The following appeared in a letter to the editor of the Balmer Island Gazette.
"On Balmer Island, where mopeds serve as a popular form of transportation, the population increases to 100,000 during the summer months. To reduce the number of accidents involving mopeds and pedestrians, the town council of Balmer Island should limit the number of mopeds rented by the island's moped rental companies from 50 per day to 25 per day during the summer season. By limiting the number of rentals, the town council will attain the 50 percent annual reduction in moped accidents that was achieved last year on the neighboring island of Seaville, when Seaville's town council enforced similar limits on moped rentals."
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the recommendation is likely to have the predicted result. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the recommendation.
The author has boldly made a claim that imposing stints on the moped rentals will bring down the moped related accidents by 50 percent without due consideration to answers of some of the important questions. I will discuss in the subsequent paragraphs about what questions need to be answered to actually see if author's recommendation is logical and how the anwers to these questions will help evaluate the recommendation.
The author mentions that mopeds are a popular means of tranportation in Balmer Island and reducing the moped rentals to 25 per day for every moped rental service would help reduce the moped accidents by 50 percent. We should first answer the question if the tourists will be using mopeds as well. If tourists do not use mopeds, then implementing the author's recommendation will be futile.
The author recommends to limit the moped rentals to 25 per day which will lead to decrease in moped accidents by 50 percent in Balmer Island as observed in Seaville. The author fails to take note of the number of moped servies in Seaville as compared with Balber Island. The author's claim that the accidents will be reduced by 50 percent will only be corraborated only if there are equal number of moped rental serivces in Balmer Islands and in Seaville. If there happen to be different number of moped rental services in Balmer Island, then the reduction in moped rentals will have to changed accordingly inorder to acheive 50 percent reduction in moped accidents. The author should also note if mopeds are a popular means of transportation in Seaville as well. If the answer is no, then the strategy followed in Seaville to reduce moped related accidents to 50 percent won't work in the case of Balmer Islands.
One other question that needs to answered to see if redcution in moped renatls per company will actually decrease the moped accidents is will the number of moped rental companies remain same or different during summer months? When the author's recommendation is implemented, there is a possibility that the existing rental companies open more new rental companies to overcome the restriction and increase their revenue by manifold. If this happens, then author's suggestion won't have any affect on the number of moped accidents.
We should also look at the traffic regulations in Balmer Islands as compared to that of Seaville. One of the reasons that there is 50 percent reduction in moped related accidents in Seaville after restricting the number of moped rentals could be due to the traffic regulatioins that are imposed in Seaville. The author should also consider the traffic regulations that are followed in Balmer Islands. If there happen to be a large difference in the traffic regulations followed in Balmer Islands and those followed in Seaville, then the author's prediction will definitly be weakened.
As we can see, there are quite a few questions that need be answered in order to actually evaluate if the author's recommendation will produce the claimed results. If the answers to these questions are not in sync with what the author has resumed, then the author is definitely wrong in his/her prediction.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 20 15
No. of Words: 528 350
No. of Characters: 2600 1500
No. of Different Words: 189 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.794 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.924 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.723 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 204 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 148 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 101 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 52 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 26.4 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 8.108 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.7 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.396 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.633 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.162 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 6 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 176, Rule ID: SOME_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'some'.
Suggestion: some
...without due consideration to answers of some of the important questions. I will discuss in ...
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Line 5, column 351, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
...o not use mopeds, then implementing the authors recommendation will be futile. Th...
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Line 9, column 12, Rule ID: ADMIT_ENJOY_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the gerund form: 'recommends limiting'.
Suggestion: recommends limiting
...dation will be futile. The author recommends to limit the moped rentals to 25 per day which w...
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Line 9, column 272, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...eaville as compared with Balber Island. The authors claim that the accidents will b...
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Line 13, column 236, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
...ifferent during summer months? When the authors recommendation is implemented, there is...
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Line 13, column 487, Rule ID: AFFECT_EFFECT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'effect'?
Suggestion: effect
..., then authors suggestion wont have any affect on the number of moped accidents. We ...
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Line 17, column 538, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
...nd those followed in Seaville, then the authors prediction will definitly be weakened. ...
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Line 21, column 107, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
...ed in order to actually evaluate if the authors recommendation will produce the claimed...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, actually, also, first, if, look, so, then, well
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 19.6327345309 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 22.0 12.9520958084 170% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 11.1786427146 54% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 12.0 13.6137724551 88% => OK
Pronoun: 21.0 28.8173652695 73% => OK
Preposition: 77.0 55.5748502994 139% => OK
Nominalization: 19.0 16.3942115768 116% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2649.0 2260.96107784 117% => OK
No of words: 525.0 441.139720559 119% => OK
Chars per words: 5.04571428571 5.12650576532 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.78673985869 4.56307096286 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.76882155241 2.78398813304 99% => OK
Unique words: 197.0 204.123752495 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.375238095238 0.468620217663 80% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 823.5 705.55239521 117% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 4.96107784431 60% => OK
Article: 7.0 8.76447105788 80% => OK
Subordination: 8.0 2.70958083832 295% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 4.22255489022 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 19.7664670659 101% => OK
Sentence length: 26.0 22.8473053892 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 50.6719597016 57.8364921388 88% => OK
Chars per sentence: 132.45 119.503703932 111% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.25 23.324526521 113% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.0 5.70786347227 53% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 6.0 5.15768463074 116% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.25449101796 152% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.20758483034 73% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 11.0 6.88822355289 160% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.67664670659 64% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.207044123654 0.218282227539 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0874799593426 0.0743258471296 118% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0648532289649 0.0701772020484 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.119421946739 0.128457276422 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.082000394623 0.0628817314937 130% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.5 14.3799401198 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.09 48.3550499002 93% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 12.197005988 110% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.31 12.5979740519 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.78 8.32208582834 93% => OK
difficult_words: 95.0 98.500998004 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 18.0 12.3882235529 145% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 11.1389221557 111% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.9071856287 109% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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