Our previous experience has been that our stores are most profitable in areas where residents are highly concerned with leading healthy lives. We should therefore build one of our new stores in Plainsville, which clearly has many such residents. Plainsvil

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Our previous experience has been that our stores are most profitable in areas where residents are highly concerned with leading healthy lives. We should therefore build one of our new stores in Plainsville, which clearly has many such residents. Plainsville merchants report that sales of running shoes and exercise equipment are at all-time highs. The local health club, which nearly closed five years ago due to lack of business, has more members than ever, and the weight-training and aerobics classes are always full. We can even anticipate a new generation of customers: Plainsville's schoolchildren are required to participate in a program called Fitness for Life, which emphasizes the benefits of regular exercise at an early age.

Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the recommendation and the argument on which it is based are reasonable. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the recommendation.

The writer of the article assumes that the construction of a new store in the Painesville, where people are aware of their importance of the healthy lives, can be profitable. This claim cannot be accepted as it stands, it rests on the series of surmises for the support of each some vital questions are to be answered.

The first question which comes to mind at first glance is that does the Painesville is identical to the previous locations experienced as the profitable for the sale. The primary factor of the comparison is the similarity. As long as two substances are equal the comparison can be considered as the valid one; on the other, the evaluation of the two various subject with the different features is an abortive task. For instance, maybe the previous spots are more askew to do jogging the citizen of Painesville, on the other hand, prefers the other type of sports activity which requires another type of the equipment. Therefore, as long as the similarity of the case study of this region with the previous areas does not prove clearly, this comparison is invalid.

Second, the author posits that based on the extensive range of sportive activity in the place, the people will be eager to consume their product. For the sake of this vague and shaky hypothesis, the list of crucial questions appears in the mind. Firstly, are there any demands for the further sportive equipment supply? Second, do the dwellers of this region spend money for the sports equipment? For the first question, there is no production statistic in this area. Maybe this spot is well-equipped with the shops to sell the shoes and sportive tools. About the second question, even though people are willing to do sport, maybe they are frugal and do not like to spend money on the shoes or sport equips. Either scenario would provide the alternative results which make the result dangling. The article would have been convincing if the argument had explicitly addressed these questions.

Finally, the author leaves an unresolved question about the students' attitudes about the sport. Although there is series of training class to familiarize the youth students with the sports, there is no guarantee that they will wish to do the sport in their future lives. Maybe during these years as students become the adults, they change their attitude toward their lifestyles. As long as there is no robust and appealing response to this question that the students will whether pursue this sportive lifestyle or not, this thought that the company would have the new generation consumers in this region is futile.

All in all, the argument is flawed for the reasons mentioned above and is, therefore, unpersuasive. It could be considerably strengthened if the author clearly mentioned that this place and previous locations are similar. Moreover, there is insufficient supply, and there is a huge demand for the products of this company. Besides, the ongoing teenager will be eager to do sport in their adulthood. Otherwise, this argument remains doubtful and opens to debates.

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Discourse Markers used:
['besides', 'finally', 'first', 'firstly', 'if', 'may', 'moreover', 'second', 'so', 'then', 'therefore', 'well', 'for instance', 'on the other hand']

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.224778761062 0.240241500013 94% => OK
Verbs: 0.143362831858 0.157235817809 91% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0884955752212 0.0880659088768 100% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0495575221239 0.0497285424764 100% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0212389380531 0.0444667217837 48% => OK
Prepositions: 0.129203539823 0.12292977631 105% => OK
Participles: 0.0230088495575 0.0406280797675 57% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.62711147938 2.79330140395 94% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0230088495575 0.030933414821 74% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.0016655270985 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.162831858407 0.0997080785238 163% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0194690265487 0.0249443105267 78% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0070796460177 0.0148568991511 48% => Some subClauses wanted starting by 'Which, Who, What, Whom, Whose.....'

Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 3067.0 2732.02544248 112% => OK
No of words: 510.0 452.878318584 113% => OK
Chars per words: 6.0137254902 6.0361032391 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.75217629947 4.58838876751 104% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.350980392157 0.366273622748 96% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.272549019608 0.280924506359 97% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.201960784314 0.200843997647 101% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.117647058824 0.132149295362 89% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.62711147938 2.79330140395 94% => OK
Unique words: 246.0 219.290929204 112% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.482352941176 0.48968727796 99% => OK
Word variations: 56.3706710779 55.4138127331 102% => OK
How many sentences: 25.0 20.6194690265 121% => OK
Sentence length: 20.4 23.380412469 87% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.6635542107 59.4972553346 80% => OK
Chars per sentence: 122.68 141.124799967 87% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.4 23.380412469 87% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.56 0.674092028746 83% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.94800884956 101% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.21349557522 58% => OK
Readability: 47.6549019608 51.4728631049 93% => OK
Elegance: 1.76033057851 1.64882698954 107% => OK

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.083333958866 0.391690518653 21% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.114838918827 0.123202303941 93% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0575557740673 0.077325440228 74% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.589029838036 0.547984918172 107% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.142023928132 0.149214159877 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0416054552401 0.161403998019 26% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0315865698597 0.0892212321368 35% => The sentences are too close to each other.
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.563951585373 0.385218514788 146% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0805824392582 0.0692045440612 116% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0727349895394 0.275328986314 26% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0256415158349 0.0653680567796 39% => The ideas may be duplicated in paragraphs.

Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 10.4325221239 96% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 5.30420353982 151% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88274336283 143% => OK
Positive topic words: 6.0 7.22455752212 83% => OK
Negative topic words: 5.0 3.66592920354 136% => OK
Neutral topic words: 3.0 2.70907079646 111% => OK
Total topic words: 14.0 13.5995575221 103% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader.

Rates: 16.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 6
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