Scandals are useful because they focus our attention on problems in ways that no speaker or reformer ever could Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim In developing and supporting your position be su

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Scandals are useful because they focus our attention on problems in ways that no speaker or reformer ever could.

Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim. In developing and supporting your position, be sure to address the most compelling reasons and/or examples that could be used to challenge your position.

In modern democracies, the attention of the public is analogous to a focusing lens, without it, the power of government will not able to focus on the problems efficiently. However, this attention is a rather limited source, its’ power plummets if it tries to focus on multiple things and hence, something is required to keep this attention focused on prominent problems. Scandals excel in this focusing task in a way no speaker or reformer ever could dream due to two main reasons.

Every scandal, by its own nature, consists of a story. These stories tend to be extreme and tragic stories with startling details, otherwise they wouldn’t be considered a scandal, which makes it easier to focus for public. Moreover, scandals have generally morally white and black sides and this makes it easier to distinguish what is wrong or right, and how to deal with it. On the contrary, speeches consist of more abstract concepts and statistics that are harder to comprehend and focus on. Moreover, speeches have generally morally grey sides that makes situation harder to judge emotionally, and thus, deciding what should have been done becomes harder as well. To give an example from recent events, no talk about the racism towards black people from the last 10 years was able to gather attention that the scandal about George Lloyd gathered. In the latter event, it was easy to identify what is the problem, what shall be done, and sides were morally contrasting as far as they can be.

Secondly, there is a unique interaction between media and a scandal that no speech can replicate. Whenever the public is notified of a scandal, demand for the news about scandal increases. This encourages the media to dig deeper about the scandal to match the supply. If a scandal is significant enough, more news about scandal will lead to larger amount of people interested in scandal and vice versa. This loop may lead to wildfire like phenomenon that every possible news source will cover details of the scandal and all citizens will be aware of the scandal that occurred. Additionally, this scandal focused public may also lead to increase about events that are similar to scandal, and thus, public can gain additional awareness regarding the issue. As an example, media spotlighted events about racism towards black people more than before this year due to George Lloyd scandal.

To sum it up, scandals tend to resonate with people more than any speaker ever could. Even though scandals are made from harmful events that must be avoided, they are capable of keep public focused on events to solve problems underlying them.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, hence, however, if, may, moreover, regarding, second, secondly, so, thus, well, in addition, on the contrary

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 19.5258426966 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 12.4196629213 113% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 14.8657303371 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.3162921348 80% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 30.0 33.0505617978 91% => OK
Preposition: 64.0 58.6224719101 109% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 12.9106741573 54% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2186.0 2235.4752809 98% => OK
No of words: 439.0 442.535393258 99% => OK
Chars per words: 4.97949886105 5.05705443957 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.57737117129 4.55969084622 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.48621544129 2.79657885939 89% => OK
Unique words: 225.0 215.323595506 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.512528473804 0.4932671777 104% => OK
syllable_count: 673.2 704.065955056 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 6.24550561798 128% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.99550561798 40% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.10617977528 129% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.77640449438 225% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.38483146067 160% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.2370786517 94% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 23.0359550562 100% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.3628967606 60.3974514979 67% => OK
Chars per sentence: 115.052631579 118.986275619 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.1052631579 23.4991977007 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.0 5.21951772744 115% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 7.80617977528 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 10.2758426966 39% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 12.0 5.13820224719 234% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.83258426966 62% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.196573295741 0.243740707755 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0687490134946 0.0831039109588 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.049183740433 0.0758088955206 65% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.136200696653 0.150359130593 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0353195313319 0.0667264976115 53% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.6 14.1392134831 96% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 48.8420337079 116% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 12.1743820225 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.9 12.1639044944 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.34 8.38706741573 99% => OK
difficult_words: 99.0 100.480337079 99% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 11.8971910112 88% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 11.2143820225 100% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.


Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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