The surest indicator of a great nation is not the achievements of its rulers, artists, or scientists, but the general well-being of all its people.
The living conditions of the nation are one of the most important things nowadays. The prompt claims that prominent leaders, artists, and scientists do not represent the people's well-being. I strongly agree with this statement for two reasons, which I will explain below.
To begin with, the beneficial achievements of one human being from all nations do not mean that people's life-satisfaction increase. When scientists discover new information or artists gain acknowledgment from all over the world it might be helpful for a narrow community, but not for the whole nation. For example, when prominent scientist Mendeleyev discover new chemical composites that are used for production of main drugs, the well-being of his nation does not change. Therefore, in order to understand if the nation is powerful or not, we need to rely on life satisfaction and well-being of all its people.
Secondly, true indicator of a great nation is general well-being because it relies on statistics and can be calculated. For example, recent research by local scientists concludes that overall life satisfaction increased by 30% in the last 5 years, and strongly correlated with economic improvement and social prosperity. As a result, indicators such as well-being and life satisfaction represent that the nation has great power.
In conclusion, people can not judge the power of the nation only from scientists, artists, rulers, and so on. Statistical indicators can represent power.
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...tion and well-being of all its people. Secondly, true indicator of a great nati...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, second, secondly, so, therefore, well, for example, in conclusion, such as, as a result, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 19.5258426966 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 12.4196629213 48% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 14.8657303371 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.3162921348 71% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 13.0 33.0505617978 39% => OK
Preposition: 27.0 58.6224719101 46% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 9.0 12.9106741573 70% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1243.0 2235.4752809 56% => More number of characters wanted.
No of words: 231.0 442.535393258 52% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.38095238095 5.05705443957 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.89854898053 4.55969084622 86% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.09229721337 2.79657885939 111% => OK
Unique words: 141.0 215.323595506 65% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.61038961039 0.4932671777 124% => OK
syllable_count: 366.3 704.065955056 52% => syllable counts are too short.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 6.24550561798 32% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.99550561798 80% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.77640449438 225% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.38483146067 68% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 20.2370786517 59% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 19.0 23.0359550562 82% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 42.0383422868 60.3974514979 70% => OK
Chars per sentence: 103.583333333 118.986275619 87% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.25 23.4991977007 82% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.25 5.21951772744 177% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 7.80617977528 51% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 10.2758426966 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 5.13820224719 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.83258426966 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.355774619456 0.243740707755 146% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.12539981251 0.0831039109588 151% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0850976544857 0.0758088955206 112% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.182261363157 0.150359130593 121% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0926654386004 0.0667264976115 139% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.5 14.1392134831 95% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 48.8420337079 107% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 12.1743820225 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.92 12.1639044944 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.61 8.38706741573 103% => OK
difficult_words: 59.0 100.480337079 59% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 11.8971910112 71% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.2143820225 86% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Minimum 250 words wanted.
Rates: 33.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 2.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.