Some people believe that government funding of the arts is necessary to ensure that the arts can flourish and be available to all people. Others believe that government funding of the arts threatens the integrity of the arts.
Write a response in which you discuss which view more closely aligns with your own position and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should address both of the views presented.
The author of the issue contends that there are some people who may hold the view that governor’s financial rearing is crucial for it thrives and accessibility for all people; there are other people who take the opposite viewpoint and believe that this rearing causes the art misses its purity. In what follows, the main reasons posited by both groups are first discussed and then my own position would be delineated.
Those people who argue that the fiscal support of art by leaders is a crux issue seem to believe in the effect of art on the public’s life. Indeed, the influence of art in the enhancement of the creativity and mitigation of an individual’s mood and behavior is undeniable. Based on the intrinsic feature of art, whoever follow or watch a piece of artistic presentation, gets the novel perspective toward its lifestyle. This outlook leads to the creative mind and smoothens mood. The creative mind is beneficial for the whole society as its denizens work with the creative and productive thought, and this condition leads to economic improvement. The smooth mind also prevents or at least decreases the criminal activities. According to the noteworthy refreshingly intelligible statistic released by psychological research group conducted in our country, the interaction of human beings with artistic activities decreases the inclination felony by 45 percent. Consequently, from this group perspective the more flourished art which is accessible for entire people could effective in both the creativity and decreased devil thoughts.
As was stated already, there are some other who believes that the art funding by the government put the integrity of art into the risk. These people seem to give more weight to dependency caused by financial support. In fact, as the leaders are superior over citizens, any kind of support creates the feeling of reliability to a source in the upper stand. This feeling could force the artist to make the flattery to satisfy this feeling; furthermore, guarantee or even increase the amount of this incoming source. A lucid example of this assumption are the poems which rhymed in the past. During the history, most of the poets for gaining any kind of advantageous said a poem in favor of that period king to get more adherence. However, that poem even is not in the style of that specified poet; and the state of demand obligated him. Thus, the presented art by this attitude is not a partial one and misses its freedom of expression. Thus, this group seeks a more pure and coherent type of art.
I should say that it is the first attitude with which I largely concur. First of all, from my point of view, the reasons for which the first group relies on to support their opinion are sensible and plausible. Furthermore, I have one more reason for my outlook. The income range of artist in any society is approximately in the middle or even below the middle range. This means whoever works in the field of art possesses financial issues. Besides, it is obvious that these issues could disturb the mind and think of person. Therefore, the financial support could be a beneficial action to halt this disruption and provides a peaceful environment which flourishes artists’ creative minds.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: others
... As was stated already, there are some other who believes that the art funding by th...
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...s a more pure and coherent type of art. I should say that it is the first attitu...
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...lourishes artists' creative minds.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, consequently, first, furthermore, however, if, look, may, so, then, therefore, thus, at least, in fact, kind of, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 19.5258426966 102% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 12.4196629213 56% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 14.8657303371 128% => OK
Relative clauses : 19.0 11.3162921348 168% => OK
Pronoun: 41.0 33.0505617978 124% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 74.0 58.6224719101 126% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 12.9106741573 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2721.0 2235.4752809 122% => OK
No of words: 542.0 442.535393258 122% => OK
Chars per words: 5.02029520295 5.05705443957 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.82502781895 4.55969084622 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.82287159636 2.79657885939 101% => OK
Unique words: 276.0 215.323595506 128% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.509225092251 0.4932671777 103% => OK
syllable_count: 847.8 704.065955056 120% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 6.24550561798 160% => OK
Article: 11.0 4.99550561798 220% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.38483146067 137% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 20.2370786517 128% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 23.0359550562 87% => OK
Sentence length SD: 55.6728211765 60.3974514979 92% => OK
Chars per sentence: 104.653846154 118.986275619 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.8461538462 23.4991977007 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.38461538462 5.21951772744 103% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 7.80617977528 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 10.2758426966 136% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 5.13820224719 97% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.83258426966 145% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.225234946424 0.243740707755 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0588785137007 0.0831039109588 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0898400130625 0.0758088955206 119% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.137851351154 0.150359130593 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0360323814239 0.0667264976115 54% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.6 14.1392134831 89% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 48.8420337079 105% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 12.1743820225 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.84 12.1639044944 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.71 8.38706741573 104% => OK
difficult_words: 140.0 100.480337079 139% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 18.0 11.8971910112 151% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.2143820225 89% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 62.5 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.75 Out of 6
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