Some people and policy makers believe that big corporate business must provide money for social environment and infrastructure. However, this business pays huge taxes and its government responsibility to do this. This is may be sounds good justify but main business aim it is doing their deal and pay taxes. For social environment development we elect government. If business takes on itself work of government so why do we need it?
For example, if a company work in one place of some country. It employed local population. And the company decided to make good social environment for their employees, build school, roads, create public transport. It seems good, and local government save its budget on this directions. But then the business would deal not so good and the company has to move its business to China. And local community has lost their source of social support. And the government doesn’t have money in budget for this purposes because it has never spend any for this. So it has to either to rise a taxes to collect money for this or reduce its spending on some other directions (for instants cut down salaries for public services).
There is other reason why the government should not allow to corporates influence on local communities by social spending. Let’s assume that there is some chemical factory in our country which sales same chemistry that pollution natural environment. Although this factory spends huge money on social infrastructure and public projects. So that the company earn people approval and public influence. And parliaments from that community support this business because they were elected from that community. If they do not, they just risk loose people support and would not be reelected. So the company by that way has a politics influence to protect its dirty business.
When a business do work for a government supporting social environment, there is risk that this business would substitute that government. It may conclude to over influence of business on government. However business is not permanent and if it goes away it might lead to social fall because the government would not do in this direction.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 270, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'these'?
Suggestion: these
...and local government save its budget on this directions. But then the business would...
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Line 2, column 501, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'these'?
Suggestion: these
...t doesn't have money in budget for this purposes because it has never spend any...
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Line 2, column 536, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Possible agreement error -- use past participle here: 'spent'.
Suggestion: spent
... for this purposes because it has never spend any for this. So it has to either to ri...
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Line 2, column 584, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a tax', 'a taxis' or simply 'taxes'?
Suggestion: a tax; a taxis; taxes
...y for this. So it has to either to rise a taxes to collect money for this or reduce its...
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Line 2, column 718, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... cut down salaries for public services. There is other reason why the government...
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Line 4, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...fluence to protect its dirty business. When a business do work for a government...
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Line 4, column 340, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ernment would not do in this direction.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, may, so, then, as to, for example
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 19.5258426966 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.4196629213 81% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 14.8657303371 114% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.3162921348 97% => OK
Pronoun: 44.0 33.0505617978 133% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 31.0 58.6224719101 53% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 23.0 12.9106741573 178% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1812.0 2235.4752809 81% => OK
No of words: 356.0 442.535393258 80% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.08988764045 5.05705443957 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.34372677135 4.55969084622 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.77447333927 2.79657885939 99% => OK
Unique words: 172.0 215.323595506 80% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.483146067416 0.4932671777 98% => OK
syllable_count: 560.7 704.065955056 80% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 6.24550561798 96% => OK
Article: 0.0 4.99550561798 0% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.10617977528 193% => OK
Conjunction: 6.0 1.77640449438 338% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 0.0 4.38483146067 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.2370786517 114% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 23.0359550562 65% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 32.7412956152 60.3974514979 54% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 78.7826086957 118.986275619 66% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.4782608696 23.4991977007 66% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.21739130435 5.21951772744 42% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 7.80617977528 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 10.2758426966 107% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 5.13820224719 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.83258426966 166% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.112446055303 0.243740707755 46% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0355091901311 0.0831039109588 43% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0508855538919 0.0758088955206 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0736651725339 0.150359130593 49% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0548704674958 0.0667264976115 82% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.3 14.1392134831 73% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 56.25 48.8420337079 115% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 12.1743820225 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.95 12.1639044944 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.44 8.38706741573 89% => OK
difficult_words: 69.0 100.480337079 69% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.0 11.8971910112 50% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.0 11.2143820225 71% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.7820224719 85% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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