cannot be controlled, and it is the most important factor in accidents.
Finally, the author has said that “By limiting the number of rentals, the town council will attain the 50 percent annual reduction in moped accidents that was achieved last year on the neighboring island of Seaville, when Seaville's town council enforced similar limits on moped rentals. “There are some questions with no answers. Do the two islands have the same geographical conditions? Are there accurate statistical figures about this subject? How the author can prove that by running this limitation on the Island, a similar outcome will happen? Answering these questions to perform the limitation of mopeds is important.
To summarize, in my view, the suggestion of the author for the reduction of accidents is not cogent and more factors and conditions should be considered for solving this problem.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 22 15
No. of Words: 432 350
No. of Characters: 2085 1500
No. of Different Words: 192 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.559 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.826 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.736 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 154 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 109 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 76 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 60 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 19.636 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 9.632 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.409 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.304 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.339 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.104 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 2 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 266, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Do
...eople have enough ability to use moped? do all people like to use it? Is the only ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, if, so, as to, in addition, such as, in my view
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 19.6327345309 92% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.9520958084 77% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 11.1786427146 81% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 13.6137724551 88% => OK
Pronoun: 31.0 28.8173652695 108% => OK
Preposition: 60.0 55.5748502994 108% => OK
Nominalization: 20.0 16.3942115768 122% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2166.0 2260.96107784 96% => OK
No of words: 431.0 441.139720559 98% => OK
Chars per words: 5.02552204176 5.12650576532 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.55637350225 4.56307096286 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.90350867991 2.78398813304 104% => OK
Unique words: 202.0 204.123752495 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.4686774942 0.468620217663 100% => OK
syllable_count: 675.0 705.55239521 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 4.96107784431 81% => OK
Article: 11.0 8.76447105788 126% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.67365269461 179% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.22255489022 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 19.7664670659 116% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 22.8473053892 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 60.9139279332 57.8364921388 105% => OK
Chars per sentence: 94.1739130435 119.503703932 79% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.7391304348 23.324526521 80% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.91304347826 5.70786347227 51% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.25449101796 19% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.20758483034 73% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 11.0 6.88822355289 160% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.67664670659 128% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.189114236839 0.218282227539 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0592260579409 0.0743258471296 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0520320530069 0.0701772020484 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.10370931917 0.128457276422 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0463530063335 0.0628817314937 74% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.6 14.3799401198 81% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 48.3550499002 110% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 12.197005988 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.89 12.5979740519 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.19 8.32208582834 98% => OK
difficult_words: 100.0 98.500998004 102% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 12.3882235529 89% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 11.1389221557 83% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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