In the letter to the editor, the author tries to conclude that farmers are purposefully inflating the price of cream to yield profits. To buttress this argument, the author cites three specific evidences which suggests a decline in the cost of cream production, including the 25 percent rise in the number of diary farms in Relanna over the last decade, advances in milking technology which prominently beef up the efficiency of the milking process, and the reduced labour cost compared to what it was ten years ago. These evidences seem cogent, at first glance, to arrive at the conclusion of the author. However, there could be many alternative explanations, contrary to the proposed explanation, that account for the inflated price of cream.
To begin with, the author only mentions that the number of dairy of diary farms in Relanna has increased by 25 percent over the last decade without any information about the actual number of dairy farms. An alternative explanation could well be that there were only 5 dairy farms in Relanna 10 years ago and consequently 6 dairy farms considering the 25 percent rise the industry report.
Even the number of such dairy farms has increased by 25 percent, this increase is far too meagre to exert any significant impact on the price of cream.
Moreover, even the advances in milking technology greatly boost the efficiency of the milking process, it is still questionable whether farmers in Relannian are accessible to this technology.
Perhaps such innovations in technology, which requires a large sum of money to upgrade milking equipments, are simply to costly for farms, who are still more inclined to the conventional milking method despite its comparably low efficiency. Perhaps the cost saved by such innovations in technology fail to compensate for the expenditure of the technology itself, which in turn even increases the cost of milking process. Without considering these possibilities, it will be arbitrary to assume that advances in milking technology are bound to reduce the cost of cream production.
Similaly, despite the fact that labour costs are actually lower now than they were ten years ago, it is still possible that such reduction is too inconsequential to incur any changes in the production of milk. We simply do not know whether or how much the increased efficiency and lower labour costs contribute to the reduction of cost of cream production.
Finally, the author does not mention whether there are other factors at work to effect the price of cream. Perhaps the government of Relannian currently mandates a quality check of milk products, which will surely burden farms with extra cost. Or maybe the price of cow forage has surged dramatically over the past few years, adding extra cost for the farmers.
If these cases are true, then the author's claim that the farmers are inflating the price of cream will be significantly weakened.
To recapitulate, it is wrong to criticize farmers for intentionally inflating price without knowing their actual cost. We cannot infer that their actual cost in on the decline even with the evidence given in the letter.
Unless more concrete evidence can rule out these alternative explanations, the author's argument is untenable.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
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Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 42.0 19.5258426966 215% => Less to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 18.0 12.4196629213 145% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 14.8657303371 128% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.3162921348 97% => OK
Pronoun: 42.0 33.0505617978 127% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 115.0 58.6224719101 196% => OK
Nominalization: 23.0 12.9106741573 178% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 4269.0 2235.4752809 191% => OK
No of words: 779.0 442.535393258 176% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.48010269576 5.05705443957 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 5.28304566267 4.55969084622 116% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.02989135405 2.79657885939 108% => OK
Unique words: 376.0 215.323595506 175% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.482670089859 0.4932671777 98% => OK
syllable_count: 1352.7 704.065955056 192% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 6.24550561798 80% => OK
Article: 12.0 4.99550561798 240% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 10.0 3.10617977528 322% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 6.0 1.77640449438 338% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.38483146067 160% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 35.0 20.2370786517 173% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 23.0359550562 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 64.7827515467 60.3974514979 107% => OK
Chars per sentence: 121.971428571 118.986275619 103% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.2571428571 23.4991977007 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.4 5.21951772744 84% => OK
Paragraphs: 27.0 4.97078651685 543% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 6.0 7.80617977528 77% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 10.2758426966 117% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 19.0 5.13820224719 370% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.83258426966 83% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.500039073411 0.243740707755 205% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.12103040299 0.0831039109588 146% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.120087208232 0.0758088955206 158% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.142180564045 0.150359130593 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.131022601095 0.0667264976115 196% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.5 14.1392134831 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 40.69 48.8420337079 83% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.1 12.1743820225 108% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.8 12.1639044944 122% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.47 8.38706741573 113% => OK
difficult_words: 234.0 100.480337079 233% => Less difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 11.8971910112 126% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.2143820225 96% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 11.7820224719 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Write the essay in 30 minutes.
Maximum six paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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