Some people believe that increasing violence in the media is the cause of increasing violence in our society, especially among children. Others believe that children's peer groups and parental role models are a much more influence on children's behavior.
The passage attempts to bridge a relationship between media violence or family and friends influence on children's behavior. Truely, we can not avoid the fact that, both media violence and family abuse do have great impact on the development of an young mind. Both of them plays a crucial role and are important, but if we have to compare them, ovbiously family and peers influence will be far greater in developing and thus molding our young mind.
Today, we can see that, media violence and coverage of warfare is rampant, which do have big negative impact on young mind. When a child is born, it learns from its surrounding. Psychologist posit that, the best way to learn is observation and children do that in the maximum possible way. Our media people circulates unscrupulous media content because of attracting higher customer base. Moreover, digiatal and offline media both cover sensitive issues because of their business. But the forget that the prolification of those sensitive issues, violence, warfare is making our children attracted to those violence. Children are getting inured to the destruction of war and violence which is the most alarming thing.
Simiarly, parents are the best and first teachers of a child. A child start learning by immitaing the activities done by its parents. Our young mind is somthing like a malleble mold, can be shaped in any way in a vey early age. Exposure to rude and family abuse can make them think that those family violence is a norm in the actual world. Those children when grows up, repeat the same act or get violent with their family members in future. A study shows in Bangladesh, in around 60% families, childrens are brought up in a family with family violence and that is the most important reason for family violence in that south asian country. Friends and peers do have a huge impact on those young mind. In a school, we can see that, in most of the time, good students having higher grade always make friend with other good students, on the other hand, students having lower grade do have friendship with those belong to the same category. In many of the time, companion difines the quality of student or a person. By having friendship with a religiously practicing person, we can be easily motivated to be religious minded.
Finally, to conclude, we can say that, family, friends, media do have vey big influence on the development of an young mind. Among them, family and friends plays a bigger role in developing our psychology.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: a
...have great impact on the development of an young mind. Both of them plays a crucia...
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Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
...e issues because of their business. But the forget that the prolification of those sensiti...
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Line 2, column 600, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this violence' or 'those violences'?
Suggestion: this violence; those violences
...are is making our children attracted to those violence. Children are getting inured to the des...
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Message: Did you mean 'this family' or 'those families'?
Suggestion: this family; those families
...d family abuse can make them think that those family violence is a norm in the actual world....
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Message: Did you mean: 'in the future'?
Suggestion: in the future
...r get violent with their family members in future. A study shows in Bangladesh, in around...
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Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: a
...vey big influence on the development of an young mind. Among them, family and frie...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, first, if, moreover, so, thus, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 19.5258426966 82% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 12.4196629213 64% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 14.8657303371 128% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.3162921348 124% => OK
Pronoun: 36.0 33.0505617978 109% => OK
Preposition: 56.0 58.6224719101 96% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 12.9106741573 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2072.0 2235.4752809 93% => OK
No of words: 427.0 442.535393258 96% => OK
Chars per words: 4.85245901639 5.05705443957 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.54576487731 4.55969084622 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.5643247451 2.79657885939 92% => OK
Unique words: 207.0 215.323595506 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.484777517564 0.4932671777 98% => OK
syllable_count: 645.3 704.065955056 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 6.24550561798 144% => OK
Interrogative: 1.0 0.740449438202 135% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.99550561798 80% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.10617977528 32% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.38483146067 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.2370786517 109% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 23.0359550562 82% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.5639340148 60.3974514979 74% => OK
Chars per sentence: 94.1818181818 118.986275619 79% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.4090909091 23.4991977007 83% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.81818181818 5.21951772744 54% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 7.80617977528 77% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 10.2758426966 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 5.13820224719 175% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.83258426966 62% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.170221012721 0.243740707755 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0565409625595 0.0831039109588 68% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0515076845666 0.0758088955206 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.119878946754 0.150359130593 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0387126748942 0.0667264976115 58% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.1 14.1392134831 79% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 48.8420337079 124% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 12.1743820225 78% => Flesch kincaid grade is low.
coleman_liau_index: 10.85 12.1639044944 89% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.91 8.38706741573 94% => OK
difficult_words: 90.0 100.480337079 90% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 11.8971910112 113% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.2143820225 86% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.7820224719 85% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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