The well-being of a society is enhanced when many of its people question authority
Society use leaders as a tool for improving their living conditions. The prompt claims that majority of people should question authority in order to enhance their well-being. I mostly agree with this statement for two reasons, which I will explain below.
To begin with, in general, political conflicts happen because citizens do not question the leaders' ideas and strongly believe in them. To demonstrate, World War 2 started not only because Hitler himself, but also because larger part of German population trusted his immoral ideas. In addition, Cold War that, which intimidated all the world with nuclear weapons was started by the US and the USSR leaders. For this reason, society should not give credit to all authorities' ideas in order to evade political conflicts.
Secondly, leader alone should not take decisions about future of the nation, thus it would not be a democracy where all citizens have a right to vote. Admittedly, citizens can agree with every idea of the leader, but they should participate in government decisions and do not completely trust all authority. To clarify, the decision taken made by the President of Azerbaijan to conduct European Olympic Games in Baku did not match with the citizens’ idea about this event. Olympic Games led to a shortage in government capital, decrease in economic growth, as a result, standards of life also diminished. Therefore, society should question authority and participate in decision-making in order to gain more welfare and improve their well-being.
However, some may argue that true leader does everything due to improve nation’s life, even the most intelligent and visionary one does not represent all interests of his society. People who give complete credit to authority do so at their own peril.
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... reasons, which I will explain below. To begin with, in general, political con...
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...uclear weapons was started by the US and the USSR leaders. For this reason, socie...
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...n order to evade political conflicts. Secondly, leader alone should not take d...
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...welfare and improve their well-being. However, some may argue that true leader...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, may, second, secondly, so, therefore, thus, well, in addition, in general, as a result, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 4.0 19.5258426966 20% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 12.4196629213 72% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 14.8657303371 54% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.3162921348 62% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 19.0 33.0505617978 57% => OK
Preposition: 41.0 58.6224719101 70% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 12.9106741573 70% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1493.0 2235.4752809 67% => OK
No of words: 286.0 442.535393258 65% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.22027972028 5.05705443957 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.11236361783 4.55969084622 90% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.74029748024 2.79657885939 98% => OK
Unique words: 172.0 215.323595506 80% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.601398601399 0.4932671777 122% => OK
syllable_count: 472.5 704.065955056 67% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 6.24550561798 16% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.99550561798 40% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.10617977528 32% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.38483146067 114% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 20.2370786517 69% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 23.0359550562 87% => OK
Sentence length SD: 33.9062332479 60.3974514979 56% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 106.642857143 118.986275619 90% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.4285714286 23.4991977007 87% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.92857142857 5.21951772744 171% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 7.80617977528 64% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 10.2758426966 68% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 5.13820224719 117% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.83258426966 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.152472277973 0.243740707755 63% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0587381949569 0.0831039109588 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0857500024441 0.0758088955206 113% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0981031158054 0.150359130593 65% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.057612608225 0.0667264976115 86% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.4 14.1392134831 95% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 42.72 48.8420337079 87% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 12.1743820225 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.0 12.1639044944 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.99 8.38706741573 107% => OK
difficult_words: 79.0 100.480337079 79% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 11.8971910112 67% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.2143820225 89% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.7820224719 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.