By giving skewed views to young students, the formal education can be negative, unless they are well designed and monitored. That is, there are potential danger to be misused to manipulate people's minds and spirits. However, If the formal program is properly established, it will have positive effect on students. The apposite formal education equal quality of education and efficiently share the widely accepted value and virtue to younger generation. Moreover, by providing equal education opportunities, it contribute to enhancing individual welfare.
In the case that the educational curriculum is tendencious, Formal education may have negative effect on the younger generation. Because the partial and lopsided teaching contributes to forming the student's disrupted unconsciousness. As the french philosopher Foucault pointed out, the knowledge-power can be used to manipulate people's minds and spirits. Especially, if the formal education program is designed to adulate the current power, the foundation of spirit of democracy would be seriously defected. Because student would have less opportunities to think critical against the government in virtue of deficiency of transparent information. North Korea is one of the most salient example demonstrating this concern can be true.
However, when the education program is properly designed and carefully scrutinized, formal education can play a crux role in increasing the sense of cooperation and combination of the society as whole. In virtue of he formality of the standardized program, all educator can provide the universal and general education to all students over the nation, and these formal character of the program keeps the private opinions which may be erroneous at bay. Moreover, due to the common and shared program, students can learn efficiently the existing virtue and value which are accepted by the precursors. These learning would lessen the gap between generations.
Moreover, the standardized curriculum guarantees the equality of opportunity in education, so that commit to welfare of individuals as well. The well designed formal education is not so much bridling the people's mind and spirit as supporter to buttress freedom of individuals. The equality of opportunity in education is basic background for individuals to success with their own efforts. Unless the equality of education is not warranted, comparatively poorer people will lose their righteous chances to win the competition in the society. Only when the society have equal educational opportunity, everyone can enjoy their freedom in learning.
All in all, even though the formal education can be misused, there are also many positive aspects as well. Therefore, what we need to consider seriously is not whether the formal education is definitely bad or not, but how to control and manage the educational program.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you mean 'contributes'?
Suggestion: contributes
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Message: Did you mean 'fewer'? The noun opportunities is countable.
Suggestion: fewer
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Message: Did you mean 'of the formality'?
Suggestion: of the formality
...tion of the society as whole. In virtue of he formality of the standardized program, all educat...
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Suggestion:
...uld lessen the gap between generations. Moreover, the standardized curriculum gu...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, may, moreover, so, therefore, well
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 19.5258426966 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 12.4196629213 129% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 14.8657303371 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.3162921348 62% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 14.0 33.0505617978 42% => OK
Preposition: 53.0 58.6224719101 90% => OK
Nominalization: 23.0 12.9106741573 178% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2431.0 2235.4752809 109% => OK
No of words: 435.0 442.535393258 98% => OK
Chars per words: 5.58850574713 5.05705443957 111% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.56690854021 4.55969084622 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.08299432529 2.79657885939 110% => OK
Unique words: 222.0 215.323595506 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.510344827586 0.4932671777 103% => OK
syllable_count: 786.6 704.065955056 112% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.59117977528 113% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 6.24550561798 64% => OK
Article: 7.0 4.99550561798 140% => OK
Subordination: 10.0 3.10617977528 322% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.38483146067 91% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.2370786517 109% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 23.0359550562 82% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 39.8176629273 60.3974514979 66% => OK
Chars per sentence: 110.5 118.986275619 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.7727272727 23.4991977007 84% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.63636363636 5.21951772744 51% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 7.80617977528 51% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 10.2758426966 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 5.13820224719 97% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.83258426966 83% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.196815405261 0.243740707755 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.06336683486 0.0831039109588 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0487277444355 0.0758088955206 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.12246045364 0.150359130593 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0149581640418 0.0667264976115 22% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.8 14.1392134831 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 35.27 48.8420337079 72% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.1 12.1743820225 108% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.14 12.1639044944 124% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.3 8.38706741573 111% => OK
difficult_words: 130.0 100.480337079 129% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.8971910112 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.2143820225 86% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 11.7820224719 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 83.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 6
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