Some people believe that increasing violence in the media is the cause of increasing violence in our society, especially among children. Others believe that children's peer groups and parental role models are a much more powerful influence on children's behavior.
Write a response in which you discuss which view more closely aligns with your own position and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should address both of the views presented above.
Children are best imitator in their early times. Children try to copy from other and try to learn something new from other. The prompt states that, some people belive that increasing violence in the media is the cause of increasing violence in our society among chidren and others believe that children's peer groups and parental role models are a much more powerful influence on children's behavior. I mostly agree with the given prompt and I will explain my thought in following three points.
In the beginning, the prompt says that, the some people believe that violence in the media is the cause of increasing violence in our society. I think this statement is mostly right. Because the increasing violence in media is main concern in today's society. To get more TRP rating and more viewer, media showing lots of violence and represent things in very dramatical way. Now we heard about the cases about the ten to fifteen years old children is taking wrong step without knowing anything in the world. We normally heard the news of children hang himself with help of roop and also ten year boy try to murder his little sister. This type of negative things happens because of the violence of media and i think we should eschew the children from this type of violence.
Additionally, the prompt also says that, children's peer groups and parental role models are a much powerful innfluence on children's behavior. I think this statement is also true because in the early time of children parents are sprending most of the time with their children. And because of this children are try to copy their parents as it is.If the parents try to behave well manner infront of children's then they will try to copy this goods things. But parent's are not following or doing good things in their day-to-day life then it will be bad thing for children's. If we take an example, todays parents are spending most of the time with their mobiles and because of this children's also stubbornly want mobile instead of other toys to play. If the parents try to behave well in front of children then children's way of behaving is better otherwise this will be harmful for children's.
However, if media is not the sole reason of increase the violence in children. If parents are disturb because of their personal reason like work stress or family issue or any monetory issue then this type negative thought are also the reason of increase in violence in children.
In conclusion, I think parent are very important for children's and parent's are role model for children's always. Therefore, it is responsibility for parent's to teach them good things and avoid from negative things.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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...y thought in following three points. In the beginning, the prompt says that, ...
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...he beginning, the prompt says that, the some people believe that violence in the med...
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...I think this statement is mostly right. Because the increasing violence in media is mai...
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...elf with help of roop and also ten year boy try to murder his little sister. This t...
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...ns because of the violence of media and i think we should eschew the children fro...
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...e children from this type of violence. Additionally, the prompt also sa...
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...ime with their children. And because of this children are try to copy their parents ...
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... are try to copy their parents as it is.If the parents try to behave well manner i...
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... are try to copy their parents as it is.If the parents try to behave well manner i...
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...of childrens then they will try to copy this goods things. But parents are not follo...
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...se this will be harmful for childrens. However, if media is not the sol...
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...he violence in children. If parents are disturb because of their personal reason like w...
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...of increase in violence in children. In conclusion, I think parent are very i...
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...nd parents are role model for childrens always. Therefore, it is responsibility for pa...
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...things and avoid from negative things.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, so, then, therefore, well, i think, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 19.5258426966 118% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 12.4196629213 40% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 14.8657303371 114% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.3162921348 53% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 41.0 33.0505617978 124% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 65.0 58.6224719101 111% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 12.9106741573 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2207.0 2235.4752809 99% => OK
No of words: 457.0 442.535393258 103% => OK
Chars per words: 4.82932166302 5.05705443957 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.62358717085 4.55969084622 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.40342284094 2.79657885939 86% => OK
Unique words: 192.0 215.323595506 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.420131291028 0.4932671777 85% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 666.0 704.065955056 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 6.24550561798 112% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.99550561798 80% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.10617977528 193% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.38483146067 68% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.2370786517 104% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 23.0359550562 91% => OK
Sentence length SD: 51.8238775635 60.3974514979 86% => OK
Chars per sentence: 105.095238095 118.986275619 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.7619047619 23.4991977007 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.47619047619 5.21951772744 67% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 16.0 7.80617977528 205% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 10.2758426966 78% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 11.0 5.13820224719 214% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.83258426966 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.487398014442 0.243740707755 200% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.163498144697 0.0831039109588 197% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.17200311342 0.0758088955206 227% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.2998200017 0.150359130593 199% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.140926328144 0.0667264976115 211% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.2 14.1392134831 86% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 48.8420337079 120% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 12.1743820225 85% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.73 12.1639044944 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.92 8.38706741573 83% => OK
difficult_words: 65.0 100.480337079 65% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 11.8971910112 76% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.2143820225 93% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.7820224719 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.