Some people believe that increasing violence in the media is the cause of increasing violence in our society, especially among children. Others believe that children's peer groups and parental role models are a much more powerful influence on children's behavior.
The claim states that some believe that especially among children, the increasing violence in media causes increasing violence in our society. While some believes that children's friend circle, peer groups and parents have a much more influence on their behavior. I strongly believe that children's peer groups and parental role models are a much more powerful influence on children's behavior for following reasons.
Firstly, the children are young and they have very little knowledge of the society. They do what they see around them which are their family, friends, etc. Parents play a major role in influence of their children as a child follows the footsteps of their parents. For example, there was a video of domestic violence in which a husband was hitting his wife in front of 2 years old son. So, the son also started hitting his mother as he saw his father. So, the influence of parents is so enormous that it gets stored deeply in child's brain.
Additionally, the influence of media is not that powerful compared to parents and peers as the media influence happens because of parents and peers. So they are interconnected. Peers are the once who also have second most powerful influence on their friend. As the children tend to like and try to do things that their peer group does because that is something that their parents won't allow but their peers influence them in doing. For example, the consumption of tobacco is something the child's parents won't allow as it is bad for health and also it is violating the society. But if the child's peer are having it and they just tell him/her to just taste it then child gets influenced in that. So, the influence of peers is also really huge in child's life and that is why it is advisable to choose your peers wisely.
In in spite of this, not all the parents, peers and media have bad influence and violate the society but also have good impact if the people around you are honest and good people.
However, the bad influence is major and it overpowers the good influence and inturn leads to the violation of the society. The parents and child's peers are the biggest support system. On these people, the child trusts and follows blindly. Hence, children's peer groups and parental role models are much more powerful influence on children's behavior than influence of media.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: In
...visable to choose your peers wisely. In in spite of this, not all the parents, pee...
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...he society but also have good impact if the people around you are honest and good people. However...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, hence, however, if, really, second, so, then, while, for example, in spite of
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 19.5258426966 108% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 12.4196629213 0% => OK
Conjunction : 20.0 14.8657303371 135% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.3162921348 124% => OK
Pronoun: 45.0 33.0505617978 136% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 37.0 58.6224719101 63% => OK
Nominalization: 19.0 12.9106741573 147% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1936.0 2235.4752809 87% => OK
No of words: 403.0 442.535393258 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.80397022333 5.05705443957 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.48049772903 4.55969084622 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.40068510644 2.79657885939 86% => OK
Unique words: 173.0 215.323595506 80% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.429280397022 0.4932671777 87% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 574.2 704.065955056 82% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.59117977528 88% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 6.24550561798 32% => OK
Article: 11.0 4.99550561798 220% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.38483146067 46% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.2370786517 104% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 23.0359550562 82% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 39.774933708 60.3974514979 66% => OK
Chars per sentence: 92.1904761905 118.986275619 77% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.1904761905 23.4991977007 82% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.95238095238 5.21951772744 95% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 7.80617977528 26% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 10.2758426966 107% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 5.13820224719 97% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.83258426966 103% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.429608662202 0.243740707755 176% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.13721360338 0.0831039109588 165% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.164655555212 0.0758088955206 217% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.277922367387 0.150359130593 185% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.233654241338 0.0667264976115 350% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.8 14.1392134831 76% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 69.11 48.8420337079 141% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.3 12.1743820225 68% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.56 12.1639044944 87% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.01 8.38706741573 84% => OK
difficult_words: 62.0 100.480337079 62% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 11.8971910112 63% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.2143820225 86% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.7820224719 68% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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