Claim: Governments must ensure that their major cities receive the financial support they need in order to thrive.
Reason: It is primarily in cities that a nation's cultural traditions are preserved and generated.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim and the reason on which that claim is based.
It is noticeable in modern world that major cities are the attraction to other countries for its aesthetics of culture and beauty, major countries from the world get hooked on to the major cities by its culture and tradition it follows, But as per statistics, most people in the major cities are the one who migrates from the minor one and establish themselves in big cities in order to find better work opportunities and as a result, indigenous people and these migrated ones are collectively help to establish the aesthetics of culture and tradition of the city, but not particularly the major cities itself. The prompt recommends that government should spend financial aid to support the major cities in order to thrive. In my opinion, I somehow disagree with the prompt for idea of investing money in major cities for two reasons.
Firstly, culture creation and generation of any city is due to the establishment of variety of people and their idea of living their life differently. Major cities are not the only one which generate and preserve culture, People from minor cities are the perfect showrunner behind the comely culture and tradition. Records from the times magazine says that every year at least 4 percent of minor cities people migrates to find work and having permanent intention of living in the major one. As a result, various regional society establish every year which includes people of different religion, different background, and of course variations in food and dress sense, these variations helps to thrive the eccentricity of variations in major cities, and eventually we can call it culture, hence culture generation is because of amalgamation of these minor people life style with the Indigenous people of major one. Hence, major one are not only the particular one behind the culture tradition.
Moreover, The prompt recommends that government should provide financial aid to major cities for preserve its culture, But instead of giving the whole financial aid to these major one, Government should provide some major part or at least 70 percent to the minor cities, because as per the previous paragraph, minor people are the ones who helps in create the tradition in Major cities, so it should be better to invest major money in this culture creator cities.If government will invest money in minor one, it might be increase production of clothing, food or various Artform created by people. One can imagine, the cultural pool of people of minor cities and how they will establish their own eccentric culture, which collectively helps the major cities culture to thrive. So, the culture generation is primarily from minor cities. World Business magazines of 2019 reports that, major Artform theatre shows are successively increasing from the last five years and at the same time, population of major cities also has been increased and the major contributors of population increase are the migrated one.
To conclude, above these two instances can lucidly tell us that major cities are not the only one in culture creation and preservation, there are several people from minor cities, which creates and establish the culture of major cities. Instead of this, some people will argue that, Major cities have large population and job opportunities and they are the major reason of jobs creators and development of any country, but it is fair to say that major people who are doing job and business are the one, who migrated from the other cities and eventually creates various form of community belong to same area and same tradition and one can say that major population are because of these migrated one.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 495, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'helped'.
Suggestion: helped
...nd these migrated ones are collectively help to establish the aesthetics of culture ...
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Line 5, column 333, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'times'' or 'time's'?
Suggestion: times'; time's
...culture and tradition. Records from the times magazine says that every year at least ...
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Line 9, column 464, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: If
...or money in this culture creator cities.If government will invest money in minor o...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, hence, if, moreover, so, at least, of course, as a result, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 19.5258426966 118% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 12.4196629213 97% => OK
Conjunction : 32.0 14.8657303371 215% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 17.0 11.3162921348 150% => OK
Pronoun: 37.0 33.0505617978 112% => OK
Preposition: 80.0 58.6224719101 136% => OK
Nominalization: 26.0 12.9106741573 201% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3062.0 2235.4752809 137% => OK
No of words: 602.0 442.535393258 136% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.08637873754 5.05705443957 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.95335121839 4.55969084622 109% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.60117403 2.79657885939 93% => OK
Unique words: 225.0 215.323595506 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.373754152824 0.4932671777 76% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 978.3 704.065955056 139% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 6.24550561798 64% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.99550561798 80% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 6.0 1.77640449438 338% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.38483146067 91% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 20.2370786517 69% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 43.0 23.0359550562 187% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 180.515022836 60.3974514979 299% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 218.714285714 118.986275619 184% => OK
Words per sentence: 43.0 23.4991977007 183% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.07142857143 5.21951772744 135% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 7.80617977528 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 10.2758426966 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 5.13820224719 19% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.83258426966 62% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.261002185034 0.243740707755 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.132227919561 0.0831039109588 159% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0700813013484 0.0758088955206 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.197354749309 0.150359130593 131% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0452701604807 0.0667264976115 68% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 24.0 14.1392134831 170% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 27.83 48.8420337079 57% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 20.1 12.1743820225 165% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.13 12.1639044944 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.5 8.38706741573 101% => OK
difficult_words: 104.0 100.480337079 104% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 56.0 11.8971910112 471% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 19.2 11.2143820225 171% => OK
text_standard: 24.0 11.7820224719 204% => The average readability is very high. Good job!
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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