Society should make efforts to save endangered species only if the potential extinction of those species is the result of human activities

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Society should make efforts to save endangered species only if the potential extinction of those species is the result of human activities.

environment to promote a better society to all publics. In my opinion, to elaborate on a better society, the government needs to save endangered species and protect the environment.
In the past, some species vanish might because they are eaten by more dangerous species or bigger species that this situation cannot alter anything since this is the environment’s cycle. Just like the big whale will eat small fish, the carnivorous animal will eat tiny animals such as rabbits or deer. However, humans sabotage the environment very seriously than many animals might become victims, so the government should help those animals to sustain their habitat and continuing their offspring. If the government doesn’t release the damage to the environment might make the Butterfly Effect happen. When the ocean was polluted by a human, it will make the coral decline even vanish in that place so the fish number will be influenced by those reasons. Since the number of fishes declines, people might not easy to catch the fish so they don’t mind catching the small one. This would cause a bigger Butterfly Effect that the whole cycle will be broken off.
Other skepticisms have another prospect that they said many people die from poverty that the government should enhance the welfare to people first then solve the problem of species victim. While the nations’ poverty line becomes higher, the riot might become higher too, so the country might be plagued with the plight and become worse. Although maintain the environment is also important, the skepticism claim that the most important thing is to make the country better and richer. After the government robust the country that they can start to maintain the environment. However, the environment is not as easy to recover as they think. If people started to recovery the climate after several years, endangered species might become more and more even those species are already vanishing. So society should recovery the environment and promote the other policies coincidences. To set up different groups to do different jobs to elaborate on the whole society to make the nation and the environment become better. Also find different expect at different fields to operate the groups. This assumption not only saving endangered species but also let people’s life become better.
In conclusion, the nation should start to maintain the environment and protect endangered species as soon as they can. Also, each group can complement each other to elaborate better.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 1, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Environment
environment to promote a better society to all publ...
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Line 2, column 499, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...habitat and continuing their offspring. If the government doesn’t release the dama...
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Message: “After” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
... to make the country better and richer. After the government robust the country that ...
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Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Also,
...tion and the environment become better. Also find different expect at different fiel...
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Message: Consider using third-person verb forms for singular and mass nouns: 'finds'.
Suggestion: finds
...and the environment become better. Also find different expect at different fields to...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, so, then, while, in conclusion, such as, in my opinion, on the whole

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 19.5258426966 51% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 21.0 12.4196629213 169% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 14.8657303371 74% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.3162921348 71% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 24.0 33.0505617978 73% => OK
Preposition: 41.0 58.6224719101 70% => OK
Nominalization: 19.0 12.9106741573 147% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2110.0 2235.4752809 94% => OK
No of words: 407.0 442.535393258 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.18427518428 5.05705443957 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.49157444576 4.55969084622 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.56957353191 2.79657885939 92% => OK
Unique words: 202.0 215.323595506 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.496314496314 0.4932671777 101% => OK
syllable_count: 650.7 704.065955056 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 6.24550561798 48% => OK
Article: 6.0 4.99550561798 120% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.10617977528 225% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.38483146067 160% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.2370786517 104% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 23.0359550562 82% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 41.4873146746 60.3974514979 69% => OK
Chars per sentence: 100.476190476 118.986275619 84% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.380952381 23.4991977007 82% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.71428571429 5.21951772744 90% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 7.80617977528 64% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 10.2758426966 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 5.13820224719 175% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.83258426966 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.220238434294 0.243740707755 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0672692555751 0.0831039109588 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0701371660276 0.0758088955206 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.142959913036 0.150359130593 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0268669561459 0.0667264976115 40% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.7 14.1392134831 90% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 48.8420337079 107% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 12.1743820225 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.76 12.1639044944 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.64 8.38706741573 91% => OK
difficult_words: 79.0 100.480337079 79% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 11.8971910112 97% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.2143820225 86% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.7820224719 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.


Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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