Some people believe that government officials must carry out the will of the people they serve. Others believe that officials should base their decisions on their own judgement.
Write a response in which you discuss which view more closely aligns with your own position and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should address both of the views presented.
People have different views on whether government should base their own decisions on their judgement or will of people. I believe that this situation differs based on the type of subject for decision.
On the on hand, I can explain why governments have to consider the need and will of people while making decisions. I can explain why governments have to consider the need and will of people while making decisions. For some decision related to social issues, consideration of people's opinion is important because they are related to the lives of people dealing with them in their daily lives. For example, Hijab is something that related to the personal life of females. As a human, they have this right to make their own decision to have Hijab or not. However, in some countries like Iran, women are not allowed to have their own right to choose whether they like to cover their hair or not. Women are forced to follow the rules imposed them. They are punished if they avoid covering their hair. As a result, females find this situation unfair, as they think that officials invade their privacy and limit their freedom. This condition can lead to outrage of women and encourage them to go strike and follow objections. We can see this situation in Iran, that all people ranging from old to young ones, protest to their regime because invasion of freedom and privacy. When officials do not consider the will and real need of people, after a while they lose their reputation and fame.
On the other hand, for some subjects such having right for nuclear weapon, the will of people is not significant important. This is because, individuals do not have enough knowledge to know about the benefits of having this right and officials have to think about them according their political situation to keep up with their first-world counterparts. Also, for such subject they have to consider different factors related to their financial ability, the numbers of experts existed and other necessary reasons that evoke them to have some projects related to nuclear weapons. In this situation, the opinion of experts and skillful people related to nuclear weapon should be priority.
In conclusion, in my view, officials have to pay attention to people’s will when they want to make decisions about social norms and issues relating to daily lives of individuals. Also, the responsibility of some subjects which need the specialized knowledge and are beyond people’ mind to be left to experts.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 675, Rule ID: SHOULD_BE_DO[1]
Message: Did you mean ''?
...ple related to nuclear weapon should be priority. In conclusion, in my view, officials ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, however, if, so, while, for example, in conclusion, as a result, in my view, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 19.5258426966 56% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 12.4196629213 129% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 14.8657303371 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.3162921348 71% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 46.0 33.0505617978 139% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 68.0 58.6224719101 116% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 12.9106741573 85% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2072.0 2235.4752809 93% => OK
No of words: 418.0 442.535393258 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.95693779904 5.05705443957 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.52162009685 4.55969084622 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.52943569133 2.79657885939 90% => OK
Unique words: 188.0 215.323595506 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.44976076555 0.4932671777 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 640.8 704.065955056 91% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 6.24550561798 144% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.99550561798 80% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.10617977528 161% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.38483146067 160% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.2370786517 99% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 23.0359550562 87% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.8809983187 60.3974514979 79% => OK
Chars per sentence: 103.6 118.986275619 87% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.9 23.4991977007 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.35 5.21951772744 102% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 7.80617977528 13% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 10.2758426966 68% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 5.13820224719 136% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.83258426966 124% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.315929261317 0.243740707755 130% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.108432402661 0.0831039109588 130% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0761790487709 0.0758088955206 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.226860942865 0.150359130593 151% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0635863646606 0.0667264976115 95% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.4 14.1392134831 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 48.8420337079 122% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 12.1743820225 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.49 12.1639044944 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.18 8.38706741573 98% => OK
difficult_words: 94.0 100.480337079 94% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 11.8971910112 76% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.2143820225 89% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.7820224719 85% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 62.5 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.75 Out of 6
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