The following appeared in a letter to the editor of the Balmer Island Gazette.
"On Balmer Island, where mopeds serve as a popular form of transportation, the population increases to 100,000 during the summer months. To reduce the number of accidents involving mopeds and pedestrians, the town council of Balmer Island should limit the number of mopeds rented by the island's moped rental companies from 50 per day to 25 per day during the summer season. By limiting the number of rentals, the town council will attain the 50 percent annual reduction in moped accidents that was achieved last year on the neighboring island of Seaville, when Seaville's town council enforced similar limits on moped rentals."
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the recommendation is likely to have the predicted result. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the recommendation.
In the letter to the editor, It is stated that to reduce the numbers of accidents during the summer seasons, the town council of Balmer Island should limit the numbers of mopeds vechiles to 50 percent. The author has reached to this conclusion based on the facts that mopeds serve as a popular form of transportation in the Balmer Island and the authors states that Seaville town council enforced similar limits on the moped rentals, then the same should also be implemented on the Balmar island. However, before this argument can be properly evaluated, three questions must be answered.
Firstly, is the Seaville's town situation is same as in the Balmar island? Maybe, the Seaville's town council has reduced the limits of mopeds vechiles usage to 50 percent due to some other conditions like pollution, Monoply of vechiles or more traffic jam. The author prematurely assumes that with the reduction of same mopeds vechile in Balmar island as it happened in Seaville will help in the reduction of accidents in Balmar, but he nubulously connects two situtaions of different cities and try to establish the conclusion based on the Seaville town council study, without actually evaluated the real conditions and situation of Balmar island. Further, in the Seaville's island the reduction in the moped accidents happened only in the last year. Maybe,only in the previous year, there might have been increase the number of accidents, the author try to estbalish the decision based on the study of last year reduction data of Serville island. If either of the above scenarios has merit, then the conclusion drawn in the original argument is significantly weakened.
Secondly, The author states that the town council should reduce the numbers from 25 per day to 50 per day.The town Council has decided this 50 per day reduction of mopeds will actually reduce the accidents to 50 percents. Maybe, the same results might be achieved with the reduction of 10 percent or 20 percent-perhaps 5 percent reduction of mopeds vechiles and 10 percent reduction of other vechiles will give the same results. The author has not provided the enough reasons of 50 per day reductions of moped vechiles, if he do so, then the argument sounds more convincing.
Finally, The author assumes that as the moped vechiles serve as a popular form of transportation, the town council should limit the number of moped vechiles. The idea of reduction of moped vechiles sounds vague. What if, instead of reducing the vechiles, the town council should built several roadside pathways to the pedestrains or some other facilities like traffic lights or improvements in the traffic management. The only idea of limiting number of moped vechiles is not establishing the conclusion effectively. Maybe, if the towncouncil provides other facilities as mentioned before, then it is possible to reduce the number of accidents between moped vechiles and pedestrains. If the towncouncil will do so, then the argument does not hold water.
In the conclusion, the argument, as it stands now, is considerably flawed due to reliance on the several unwarranted assumptions. If the author can able to provide more evidences and able to provide the answer of the above three questions, then it will be possible to fully evaluate the viability of the proposed recommendation of reduction of moped vechiles by 50 perday to redue the accidents between pedestrains and moped vechiles.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 20 15
No. of Words: 564 350
No. of Characters: 2811 1500
No. of Different Words: 202 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.873 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.984 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.714 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 225 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 163 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 116 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 66 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 28.2 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 14.052 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.6 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.362 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.558 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.13 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 756, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , only
...ts happened only in the last year. Maybe,only in the previous year, there might have ...
^^^^^
Line 7, column 107, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: The
...e numbers from 25 per day to 50 per day.The town Council has decided this 50 per da...
^^^
Line 7, column 527, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'he' must be used with a third-person verb: 'does'.
Suggestion: does
...day reductions of moped vechiles, if he do so, then the argument sounds more convi...
^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, finally, first, firstly, however, if, may, second, secondly, so, then
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 19.6327345309 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 12.9520958084 116% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 11.1786427146 107% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 13.6137724551 44% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 16.0 28.8173652695 56% => OK
Preposition: 83.0 55.5748502994 149% => OK
Nominalization: 23.0 16.3942115768 140% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2883.0 2260.96107784 128% => OK
No of words: 562.0 441.139720559 127% => OK
Chars per words: 5.12989323843 5.12650576532 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.86893614481 4.56307096286 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.79065795314 2.78398813304 100% => OK
Unique words: 217.0 204.123752495 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.386120996441 0.468620217663 82% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 889.2 705.55239521 126% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 4.96107784431 20% => OK
Article: 15.0 8.76447105788 171% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 2.70958083832 258% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.22255489022 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 19.7664670659 101% => OK
Sentence length: 28.0 22.8473053892 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 84.7316204259 57.8364921388 147% => OK
Chars per sentence: 144.15 119.503703932 121% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.1 23.324526521 120% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.5 5.70786347227 79% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.25449101796 57% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.20758483034 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 6.88822355289 131% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.67664670659 43% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.20452021793 0.218282227539 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0763289966512 0.0743258471296 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0840590799229 0.0701772020484 120% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.129295252441 0.128457276422 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0880599891446 0.0628817314937 140% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.8 14.3799401198 117% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.06 48.3550499002 89% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 12.197005988 116% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.77 12.5979740519 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.4 8.32208582834 101% => OK
difficult_words: 120.0 98.500998004 122% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 18.0 12.3882235529 145% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 11.1389221557 119% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.9071856287 109% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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