The popularity of television and other media platforms have enabled faster and efficient ways for broadcasted programs to reach even the farthest corners of the globe. The prompt suggests that some people opine that the media have a detrimental effect on the youngsters today, as in they depict violence and results in a more violent society. It also conteracts this view with that of the others' who believe that peer groups and parental role are more influential factors that determine children behavior. In my opinion, I mostly align with the latter while arguing that parental guidance should be in place for children who are drawn to violent media programs.
The last decade has been marked by instances of children taking up arms due to psychological trauma or damages arising out of a number of factors such as being bullied at school, domestic abuse among others. This results in shooting incidents at school and other public places, and often causes significant loss of lives. In order to avert such situations, a study of peer groups is more relevant and would reveal the psychlogical and personality traits of a child. These traits, often verging on extremism go unnoticed and hence unchecked, resulting in gruesome incidences of mass murder. Psychologists believe that often the behavioral issues in adults result from childhood trauma. For example, a child who is a victim of bullying often at school due to racial or physical characteristics soon starts detesting the people around him. This hate often manifests in violence where this child, grown into an adults, starts taking revenge on people who he feels similar to his bullies.
Furthermore, parental control has significant impact on inculcating the concepts of right and wrong in a child. When a child enages in brawls and fist fights with his siblings, parents should appropriately handle the situation, whilst teaching the child that such a course of action is not appreciated. Similary, when a child is empathetic to his sibling, parents should praise such qualities to ensure the child values such empathy. Such parental measures often determine and shape up an individual's personality at the most rudimentary level and helps the child imbibe an empathetic and understanding approach rather than take on a violent behavior towards others.
Indisputably, the widespread nature of today's media platforms and the predominance of violent programs broadcasted have a social impact on its viewers. Such programs have gruesome depictions of characters and become popular due to their outrageously grotesque depictions. However, their impact on the societal behavior can be significantly abated if parental control is excercised. While most children are drawn towards watching programs that depict murder, crime and other forms of violence, parental supervision must be maintained if and when these children are allowed to watch such programs. In maintaining parental supervision, adults must carefully caution their children about the repercussions of such violent actions and hence these programs can also serve an educational purpose.
In conclusion, I would suggest that parental control and children peer groups are the two most important factors that determine a child's predisposition. It significantly reveals important characterisitics of children's personalities and helps in correcting them altogether. Indisputably, television and other media which depict violence adds to societal violence, but with correct parental control in place, they can also serve an educational purpose within limits.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 814, Rule ID: NOUN_AROUND_IT[1]
Message: Consider using 'the surrounding people'?
Suggestion: the surrounding people
...l characteristics soon starts detesting the people around him. This hate often manifests in violence ...
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Line 2, column 904, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'an adult' or simply 'adults'?
Suggestion: an adult; adults
...n violence where this child, grown into an adults, starts taking revenge on people who he...
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Line 3, column 489, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'individuals'' or 'individual's'?
Suggestion: individuals'; individual's
...easures often determine and shape up an individuals personality at the most rudimentary lev...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, hence, however, if, so, while, for example, in conclusion, such as, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 19.5258426966 77% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.4196629213 81% => OK
Conjunction : 25.0 14.8657303371 168% => OK
Relative clauses : 20.0 11.3162921348 177% => OK
Pronoun: 35.0 33.0505617978 106% => OK
Preposition: 69.0 58.6224719101 118% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 12.9106741573 77% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3022.0 2235.4752809 135% => OK
No of words: 553.0 442.535393258 125% => OK
Chars per words: 5.46473779385 5.05705443957 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.84932490483 4.55969084622 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.94152857242 2.79657885939 105% => OK
Unique words: 282.0 215.323595506 131% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.509945750452 0.4932671777 103% => OK
syllable_count: 921.6 704.065955056 131% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 6.24550561798 144% => OK
Article: 6.0 4.99550561798 120% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.10617977528 129% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.38483146067 91% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.2370786517 114% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 23.0359550562 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 36.3484501715 60.3974514979 60% => OK
Chars per sentence: 131.391304348 118.986275619 110% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.0434782609 23.4991977007 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.5652173913 5.21951772744 87% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 7.80617977528 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 10.2758426966 68% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 15.0 5.13820224719 292% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.83258426966 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.215603229688 0.243740707755 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0645507727767 0.0831039109588 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0600374546071 0.0758088955206 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.134309287233 0.150359130593 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0770580336635 0.0667264976115 115% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.3 14.1392134831 115% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 38.66 48.8420337079 79% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 12.1743820225 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.68 12.1639044944 121% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.31 8.38706741573 111% => OK
difficult_words: 157.0 100.480337079 156% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 11.8971910112 113% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 11.2143820225 103% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.7820224719 119% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 83.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 6
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