Some people believe that increasing violence in the media is the cause of increasing violence in our society, especially among children. Others believe that children's peer groups and parental role models are a much more influence on children's behavior.
In the contemporary world today, the communication medium has changed so drastically that people can get to know the latest news and views by logging in to their smartphones and tablets. Media usually depicts the reality which is happening around the world. Because of rapid increase in technology, there is also burgeoning of violence in various parts of the world. However, the influence of such violent crimes on people cannot be correlated to the behaviour of children the society. Hence, I believe that the behaviour of children is influenced only by the peer groups and their parental role models, but not by the violence in the media.
Today's children are the building blocks of tomorrow's future. Children spend more than half of the time in a day spending in their schools, where they try to explore new features and theories pertaining to the world. For instance, if a particular child is close to a group of children who usually make fun of their teacher and bully other students around, the child also incorporates shuch behavior. The discipline in the schools also plays an important factor in the behavior of the children. According to a recent survey, a comparison is made between two schools in New York - the school in which there are stringent rules seems to succeed acadamically when compared to the school in which there is levity among the teachers and other staff. Hence, the behavior of a particular child is mostly influenced by the surroundings, particularly in the school in which the child pursues his education.
Parents are the first role models of any child. If a child has some challenges in life or any other issues, parents are the ones who show the path of success to the child. If the parents teach the children to love the mankind and share their belongings from the childhood, the child turns out to be a benevolent person. If the parents of a particular child always fight with each other and throw the things around, the child also incorporates such behaviour. Parents must be the blueprint of the child's behavior. It is also the duty of parents to monitor the child every now and then - that he is not embracing the wrong acts and deeds. Thus, the parents must behave well-mannered, atleast in front of their children, so that the child does not develop rash behavior.
Conversely, there are also certain instances where media also plays a role in the behaviour of the children. For instance, in the countries like Iraq and Afghanistan, perennial wars are part and parcel in the society. The news channels and radios in those countries depict the way in which the military fights the wars and uses the weapons. Inspired by seeing those crime scenes, children in those countries usually behave violently and do not care for others. However, if the parents of those children can take proper care, such a behaviour can be prevented by either admonishing them or preventing the children to perceive such acts on the television.
In conclusion, children usually spend most of their time spending with either their parents or in the school. The behaviour of the child is usually influenced only by his parents and his teachers or friends in the school. In order to make the child behave in a proper way, it is the duty of the parents to monitor the child frequently and condemning the actions which are not benign. There are also certain instances where media plays a role in the behavior of a child However, such influence can be prevented by the parents by preventing the children to perceive them.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 321, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
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Line 5, column 566, Rule ID: EVERY_NOW_AND_THEN[1]
Message: Use simply 'now and then'.
Suggestion: now and then
...he duty of parents to monitor the child every now and then - that he is not embracing the wrong ac...
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Line 9, column 257, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in a proper way" with adverb for "proper"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, conversely, first, hence, however, if, so, then, thus, well, for instance, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 19.5258426966 123% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 12.4196629213 56% => OK
Conjunction : 22.0 14.8657303371 148% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.3162921348 141% => OK
Pronoun: 26.0 33.0505617978 79% => OK
Preposition: 89.0 58.6224719101 152% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 12.9106741573 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2938.0 2235.4752809 131% => OK
No of words: 606.0 442.535393258 137% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.84818481848 5.05705443957 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.96155895361 4.55969084622 109% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.63862338392 2.79657885939 94% => OK
Unique words: 251.0 215.323595506 117% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.414191419142 0.4932671777 84% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 885.6 704.065955056 126% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 6.24550561798 48% => OK
Interrogative: 1.0 0.740449438202 135% => OK
Article: 11.0 4.99550561798 220% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 7.0 3.10617977528 225% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.38483146067 137% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 27.0 20.2370786517 133% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 23.0359550562 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.2299414045 60.3974514979 75% => OK
Chars per sentence: 108.814814815 118.986275619 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.4444444444 23.4991977007 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.66666666667 5.21951772744 70% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 7.80617977528 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 10.2758426966 117% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 5.13820224719 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.83258426966 145% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.268598174164 0.243740707755 110% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0839523330605 0.0831039109588 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0718840883746 0.0758088955206 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.163372035324 0.150359130593 109% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0602358846495 0.0667264976115 90% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.6 14.1392134831 89% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 48.8420337079 118% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 12.1743820225 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.15 12.1639044944 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.78 8.38706741573 93% => OK
difficult_words: 117.0 100.480337079 116% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.8971910112 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.2143820225 96% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.7820224719 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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