Some people believe that corporations have a responsibility to promote the well-being of the societies and environments in which they operate. Others believe that the only responsibility of corporations, provided they operate within the law, is to make as much money as possible.
Several months ago, Greta Thunberg, a young activist who has been constantly urging the institutionalized members to take measure in stopping current environmental issues, held a speech in a conference room located in one of the United States buildings. She was precipitated in fury and anger as she was listing the catastrophic phase of the climate disaster that was caused by the adults. Her speech was being live-broadcasted, after which the audience throughout the world started to gain voice in terms of promoting actions for movements towards an environmentally friendly way of life.
The assumption of the statement lies on the identical issue, since big corporations nowadays are the main culprit of leading the so-called Anthroposcene that we are residing in. In fact, the belief that corporations are driven to gaining financial profit originates to the Era of Industrialism, specifically in the beginning of 19th century, when countries in Europe and America flourished due to international trades of merchants. Those merchants have evolved to the emergence of corporations, so that now there are numerous independent development and trading being initiated by the corporations. Meanwhile, it has become almost impossible not to face the updated news on climate change, global warming, and fluctuations of the overall ecology as we try to connect ourselves to the world via mass social media. Although there are handful numbers of people arguing that these issues are still minor enough to neglect and keep the already established way of life going on, alerted minds who are trying to monitor the measurements of major corporations throughout the world have been continuously gaining size. The measurements not only include the abusive usage of natural resources but also exploitation of labor in the underdeveloped countries. For example, H&M, one of the main fashion industries who has the most proportion of the overall revenue was accused for labor exploitation and misusing materials in producing the fabric. The corporation reacted as promulgating an essential change in the product chain as the consumer groups have urged it to.
Similarly, countries, affiliated with the United Nations, have mostly agreed to the resolution on monitoring corporations for the overall well-being of the society and the environment, even though there were some complaints of the developing countries who were willing to support unhindered industrial development. The conflict is ongoing, while the awareness of the public have risen to actively promote environmental friendly chain of production. Therefore, even standing in the shoes of the corporates, it is expected that the factors that are related to making profits, such as the brand image, the specific products, and the process of production, will be significantly influenced by the consumers’ need, so that it shall be more beneficial to hold responsibility in promoting well-being.
In conclusion, facing the era of immediate climate change and vast amount of need for taking more responsibility in participating the economical sphere, it is crucial to pay attention what the customers, the main group of public, are calling for.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, similarly, so, still, therefore, well, while, for example, in conclusion, in fact, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 27.0 19.5258426966 138% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 12.4196629213 32% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 14.8657303371 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.3162921348 124% => OK
Pronoun: 21.0 33.0505617978 64% => OK
Preposition: 73.0 58.6224719101 125% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 12.9106741573 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2700.0 2235.4752809 121% => OK
No of words: 495.0 442.535393258 112% => OK
Chars per words: 5.45454545455 5.05705443957 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.71684168287 4.55969084622 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.22493726849 2.79657885939 115% => OK
Unique words: 290.0 215.323595506 135% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.585858585859 0.4932671777 119% => OK
syllable_count: 851.4 704.065955056 121% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 6.24550561798 96% => OK
Article: 8.0 4.99550561798 160% => OK
Subordination: 8.0 3.10617977528 258% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.38483146067 91% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.2370786517 74% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 33.0 23.0359550562 143% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 68.4814330068 60.3974514979 113% => OK
Chars per sentence: 180.0 118.986275619 151% => OK
Words per sentence: 33.0 23.4991977007 140% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.0 5.21951772744 134% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 7.80617977528 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 10.2758426966 68% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 5.13820224719 117% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.83258426966 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.145814404159 0.243740707755 60% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0430427912922 0.0831039109588 52% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0357810115133 0.0758088955206 47% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0786207876864 0.150359130593 52% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0542458306474 0.0667264976115 81% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 20.7 14.1392134831 146% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 29.52 48.8420337079 60% => OK
smog_index: 13.0 7.92365168539 164% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 17.3 12.1743820225 142% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.92 12.1639044944 123% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.38 8.38706741573 124% => OK
difficult_words: 160.0 100.480337079 159% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 11.8971910112 122% => OK
gunning_fog: 15.2 11.2143820225 136% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 11.7820224719 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 75.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.5 Out of 6
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