Scandals are useful because they focus our attention on problems in ways that no speaker or reformer ever could.
Prompt claims that problems can be solved by scandals when reformers and speakers do not speak about these issues. I mostly agree with this statement for two reasons, which I will explain below.
To begin, when reasons for the scandal do not reveal fully to society, then people cannot give the appropriate level of attention to these misdoings. For this reason, when we talk about scandals much like politician money laundering on its citizens’ taxes or a company’s corruption. We need understand that if society do not react to these misconducts then they will occur until someone else suffers. For example, Enron Company which supplies energy, commodities, and services for citizens had series of wrong accounting records. Records full of bias were covert by the company’s managers and company continued to accept investments from shareholders. However, big scandal revealed fall information and precluded Enron Company from getting new funds and led to bankruptcy. Speakers and reformers do not have an interest in this kind of business information, for this reason, scandals give useful insights and preclude them from falling into the trap of dishonest companies much like Enron.
Scandals concentrate our attention on temporal things that help us to forget human problems. TV and social media are created in order to distract our thoughts and add color in a boring and monotonous life. To give an example, the famous Azerbaijani TV show "I would find you" had scandals every week and help people to disturb from monotonous activities. According to local statistics, the conclusion that was made by a group of scientists represented an improvement in people's living conditions and psychological well-being, since the TV show was started. Consequently, we can assume that scandals, which occur on social media and on TV shows, can help people with the repetitive days when every event already happens before.
In conclusion, scandals are helpful in revealing bias and misconduct such as Enron Company's false accounting recordings, and also distract us from human problems in order to do our life easy and fanny.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, consequently, however, if, so, then, well, for example, in conclusion, kind of, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 19.5258426966 36% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 12.4196629213 64% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 14.8657303371 114% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.3162921348 106% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 33.0505617978 82% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 58.6224719101 82% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 12.9106741573 54% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1801.0 2235.4752809 81% => OK
No of words: 339.0 442.535393258 77% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.31268436578 5.05705443957 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.29091512845 4.55969084622 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.81840461958 2.79657885939 101% => OK
Unique words: 202.0 215.323595506 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.59587020649 0.4932671777 121% => OK
syllable_count: 536.4 704.065955056 76% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 6.24550561798 64% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.99550561798 40% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.38483146067 114% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.2370786517 74% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 23.0359550562 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 39.4224978069 60.3974514979 65% => OK
Chars per sentence: 120.066666667 118.986275619 101% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.6 23.4991977007 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.2 5.21951772744 119% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 7.80617977528 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 10.2758426966 29% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 12.0 5.13820224719 234% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.83258426966 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.139599414776 0.243740707755 57% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.049411855036 0.0831039109588 59% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0515328616278 0.0758088955206 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0900552309952 0.150359130593 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0193129826567 0.0667264976115 29% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.9 14.1392134831 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 48.8420337079 101% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 12.1743820225 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.81 12.1639044944 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.39 8.38706741573 112% => OK
difficult_words: 100.0 100.480337079 100% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 11.8971910112 76% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.2143820225 96% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.7820224719 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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