Claim: Governments must ensure that their major cities receive the financial support they need in order to thrive.Reason: It is primarily in cities that a nation's cultural traditions are preserved and generated.

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Claim: Governments must ensure that their major cities receive the financial support they need in order to thrive.

Reason: It is primarily in cities that a nation's cultural traditions are preserved and generated.

I am totally consonant with the topic.Yes the law can be passed that control the people behavour's or limit them within certain criteria but they cann't change the people's heart and mind. people mind are the place where they can think or creat the view without constrain.there is not limit in thinking the idea or view.people's thought are independent's of the enviroment where they survive. So, people thought are independent of the law too and cannot reform people behavour.

people thought are not control by the law it is control by the own's belif.people is the one who control the idea or thought.people thought are random and can be control if the person can meditate.Most of the people can control the thought with the help of meditation.if people has proper steps for meditation they can control the thought.Hence if person train there brain and meditate with proper steps they can control there thought.

Let's take an example where a people are force to change there mind using law (criminal mind people).These criminal mind people are must likely to make the criminal activity than other people.Since the law prohibit the idea of commiting crime but the people with criminal mind are never stop of commiting crime but are more likey to commite crime than other people.So,we can conclude that the people thought are control by own self not by the law.

Now let's take an example where there is people who think only enforcing the law can control's the people thought.I find those people must insane since the conclusion made by them is absurd.Here the people behaviour can be control by the law only if the people belief in the law.Those people who think law is the suprem power and should be followed.THerefore the conclusion made is conditionally correct but it doesn't hold the solenmity of the idea.

In my opinion,the people thought are more likely to be control by the belief what they follow.people belief control the thought process of ownself.if people wants to make there thought positive they must allow positive thought to pass through them.The positive thought can be passed through the person meditation.therefore the people's thought is not control by the law it is a random process and can be control if person can mediatate with the stander procedure.Hence people thought are human's own belief and not depend upon the law which are enforced by the government to control the crime.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, hence, if, so, therefore, in my opinion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 29.0 19.5258426966 149% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 18.0 12.4196629213 145% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 14.8657303371 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.3162921348 88% => OK
Pronoun: 22.0 33.0505617978 67% => OK
Preposition: 39.0 58.6224719101 67% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 12.9106741573 39% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2037.0 2235.4752809 91% => OK
No of words: 404.0 442.535393258 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.04207920792 5.05705443957 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.48327461151 4.55969084622 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.79878920388 2.79657885939 100% => OK
Unique words: 157.0 215.323595506 73% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.388613861386 0.4932671777 79% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 611.1 704.065955056 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 6.24550561798 80% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.99550561798 40% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.38483146067 46% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 7.0 20.2370786517 35% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 57.0 23.0359550562 247% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 170.371862197 60.3974514979 282% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 291.0 118.986275619 245% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 57.7142857143 23.4991977007 246% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 6.28571428571 5.21951772744 120% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 23.0 7.80617977528 295% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 10.2758426966 29% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.13820224719 39% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.83258426966 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0254365103986 0.243740707755 10% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0174692544277 0.0831039109588 21% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0118687536047 0.0758088955206 16% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0188978881058 0.150359130593 13% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.00934527268803 0.0667264976115 14% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 31.2 14.1392134831 221% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: 22.08 48.8420337079 45% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 24.3 12.1743820225 200% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.84 12.1639044944 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.97 8.38706741573 107% => OK
difficult_words: 64.0 100.480337079 64% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 11.8971910112 113% => OK
gunning_fog: 24.8 11.2143820225 221% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 25.0 11.7820224719 212% => The average readability is very high. Good job!
What are above readability scores?

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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.

Rates: 16.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 6
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